I like the sense that it isn't only a romance, that there is also a sends of adventure with Harry's work thing. I also love the quidditch game, it was cute that Imogen was so worried about James. It was adorable. The comment I had about your sentence structure doesn't really pertain to this chapter, I think you got it mostly worked out! I can't wait for a new chapter!!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Once again, I really appreciate it :]

I know it's been a bit slow getting started, but now that I've set the scene, everything should start to get going a bit more.

I didn't realise how difficult writing Quidditch would be! I'll definitely have to work on that...

Lydi xx

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Great chapter again! I love the scene with Harry and Lily. That was adorable. I thought you wrote the awkward dinner really well, because you really captured all the tension! You put in great detail and create a really clear image of what you are thinking. I am off to read the next chapter! Yay!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

Harry and Lily's scene was one of my favourites to write :]

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Hey! I think this is really good. I love the way you focus on different characters at different times, giving you different perspectives without really going into the first person. I love the names Imogen and Felix. They are both really original and memorable. If I had one piece of advice, it would be that maybe clarify your sentence structure a little. You have a lot of detail, which is great, but sometimes the sentences get a little confusing. For example, the last sentence of the first paragraph focusing on Ginny, about Lily's habits when lying. That I got lost on. Other than that, I love all your characters! They are bright and interesting and I can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I really appreciate it :]

I'm kind of gutted that I can't use Imogen and Felix for my future children now, haha, should have thought about that before really...

Thanks for the advice about sentence structure, I will definitely take it into account :]

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Wow! Love it already, although I always imagined Harry and Ginny's house to resemble the Burrow..

Author's Response: That's the great thing about fanfiction - that everyone has different ideas of how everything would turn out. :]

I truly appreciate the review,
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Great start! I loved your characters, and it feels like you really got James down, personality wise. i love the way he's just rifling through Harry's things, and the references to the mirror and the locket. Can't wait to see where this goes :)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I really appreciate it :]
Sometimes it's difficult to forget fanon and I'm trying hard to stick to the JKR's characters so I'm very glad you like James :]

Lydi xx

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