I thought that was just adorable. Very cute and good job with it. :]

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i really enjoyed reading this! this inspired me to write a one-shot about a wotter child before hogwarts- is that okay, by the way? don't want to look like i'm copying you or anything :p
this was absolutely adorable, and i really liked how you captured his rivalry with james. i always thought that ginny would get on better with james, and harry with albus, too! so i'm glad i'm not the only one who picked up on that in the epilogue ;D
the only fault i can see is that his thoughts sound way too advanced for a three year old (he would be three, as that's the age most children start nursery in england). but it was still amusing to read!
bea xo

Author's Response: Oh no, that's perfectly fine! ^^ In fact, I'd be curious to read it, actually.
Yay, another fellow person who got that dynamic! *cheers* I'm glad you liked it. :) And I researched it and some sources but it in the four/five-ish age range, which was what I thought myself, but there you go. I probably made him a /tad/ mature though. (understatement much?) xD
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This was cute. In fact, it wasn't cute, it was ADORABLE! I loved how this had a different feel to it. Usually when people post stories about Albus, James, and such it's about them being in their Hogwarts years. This is totally different, and it kind of brought back memories when I first started kindergarten. I loved how you also tied this up with the Odyssey. Not only did I find that neat, but I found that it fitted the story perfectly. Anyway, it was a great read! And I can't help but want to snuggle ickle-Albus now.

Author's Response: Aw, thanks for suce a sweet review. :3 I'm glad that you liked the different spin on things, and hopefully it brought fond memories (it did for me) xD Oh yes, Adorkable Albus. FREE SNUGGLES FOR ALL! :D
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cute! so sweet! I loved it! the only thing I'd change would maybe be some of the vocab used by Albus, because well, he's four. I also love the Doctor Who reference because I am a huge doctor who fan haha and let me just say, bowties are cool :D

Author's Response: I'm gald you liked it. Al is completely adorkable and extremely fun to write. :D && DOCTOR WHO IS AWESOME OK OK. :')

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Oh my Rowling, that was adorable. This would be a great little adventure if you continued as Albus grows up before Hogwarts. 10/10!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Hmm... an Albus short story collection sounds like a great idea; I might start a little side project on that if any good ideas strike me. We'll see. :)

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Aww I love this so much. So cute! I just want to pick Albus up and give him a hug. The one thing I would say is that sometimes both James and Albus seem a little too old - Albus sometimes seems more like about six or seven rather than four - but I know how difficult it is to write from the POV of a small child, so well done!

Author's Response: Hehe, thanks. Albus is just so huggable. xD I agree, they might seem a year or two too old, but Al could possibly be more mature in his thoughts. xD Thank you for leaving a review!

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awesome, awesome, AWESOME! WRITE SO MUCH MORE

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Don't worry, I'll be writing lots during the queue closure. xD

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Awww this is so cute :) don't know how else to put it. Just all around fluffiness and adorableness :) I can just picture whats going on exactly in my mind.

Author's Response: Yay, I'm really glad you liked this! It was so fun to write about adorable Albus! xD

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Aw. That was very sweet and cute! I love the way Albus' mind works. Creating a little odyssey of his own. I really like the 'bond' or relationship between James and Albus. Aww. This story is perfection! I can't any thing more. 20/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it. ^_^

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I really like the story, the idea of Albus creating his own odyssey was great and I liked the way you used his four year old imagination to your advantage in this story. However, it’s my opinion that in a few parts of this story Albus doesn’t sound like a 4 year old but more like a 6 year old, in some parts where you use descriptive words that make the story more interesting and captivating, for this story it just doesn’t work as well, don’t get me wrong it’s a lovely story but it could have done with a bit more 4 year old thought and less 6 year old.
Again your writing style for this one is defiantly one of your strong styles, it’s really easy to follow and by the end leaves with the desire to read stories about Albus growing up in the Potter household.
It’s a really good story and I enjoyed reading it :)

-SS

Author's Response: Hmm, that is a good point. Albus's thought process was semi-inspired by my little cousins and brother, who are, admittedly, a bit older than four, so I see where you're going there. However, we see most of his thought process, so what he thinks about his surroundings could be more sophisticated than what he actually says and does, and he might not even realize some details about what he notices that the reader do, if that makes sense. Also, I like to think of him as a really smart child. xD

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I loved this story :) u did the james nd albus characters really well - albus was soo cute :) nd i love tht it had an odyssey theme to it - i love the greek epics :) is the pig not being a pig but a man based on the circe part of the odyssey - so cever :) but where in the odyssey is there poison apples? I cant remember tht bit :/ xx overall i loved it :) well done x

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Yay for Greek epics! They're so... epic. (Haha, lame attempt at pun. xD) Yes, that's the Circe part. There aren't any poisoned apples--that's just regular fairy tales-- but at the Land of the Lotus Eaters, there is enchanted food, so yeah. :D

~Khanh

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Oh, so cute! Albus is adorable... And I think you did James's relationship with him nicely.
This is great, thank you for entering it. :)

Author's Response: No, thank you for the awesome idea! :) It was great fun writing this... Albus was easy to channel, especially since I grew up with a cousin a year older than me. xD

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I'm really enjoying getting to read all your stories -- the more I read, the more I genuinely enjoy it, and I always love coming back and finding another small adventure waiting for me in a few clicks. You are really a good writer, and this story was so absolutely adorable!

