Oooh time skip.
I love the way you made Draco recognise that she was familiar because of the war (just the fact that he could see that look and he could understand her)
So much fog in this - I love that it can be related to so many things when I'd never have thought it could represent half as much.
Ooh yes I'm seeing the differences in the plot now (because somehow my horrible memory is actually recalling a little of what happened in your last version - or maybe I just think I remember and I'm actually making things up, who knows)
Ooh ooh I got really excited and intrigued when I read this bit, "The more Draco found his head full of fog, the more troubled became. So when he met Astoria Greengrass again later that day in the Leaky Cauldron and found out that she was a Healer, he knew he couldn't let her go." Has all of the modifying and things Draco's been doing started to reverse and seep into his brain like radiation effects or something or is someone else going into his brain or what? Very excited. I know you won't answer that though :P Oh! But fog and things could Astoria play a part in his mind? Did she do something to him years ago or did they have some sort of connection or something? I'm going to stop guessing things now before I keep rambling on and on about things I don't know!
I see you were part way through chapter three...how far to go now? ;) This must be a hell of a story to write though, so complex and mysterious and beautifully worded and all.
Looove this story ♥Author's Response: Mysterious time skip, all timey-wimey and skippy~
There are...many plot differences. I'm not even sure what the current plot is, it's been so long since I tried to write this!
I should probably keep it quiet, haha! You'd be right in thinking the research has addled Draco's own mind - that's hardly a big plot secret, I was going to make it clear from the next chapter onwards :P As for Astoria, er, wait and see until the year 3000, when I will finally update this story...!
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I've been meaning to read this updated version for ages but I never got around to it so I'm finally here! Because I love your idea for this and I really hope you get the inspiration (and ideas and whatnot) to continue it :)
Firstly, I really love the blindfold simile (is that the right word for it? I've already forgotten everything I learnt at school oops) just this whole bit really, "Dusk fell like a blindfold that night. Slowly, stiflingly, it slipped across the sky and extinguished the damp grey gleam of the day as it went." The way you described it is just superb. I just really like that bit! (now I should probably read past the first two sentences).
Basically I love the way you have written this, especially the way you have described everything. Mostly the blood (it's probably quite weird that I liked that but I guess a lot people just leave it as red and dripping or something? and you actually made it seem real and kinda creepy and yeah I don't really know what I'm talking about right now...) and also the cold air with the knives and slitting. I just realised that pretty much my favourite parts are all of the grim sort of things. Oops?
Anyway moving on to the next chapter! (also I love how much you managed to fit into the chapter despite it being so short...it felt way longer!)Author's Response: Oh god, don't remind me of how behind I am with this fic! This must be rewrite #2356...
Thank you! Although I feel most comfortable writing cracky, slapstick humour, I do love working on a big chunk of descriptive writing now and again, and I'm a sucker for metaphor.
Don't worry - my favourite parts are oft the grim things too. I've got a morbid imagination, me...
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Someone's been poking around in Draco's brain while he's asleep? That's the only explanation I can come up with. Since he sleeps so oddly, so seemingly lightly, I wonder when this occurred, if it occurs often - if he's the one doing it to himself or someone else is doing it, and why. To be delving into the brain of someone whose profession is to delve into brains, that feels quite risky.
Maybe it's Astoria, forcing into his subconscious?
HOW FAR OFF THE MARK AM I. I'M USUALLY WAY OFF THE MARK.
Julia this story sounds so cool. I am excite. ♥Author's Response: Perhaps! Perhaps not! All shall hopefully become clear in time! Once I've worked out my plot! Exclamation marks!
You could be on the mark, but equally you could be off it. Your guess is as good as mine seeing as I've not really worked this story out for meself yet.
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WHAT. WHAT IS GOING ON.
Juliaaa I was creeping on your page while you watch an hour-long video of cats and this banner seduced my eyeballs. It's all glittery and Eleven is on it and basically that is all the reason I need, but I know this was inspired by Inception which is brill and you are brill and here I am.
Basically you are going to break me into Draco/Astoria. I've read very few, and of the few I've read I've liked...hardly any at all. I love the idea of the pairing but have always been hesitant to try for some reason, but since you're such an amazing author I'm really looking forward to it.
That said, ASTORIA WHAT IS GOING ON. A body in the snow, and she seems to have memory loss of sorts, and I will just click to chapter 2 now to see what happens. P.S. I liked the air slitting her throat description. Because I'm morbid.
♥Author's Response: WELL HONESTLY SARAH I WISH I KNEW
omg that cat video. so disappointing. (by the way since I've rewritten this 6000 times I'm not sure three of the people on that banner are relevant anymore but it is the most beautiful banner I have and I DONT WANT TO CHANGE EEET)
aww, thanks! It's a funny pairing. There isn't really a fandom consensus as far as Drastoria concerned, I think.
I liked writing it. Because I'm morbid too. You're just as sane as I am.
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Wow. The mood of the story is just.. I don't know... forbidding? Makes me want to read more.Author's Response: thank you so much! ♥ Report Review
Inception is one of my favorite films so I reckon this is going to be a very interesting story!
You've already got my attention with the first two chapters. The words you use in your descriptions, the metaphors and how you create a special kind of atmosphere around Astoria and Draco so I can almost be there. It's more than magical. I'm looking forward to next chapters!Author's Response: Thank you very much! It's one of my favourite films too, heee. Glad to hear that - I'm partway through writing chapter three, and should be able to update soon :3 ♥ Report Review
Wow, this is really interesting! I love Inception and the idea of manipulating dreams and all that, so the idea behind this really intrigues me. Also, Draco and Astoria = love. For being so short, this first chapter was really powerful, and you made an incredibly large impact with so few words, so well done there.
Really intriguing story, and I'll definitely be coming back for more! :D
10/10 ;)Author's Response: Thank you very much! Yep, not going to lie - I love Inception too :3
thank you! I'm partway through writing chapter three, so hopefully I should be able to update soon ♥ Report Review
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