Haha, this was really good. I loved the way you wrote the action scenes, and loved the way you characterised Bellatrix - she was just right, I thought. This one had hardly any errors, and I laughed at Dumbledore's line at the end. :P
MarauderLover7.Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I am really glad that you like it!
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this is a gorgeous piece i love it :) very descriptive but also real at the same time. unlike some stories the dialouge followed effortlessly with the text. also unique :)
only critisim would be that its a bit confusing in the sense it feels like it needs some background to it so the reader can understand where Lily and James' relationship is at this point before the end.
otherwise well done
xxAuthor's Response: Ya. Thank you. I included it in the A?N, because, as I said, I attempted to write a novel around that scene (At the End), but I am horrible at writing beginnings to stories. Thank you for the review! Only one I've got so far on this story;( .sadly! Report Review
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