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Review #1, by FredWeasleyIsMyKing Truth

19th March 2015:

Here for gryffindor in the review competition.

So. Wow. This wasn't what I was expecting at all. This was so heartbreaking. I'm a massive Lily and James fan... Always will be. But I felt so awful for this girl. Clearly she thinks so much of James but unfortunately for her, his heart just belongs to Lily.

Your descriptions were wonderful in this. I completely empathised with this poor poor girl. It just broke my heart to read. The first part was particularly powerful, just the way she's trying desperately to convince herself that she doesn't care when she quite obviously does.

To say you've barely used any dialogue in this you've done a fantastic job. This was a great one shot, and really different. Well done!!

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