Please update soon! It's a great first chapter. Really intriguing, but really sweet too. I want to know what happens that creates the messy love affair she gets herself in!!

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This chapter is such a cute way to start the story XD
I love James to pieces! He is supermegafoxyawesomehot! :D
Lucy seems like a great character to base the story around. I love her witty humour :)
Anyway update soon!

~BlameItOnTheNargles

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I'm hopefully first? :P
Kay, so first of all, seeing the banner weeks ago definitely makes me want to read it and after days and it still didn't come up on the newly validated list, I started thinking, "Maybe Daryl only made it for a plunny that would never develop?"

BUT YOU DID DEVELOP IT AND OH HOW GLAD AM I THAT YOU DID.

This is brilliant. Seriously.

I love how you start this slow. Some background information to build up Lucy's character and how she comes to get close to James, yus! The words on the banner and chapter 1 really clash with each other, the banner screaming FUN FUN FUN while this chapter is full of adorableness that fill me with warmth like a mug of hot coco after riding a broomstick on a rainy night. Have I mentioned that Lucy is just adorable and squishable? Yes, that is a word in my dictionary.

I wonder how Lucy's going to fall for Al after James' cheeky stunt, doing that to poor, tired Lucy. All the more reason you need to write more.

WRITE MORE OR I WILL DELETE YOUR PHOTOSHOP AND EVERY OTHER PROGRAMS IN EVERY COMPUTER/LAPTOP AROUND YOU UNTIL ALL THAT'S LEFT IS WORD AND NOTEPAD.

Nope, there is no pressure pressed in this review. :)

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