This is a first time for me reading Pregnancy fics but I must say I did enjoy it. The sudden time gaps sort of break the flow of the story but putting that aside they rest went really well.
Lily felt natural at that young age to be reckless and impulsive with her situation running away from her problems thinking that the most important thing is to not face the reactions of her family, often not thinking about what she could have done alone to take care of herself and her child. I also adored Scorpius for being so mature at that age and taking responsibility fully stepping into the role of father-to-be and filling the shoes more than adequately. I wish thought that you could have 'showed' more than 'told' us. But it is again hard to do in a one shot.
Absolutely loved Rose's sarcastic remark upon seeing her cousin again. And the addition of Hugo is perfect! Ariadne? Unique choice :)
Well done. Great effort. :)Author's Response: Lol, it's a first time for me writing one, so I guess that works! :D I had the breaks in because I didn't know a better way to show passage of time, but maybe it also represents Lily's lapses in judgement? (Idk, that's just an excuse) I am very glad that you liked it, thank you so much for reviewing! :D Report Review
Several things to admire here.
After the wizard war, all is not sweetness and light.
Re-locating to Ireland.
Complete lack of interference from First Gen characters.
It's well written, the pace was even and the characterisations were excellent.
I enjoyed it a lot. A couple of little grammar things, not really worth mentioning, So I don't know why I did.
Well done!Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. I tried to make it at least hopefully a little bit different from the normal romance-y next-gens. Thank you so much for reviewing! Report Review
This was a different sort of pregnancy-one-shot, and surprisingly enough, I enjoyed it. Lily is quite reckless, though - what on earth would she have done if Scorpius didn't want to stay with her?
I like how you made the Wizarding world not perfect and happy, though, which is really realistic - no world would be like that all the time, Muggle or Wizard.
I also liked how you set it in Ireland - and I laughed when you used the word telly! And made the hospital in Dublin! That was all very, very true - did you do your research or do you actually live in Ireland?
There was not much grammar or spelling mistakes at all, only one thing that I noticed. [Rose] began happily before curling up from the pain of the contraction. Don't you mean Lily in this sentence?
They did not live as muggles but they did not use magic excessively, not needing to draw any attention. They were free - This was my favourite line, honestly!
Sorry for the ridiculously long review, but I really did enjoy reading this story, and it was a really good read.Author's Response: Long reviews are good reviews, :) so no worries there! And yes I probably did mean Lily, lolz, I'm just so used to writing (rose) because of my ScoRose. Oopsie, but I'm glad you mentioned it or it would probably stay like that. I wanted to set it in Ireland, just so it could be a bit different. I'm not from there but I do watch a lot of BBC and stuff, so that may have helped ;)
Anywho, thank you so much for your review! I loved it! Report Review
Thanks for entering my challenge! This is a nice little piece, here. It has much potential, etc. It's very cute. I've always loved Lily/Scorp. Many people go the canon way with Rose/Scorp, but I've never really liked that much. I was happy to see a bit of Hugo in it, considering he's my favorite Next-Gen.
Anyways, thanks! The results will be out soon :) ~Cierra.Author's Response: Awesome! Thank you so much for the review, I had fun writing this. I was thinking that same thing when I wrote the ship, I'm already writing a ScoRose and didn't want to write another. And yeah I love Hugo! Report Review
I thought this was brilliant, and a great way to unite two feuding families and forgetting all the hatred. This is a great attempt with no comedy. A writer should be able to turn their hand to pretty much any style of writing, and I think you've done beautifully. 10/10. Adding to favs.Author's Response: Aww, yeah I wanted to write a next gen that was at least a little dark. I'm glad that it worked with no funny since that is my usual style. Thank you so much for the review! Report Review
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