Hi, hplover_987 here with your review for my Pureblood challenge.
I didn't see any grammar issues here which is always a good sign but I wasn't looking for them, none that stand out. You explored the character here and didn't go for the whole ego the size of Hogwarts, lady's man, mix of James I and Sirius, a lot of people do that and it annoys me. The flow for this was nice and everything made sence. The first paragraph was like a mini background/introduction about James' school career from start up to now. You really showed the family side when James thought/spoke of his cousins and home. You really showed how others see him and banter about family and blood when he spoke to Scorp. James is shown as caring, funny, mischevious, thoughtful and quite likable. Characterization of everybody was great.
Not so good points
I think you could of explored the character even more and shown what it is like to be the son of Harry and Ginny Potter and what its like for a nearly pureblood in that era. Have things changed from the times of 'mudblood' being a Slytherin's fave word.
What I liked
The characterisation of James was great and all the other characters was really good to. I loved the prank and it was written really well which isn't always easy to do. I also liked seeing James' caring side with his family and Albus and his interesting relationship with Scorp. It wasn't really what I'd call a friendship but they didn't hate eachother, there was loads of banter between them.
What I wasn't so keen on
Again the only problem I have with this is not exploring the characters feelings/thoughts and others feelings on blood purity and what its really like for them.
I really like this for an entry and think to delve into James really well and how he is to you not just to everybody else on here and the forums. A really good entry. Well done :) xx
p.s. could you please edit your summary or AN to say you have entered this for hplover_987's Pureblood challenge please.Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Glad to hear you liked it! Report Review
Hey there, it's Laura or Rose Wilts from the forums here with your review!
I don't really have anything negative and/or constructive to say about this fic - but I guess maybe that is good news to you.
It was really light and entertaining, but you didn't let it become a fic about nothing. It was nice seeing the bond between Scorpius and James. I really like the idea of them being friends - it's something I haven't seen written before, so well done on choosing such an original friendship.
I think you write very well. In a clear, not overly descriptive style that suits this piece very well. Great job! I thoughroughly enjoyed it!Author's Response: That is good news!
I'm glad you liked it, because I was honestly unsure of where it was going while writing it until I wrote what I wrote and it just happened. Lol. James and Scorpius just came to me as friends one day when I was thinking about how to make the ScoRose that I was writing different, then these two got their own prequel one-shots. Weird.
Anywho, thank you so much for the review!! I am so glad you enjoyed it! Report Review
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