Wow. This was really deep! I loved it! Wish it were longer, though. Happy holidays! Report Review
I loved this i thought it was very well writen.Author's Response: thank you :) Report Review
It's a shame, that this is just a one-shot.
It is very beautiful, very touching! I really enjoy your writing, all the feelings you put into it; amazing!
It feels like as if it has come right out of your heart, and this is why I really like it!
Greetings from GermanyAuthor's Response: thank you, i do plan to one day turn it into a longer story, but thats a while off i'm afraid... :) Report Review
This is one of the best Sirius/OC's I have ever read! This is truly brilliant. I like how Juniper wasn't one of those 'gossipy, typical girls'. It's also cool that you made Sirius likeable, yet having his flaws too. (Though I imagine his arrogance got him into some amount of trouble)
I don't have much to point out on- that is, what you should work on but I do wish you would have described why exactly he didn't recognize Juniper at first? I mean in the Order meeting. He only really looked at Juniper when she said her name.
-DeeAuthor's Response: Thank you so much :)
I think I generally feel that the latter third of the story is a bit too rushed, and would love to go back and rewrite it a bit. It will take a while before I'll get round to it, but I'll take your suggestion into consideration.
Preferably I think I'd actually like to develop this oneshot into a novella, but we'll see :) Report Review
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