Write more. Write it now. It's so awesome! Report Review
OOOH, the plot is thick like molasses right now!
This is a fantastic story :D
Love your writing! Report Review
loving it, man. THE PLOT IS SO THICK, it's great. UPDATE SOOON. please?
pretty please? Report Review
THE PLOT THICKENS. i love this story, it actually has a plotline which is interesting. ONTO CHAPTER 5! Report Review
Very nice. I really like Lucy, she's a nice change from all those sweet, awkward characters :) Report Review
GO GO GO. I want to kill Caitlin, js. and rOse. Not Callum surprisingly. Definately not poor ol scorpy and Louis. Lucy makes me pee. GO GO GO UPDATE Report Review
Oh my gosh, what an absolutely conniving and crappy thing to do! I'm completely on Louis and Lucy's side now - THEY MUST BRING HIM DOWN. Poor Scorp... :(
I am intrigued to discover some of Callum's darkest secrets... Something tells me I'm going to inevitably end up sympathising with him after all though.
I'm excited for the next chapter! :D
~Maddie x Report Review
One word to describe my feelings on this chapter. EPIC. I'm quite glad that we got to see Callum's POV. It clears up some stuff and gets us wondering some stuff as well. BRILLIANT. Trust me, I know how hard it can be to write from a guys POV. Your never 100 percent sure how they think, so you have to observe and imagine. Overall you did a good job, better than me anyway.
To me, Rose= extremely popular, pretty, close to Albus, and confusing
Bridget= not as loony as her aunt, perky, popluar material, pschyic
I have to say, I like Bridget a bit more than Rose. Okay, A LOT more than Rose, but I'm not one to judgemental so lets see what happens.
As for Albus I have just two words. Teenage Heartthrob or however you spell it. I know we dont have a lot of info on him but it just seems like it ya noe.
Callum Davies. He's quite the mystery so I cant give you my input just yet. As for Lucy, I LOVE HER! As ou know from my last review.
Louis is by far my favorite character. I dont know why, but he seems a lot like me so I'm hoping we'd be friends ina weird universe.
I dont know what it is about your story, but it makes me perky. IM. NEVER. PERKY. SO you must be an extremely talented author so NEVER stop writing. EVER. Report Review
GAH! THIS STORY IS SHEER BRILLIANCE!! COMPLETE AND UTTER BRILLIANCE! IVE ONLY READ A CHAPTER AND I ALREADY LOVE IT!! Is it normal to be this happy? I love the idea of a "not so nice" Wotter. I mean like, everyone assumes that they musty be nice, especially Molly and Lucy because of who their father is.
I for one love Lucy and Louis's relationship. Its not best friend material but you can tell that theyre close. It helps that theyre outcasts of their family. So in a weird way, they are best friends and I love that.
To sum it all up, I LOVE YOUR STORY!! (im guessing you probably got that vibe) Report Review
I remember reading this months ago, and then you didn't update for ages and I kind of forgot about it.
I AM SORRY.
I really love this so far! Bridget is so freaking quirky omg and Scorpius is so happy and just yes I love it. And you don't get many stories with Lucy or Molly as the central character, so this is good.
WHO IS ANNA YOU MUST TELL ME is she his squib sister or muggle girlfriend or whatever wow.
Dai and Fergus are very cool cats. I like cool cats.
Rose doesn't seem like the nicest person at all; bit of a backstabbing heartless wench. But I guess you get them around sometimes.
Caitlin isn't my favourite either :P
And the plot is coming together wow I am excited yes wooo please update soon I will give you rainbows and lollipops Report Review
Oo, I love this. UPDATE. UPDATE. UPDATE. Complete it. Just for me. You know. Random stranger who loves the story. But yeah. Report Review
This story's just so... original. I love it! :) I especially like how both Callum and Lucy are up to something so it's not like... one sided. :P :D Report Review
HEY! So, like, I really love your story, it's fab. :) Like, I REALLY love it. But I just was wondering if you knew that there's this girl who just posted a story with a description and general plot eerily similar to yours. It's Just Business by Pottergirl7 sorry for wasting your time, just thought it might be worth looking into!
Update soon! :) Report Review
This story is seriously awesome - please, please, please update soon so I can read more!
I love your characterisation and the switches between perspectives, it's all very convincing and as I said before, full of awesomeness!!
On tenterhooks until the next chapter is released... Report Review
Oooh, I really like this twist in the plot.
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, please update as soon as youc an. Report Review
Loving it! Callum and Lucy are the best in all their bitterness and ostracism. Can't wait for the next chapter! Report Review
Oooh wow, I loved the story twist, Callum's POV is
pretty interesting, I can't wait to watch the sparks fly,
post soon! :) Report Review
Wow, haha, I absolutely love this story. :) It's so... dramatic, and dynamic, you know?
And so... twisted. Like, it's one of those places where you can't trust anyone, you know? I love it!
Please continue. :) Report Review
So..Lucy's using Callum and Callum's using Lucy, Dai's using both of them, Caitlin's using Callum and Rose is using Scorpius? Wow. I absolutely love it! :D
It's all getting really twisty and plotty and everyone has a hidden agenda. The chemistry between Callum and Lucy (Lallum? Calucy? Meh, not quite.) is incredible. So the reason why he's doing all of this is for money? I'm guessing there's definitely a lot more going on at home or something, I think the letter was for a little sister. Whatever's going on, I'm extremely intrigued!
I adore Bridget! Very Luna-esque. She's just great :)
I can't wait for the next update :) (UNPLANNED RHYME!)
~Maddie x Report Review
Oh, I love your Lucy! It's so refreshing to read a character who's actually strong and intelligent and isn't so emotional and melodramatic. I'm interested in Callum's back story. You write him well and he vaguely reminds me of Patrick from 10 Things I Hate About You, especially the rumours about him selling a kidney.
All your characters are so full of personality and your premise is really intriguing! I can tell that you're really in control of the plot. I look forward to your next update :) Report Review
I'm well impressed with your story. I think the style of writing and the plot are engaging and exciting. Overall, I'm looking forward to another chapter. :) Report Review
Can you please continue to update tug of war, Thankyou :D Report Review
oh, can't wait to see where this all goes, very exciting!! love dai so far, but hate rose! Report Review
Loved this chapter!!
I really can't wait to find out what's going to happen next, please update as soon as you can. Report Review
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