I think that you jumped to Malfoy being good too fast but good start!

Author's Response: Hmm... well thats your opinion! Thanks anyway! Chapter 7 is up! If you read on, I think you'll see why! xx V

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i love it you are a amazing writer keep it up

Author's Response: Thanks! Chapter 7 is up! xx V

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Hey! This is Ever, the author of Becoming Parents. Sorry for taking so long to read this!

So, I like this! I think you really have something hear. Can I offer some construsctive criticism?

Perhaps try and flesh out your writing? While your writing is good, its very blunt and to the point. Fill it in with details, desacription, and more dialogue. Try maybe adding some more descriptive adjectives?

Also, one thing I liked was how Hermione confused why Draco was being civil. I like to call this dramione canon(; I liked how it wasn't right off the bat "I trust you I know you changed even though you only showed me kindness for half a minute" XD

Your writing is about as realistic as dramione gets! Good job! I would be happy to review again, so you can expect to see me around again!

xx

Ever

oh, and one last thing! Thank you for the sweet review on Becoming Parents. Reviews like yours are what keep me writing.

Author's Response: Hello Ever!
Let me start off by saying how in love I am with your story Becoming Parents. That and Playing House with Malfoy (if you havent read it, you should!) are my absolute favourites on the site!

As for your constructive criticism, I cant say I wasn't dissapointed in myself, but no doubt I shall take your advice with a spoonful of sugar!

And yes I find that in many, Hermione is a little too willing to trust Draco. Thanks!

And I DO hope you'll review soon again! I hope you will notice the change of writing I publish. Thank you again so much for what a wonderful review!

xx

Vienna Alexandria Frost

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AMAZING CHAPTER! hopefully a new one will come soon! Can't wait to see who won the bet. Hope it's draco because it would be cute of him to take her on a date.
~LoVe_Sirius

Author's Response: Haha yes:) Thanks for reviewing! Chapter 7 is up! xx V

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Loving it. Please Update

Author's Response: Chapter 7 is up! Thank you:) xx V

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omg!! woop!! LOVE IT!!

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great so far. i didnt see harry as rude as that. so its a bit different to what i wouldve expected from harry but all in all a fantastic story. im really excited to see how malfoy gets along with the muggle world

Author's Response: Thank you! And i know, rather shocking! Well I try to keep the flow flowing, know what i mean? Thanks again! xx V

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please keep writing, will you? i think ive fallen in love with it :D

Author's Response: Haha thanks:) Chapter 7 is up now!
xx V

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love your story! can't wait for more! x

Author's Response: Thank you! xx V

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OMG! How could Harry say that!?
Loved this chapter!
Ginny rocks!

Author's Response: She does doesnt she? Thanks for the review! xxV

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LOVED IT!!
Sorry for not commenting on the others X_x im a silent reader hahaha xx

Author's Response: Haha its okay! Thank you for liking it! xxV

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I need more too!!
Upload the next chapter son, you're an amazing writer! :)

Author's Response: Thank you! Writing Chapter 6:)

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NEED MORE! Brilliant story. Can't wait to find out if Draco actually likes Hermione!
~LoVe_Sirius

Author's Response: Thank you! Im hoping you guys will be able to infer as Im not keen on revelations but we'll see!:) xx V

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Interesting chapter :) Can't wait to read more
~LoVe_Sirius

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Awww make more soon
You are a really talented writer

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! xx V

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i like the dramione but i'm stopping myself from liking it too much coz i have a feeling someone's gonna get hurt!?!?! :(

Author's Response: Oh please do like it! Maybe someone will get hurt... but remember in the end, love always prevail! xxV

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OMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!
You MUST update.SOON!
I absolutely less than three (

Author's Response: Thanks! Currently updating next chapter! xx V

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i love your story soo much can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you love! xxV

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Ugh! How could he? That hot, evil git! But if it was his and his father's idea, then how come hermione was the one who suggested it? And his initial reaction didn't seem like he actually wanted to go through with the plan. And he didn't make a move earlier? Cuz you said that it was two months after the snogging session right?

Which year does this story take place in btw?

But I love your story so far! Please keep writing! Eagerly awaiting the next update! (:

Author's Response: I should've clarified more... Malfoy's father doesnt know. Obviously if he had to lie to Blaise about liking Hermione! This story takes place in 6TH year:) Thanks for the eager review! xx V

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PLEASE KEEP WRITING THIS STORY!

Author's Response: I will be!:) xx V

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Better. Excellent choice of metaphors although you may want yo reconsider the whole leg wrapping business.

Author's Response: *To. Thanks for the compliment.

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You`re not sopposed to use actual numbers in stories. Write it out

Author's Response: And where is this rule written?

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*you're *house very thrilling

Author's Response: Thanks. Grammar police aren't we haha?

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*Lavender and I. Idean is good, you need better transitions.

Author's Response: This is fanfiction... i hope youre not expecting top level writing!

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Really excited to see where this goes.

Author's Response: Thank You! Currently updating!:) xxV

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