What a different approach to writing a story. I like the way it was written including the para theses :) the Scamanders are people I like reading about just because their mom is Luna and it's always fun to see how they turned out. Course I've forgotten which one you were writing about but I liked it all the same because the man is odd but not too odd (because we are all odd).

He seems very melancholy and almost apathetic throughout this. I kind of like that we can't tell how old he is. I kind of think he is an old man and being all nostalgic and stuff. But oh well, I don't necessarily need to know that. It's just fun to read it in the viewpoint of an older man and then read in the viewpoint of a younger as you either feel like this is the way he should feel when he is old or you pity him.

As always, your writing is excellent.

xChar

Author's Response: I forget from time to time which one he is as well. :) They're both so similar, you know, being twins and all.

Anyway, thank you so much for your kind words! They mean a lot to me, and I'm absolutely flattered that you would take the time to leave a review. Thank you, thank you, thank you.

Apathetic is a good word, m'thinks, to describe him. I hadn't thought of it before, but it definitely makes sense. And the old/young thing does too, because I hadn't had a specific age in mind when I sat down to write it.

Thank you, again, for your review! It is much appreciated. Here's to hoping your day goes splendid-ly.

x Rin

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I really like this. It feels very real. I feel as though I have stepped into Lysander's character for a moment.
I do wish some more things had been explained, though. About Lysander and Rose's history, especially.
I love the format (the way it says "this is _" and then elaborates. It pulls me into the story.
This story is well written and just beautiful, if vague.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review. I think a lot of it was left vague intentionally, because I really just wanted to highlight little moments throughout his life. Either way, thank you again. Your comments are very much appreciated,

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Hello, it's Sarah from the TGS review exchange. ^ ^

I'm so glad I received this one-shot in the exchange, because it might have slipped past my notice otherwise, being a completed story that only sees the recently added page once. There was a bare-bones, child-like quality to it that I found really refreshing and insightful. It was like legitimately seeing through the eyes of another person, flaws and truths and all. Very vulnerable, and I felt that it was definitely a powerful contributor to what made it so magical as a whole.

I find myself very curious now about little things you left open-ended, because it wasn't a story that needs every stitch closed, since life doesn't work that way. We were given a glimpse - the briefest snapshot - and now we're free to work out how Luna died and why she covered her mirror with a pillowcase and why Rose slapped him and what happened on the day the wine spilled. I like that, it gives way to imagination and now I have to think up my own backstory for those things.

The format, the "this is me", "this is my floor", "those are scuff marks" - I imagined him pointing at them, showing everything to me, to everyone, just displaying it. But it was more than showing me some stains and marks and furniture - he was showing me bits of himself, and his story, and it was such a lovely way to tell it. Counting raindrops on the window and whispering secrets into boxes - the catharsis - those were perfect accents to his life. It makes me feel like he lived a lonely but somewhat whimsical life, a very genuine one, and that every day of his life he was no one but himself. Or that's how I interpreted it, anyway. :)

Very well done. 10/10

Author's Response: I'm so sorry it's taken me this long to respond! It's such a lovely review, and I wasn't quite sure how to tackle it all at once because I really, really wanted to do it justice.

Anyway. Firstly: thank you! All your comments are just... they're completely spot-on, and I appreciate them whole-heartedly. Am especially grateful that you've actually gone through and spent time to point out specifics that you liked. The review just completely makes my day.

I really tried to be as genuine as possible when I was going through and crafting the story, so I'm absolutely tickled that you mentioned the genuine accent of it. It may be hard to catch, I think, if you're not reading carefully. And I, too, love the whole vulnerability of his character here, and so I'm just really, really flattered that you liked it too.

Anyway, thank you again. You've left an absolute gem of a review.

xx

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This is so beautifully written and captivating it literally took my breath away! 100/10

Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! That really means a lot to me. Thanks for the review!

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I love this style! It reminds me of the main character's narration in Beginners with Ewan McGregor - dunno if you've seen it. I'm glad you used it, it's a nice change from what people usually write - it's quite refreshing. Reading it for the first time gives the impression that there's something between the lines that might be missed, so I read it over the second time. I don't know if I'm reading more into this than I should, but this is a rather intriguing piece - you can either read it an accept it at face value, or try to read between the lines. If it's the former, then excuse my rambling, if it isn't, then you're very clever.

I like that you chose Lysander too, and he isn't the stereotypical strange offspring of Luna and Rolf. Kinda makes sense too because there was also much more to Luna than people saw.

Happy Holidays!
Lia

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! What's surprising about this little piece is that it has more than 100 reads, and you're my first reviewer! I was beginning to worry that there was something terribly wrong with it. :P

But you've eased all my fears. I have, in fact, seen that movie, and I totally get where you're coming from when it sounds kind of like him! I saw it a few months ago when it came out, but I just now watched the trailer again to refresh my memory.

And gah, it was a little daunting to post, because I've never seen anything like it. In terms of style, I mean. But I'm so, so pleased that you enjoyed it. That really makes my day.

And in terms of between the lines... I'd say there's definitely something there if you look a little hard. There's something about Lysander's character that, I feel, is a little clearer if the thing is carefully read. But. I dunno if I did that purposefully, or if it just happened all on its own. :)

Thank you so, so much for the review. It is very much appreciated, and you're absolutely lovely.

x
Rin

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