This story -- I LOVED it. It was so, so, so cute and my heart got those pleasant squeezies that come from reading something you genuinely enjoy. It's truly one of the best next-generation one-shots I've ever read, and I do mean that. There's no tension or angst or false humor about it -- it is what it is, and you let the story tell itself, rather than force it out. The whole thing just flew by, and I was rather sad when it ended!

I'm really having a hard time finding things to tell you, but I REALLY enjoyed this, so much. :3 You captured the emotions of a child's first day at nursery school SO well! I don't laugh aloud while reading a lot of fic, even though I find a lot funny -- in general, I don't laugh aloud a lot, that's how my personality is -- but this elicited a lot of warm smiles and a few giggles. "Pri-skoo" and "odd sea" especially -- those were genius.

The only thing I saw is, sometimes you slip into 'mom' after using 'mum'. I'm American (which I think I've told you), so I'm not going to say THIS WAY'S RIGHT, etc., but consistency is key.

Going into my favorites -- I enjoyed this so, so, so much, Khanh, and really look forward to the next time I get to read something of yours. Fantastic job! ♥

Author's Response: Jane! This review was just so ajfakjskaf;sak amazing that I don't think I'm doing it any justice through my response. Thank you so much! ^^

I'm really glad that you enjoyed it; I had a lot of fun writing it.

(High five for being American! xD) Ack. I'll go and fix those up... my fingers are so accustomed to typing "mom". xD

~Khanh

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This was absolute beautiful! I'm not sure I can put words to how easily this story flowed and how easy it was to get absorbed. I also adore how it was in Albus's point of view as a four year old. The descriptions were so rich, and it honestly made me imagine things the way he saw them and talked about them. Especially when he actually made it to preschool. I loved the teacher as a witch and the playground as a dragon. Those descriptions were so intricate, yet so fitting for a four year old! I also love his attitude towards his brother...how some times he agreed with his brother, and other times he didn't and wasn't afraid to say so (at least in his head!). I also love how he looks up to his dad. The end? I was a little teary eyed!

Two small things, and then my favorite line.

'"ALBUS!" My mum was frantically yelling my name frantically.' -Frantically is in the sentence twice.

"Today she's a traitor who was taking me to an evil land faraway." -You have present tense with she’s, but past tense with was.

"And I suppose you're going to tell me that pigs aren't pigs, and really men?" -This line definitely made me laugh. I'm not quite sure why…I think it's just how you have it written, the way Albus says it…defiantly has a four year old mentality that you have to love! Favorite line, by far!

Very good job! It was absolutely amazing!
~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Thank you so much for such a lovely review! I'm really glad that you liked the descriptions... It was something I was told I needed work on on my other story, so this was great fun to write. :D

Thanks for catching those errors, I'll fix them up soon! :)

~Khanh

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OH MI GOD THAT WAS SO CUTE!

I'm loving little Albus much better than the older one and I could just huggle him to death. This is a really cure and innocent story and I love the way you've described Al and James, it sounded so real!

This is going be be short because this was so cute and perfect in every sngle way possible. Could I possibly stal your plot bunny?

Once again, loved it, no faults, keep writing!

June
Ravenclaw

Author's Response: Hi there! I'm so glad that you liked it that much. :D

Writing James and Al was part of a challenge (Al is supposed to be overshadowed by James), so I'm glad I pulled that off well. :D

~Khanh

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Good job! Really sweet story!!

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review! I'm glad you liked it! :)

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That was just so cute! Love it, so MUCH!
~ deathlyhallowsmaster24

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :)
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This is lovely!

There are very few family fics around here and this is one of the best. It's veru cute and has some really funny parts. I love how you have Albus at such a young age taking a big 'journey' and creating his own story, his own adventure.
I also like the fact that you used Homer's quote (what better story is there about journey that the Odyssey) and Doctor Who:D

Great work!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! :)

Everyone needs a family fic once in a while, and I got hit by a flash of inspiration (Quite literally... my little cousin was starting his first day as well. xD)

~Khanh

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