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Review #1, by juliana63 The Unguarded Moment

22nd August 2012:
Will you please please please write more!?

Author's Response: I'm taking this as a compliment?! Thank you. Unfortunately I'm not in a very creative place at the moment and I'm scared I would ruin the story if I tried to continue but thank you for your support anyway!

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Review #2, by thesinandthesinner The Unguarded Moment

22nd December 2011:
This was incredible. I loved the diction, the words you chose to illustrate the characters, it was so well written! I have never seen the Marauder's portrayed like this and I loved this. I would love to see more of this if you ever decided to develop it further!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the compliments, especially about my writing. I will definitely have to consider possibly developing it further and seeing what else I could do to add to it. I'm also so glad to hear that you've never seen the Marauders portrayed like that before. I definitely aim to give something different. Thank you again for the review.

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Review #3, by HarryGinny05 The Unguarded Moment

20th December 2011:
Well done!!! I am just disappointed that this is just a one chapter thing

Author's Response: I am glad to hear you are keen for another chapter! Unfortunately, I intended to only write a one off and I haven't had any new ideas recently so I couldn't add to it. However, this will not (hopefully) be the last time I will attempt a James/Lily.

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Review #4, by SilverRoses The Unguarded Moment

13th December 2011:
That was cute :)
Though I did aways like to think it was love at first sight for James, I love reading how others think it happened.

It's also nice how it's sort of through James' perspective.
Very nicely written, 10/10! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your response.
From the beginning my purpose has been to challenge the norm and offer something different, thus I wanted to really explore an alternative scenario of James liking her well beyond their first year.
I also intended to write it in a third person omniscient perspective but in the end I settled with providing more of James' thoughts and his point of view.
Thank you so much for the rating and compliments, I really appreciate it.


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Review #5, by SmilieFace The Unguarded Moment

1st December 2011:
I think this was beautifully written! Kudos to you!

Author's Response: Thank you so much

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Review #6, by ginerva_molly_weasley The Unguarded Moment

1st December 2011:
Wow I love this!

I'd never really imagined how James would really get to like Lily apart from maybe at first sight but this gave a whole different spin on things which I really enjoyed reading.

The description you give of the surroundings really helps the reader imagine the type of day and what the room would actually be like which helps us to experience the story a little bit more

Welldone I really liked it

GinevraMollyPotter

Author's Response:
I have read a lot of James/Lily and most of them have James liking her from first year so I thought it would be interesting to set him apart in this piece and give it a go. My purpose with this piece definitely was to give a fresh perspective as for some reason I've always imagined James liking her later on in his schooling.

Thank you for the praise, writing fiction is something completely new/bizarre for me so thanks again for the confidence boost.


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