Good job, nice teaser,
just work on your grammar! I love the plot so far! Report Review
i really liked the start into the story, the first paragraph was really good and intense and got me into reading your story. i feel like it is really something special. I could really feel the danger and fear.
But i didnīt like the rest of the chapter that well, i know you wrote it is only sort of a filler, but it seemed a little bit to light (and to much like a lot of stories I have read before), after the more dramatic start. Well I see that the next chapter will be more of Lilyīs diary, so Iīll be happy to read that.
Please donīt take it bad that I didnīt like it that much.Author's Response: It's all good. I know the rest of the first chapter was crap but I just wanted to let everyone see they way she acts and get to know her and Hugo so they can see how much they change. The next chapter is when they first invaded Hogwarts. Please read. Hahahaha. Thanks for the Review :D Report Review
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