try not to use so much space between parts of the story it's really annoying Report Review
I notice your chapters are a bit short... good, but slightly too short for my liking.
9/10Author's Response: thanks 4 reviewing. im sorry about that i try and make them long but it dosent seem to be working. Report Review
Very good please update soon!Author's Response: thanks 4 reading titch. Report Review
This is very good, a few minor spelling mistakes but nothing major. I like the concept of Draco having a little sister and the insight into everyone's feelings!Author's Response: thanks. my spelling has never benn strong. i have had this conceprt playing over in my head 4 a while. Report Review
Another nice chapter and only one or two spelling errors, for example the correct way to spell father is without an r between the a and t.
You have started to have me wondering what role Draco's sister is going to have in this story. So 8/10 and moving on.Author's Response: thanks again since its half term ive been writting more. and im sorry my spelling is very bad Report Review
Well I found that the start of your story was interesting and alright. Your main character sounds interesting, I'll just have to wait and see where you go with her before I comment further.
You do have a few grammer errors (which don't appear to impede the plot in any way) which are easily corrected. If I may make a suggestion, type out the chapter on word 2003 or 2010 and set your spell check to uk english. You can make any corrections at that point and copy the chapter onto the site.
9/10 for your start awaiting your update.Author's Response: thank you so much. i will be trying to update as the sight lets me Report Review
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