Veey interesting! I really like your style and this looks very good, can't wait ro read more. My only conplaint and it's a small one at that, is that the chapters or this chapter is very long. It is not that big of a deal though. Report Review
This was a perfect and incredibly sweet ending chapter! I loved it so much.
The way you rounded off everyone's stories was superb, and all the cute aww moments between the couples were brilliant, and finished it all off nicely!
Looking forward to hearing more about Ian and co in the sequel. he's definitely one to watch, right? :D
Well done on such an amazing story ♥ Report Review
OMG! I loved this story so much! Will be on the lookout for your sequel. Thanks for your efforts of giving me something amazing and spectacular to read. I will miss this... a lot. :'(Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked it. The Sequel's prologue is awaiting validation and should be up and running very soon.
Hope you will enjoy it just as much as this one.
See you soon! Report Review
Awesome chapter! I am a little worried about Ron and Hermione, though! :) But the way you described Tanith and her reactions are out of this world. You seriously have to consider becoming a writer. I'm not trying to be over the top; it's the truth. :) Will be with this story until the end.Author's Response: Thanks a huge lot for that one.
The next and final chapter is on the way. It should be posted very soon. Report Review
First things first: I've been saving reviewing this chapter. BECAUSE NOW THIS IS MY HUNDREDTH REVIEW! Yayayayayayay :D
Firstly, I hate Tanith. And I loved her reaction. 'Ah, well, you know who I am anyway! AND YOUR ALL GOING TO DIE.' I think I like her being evil much more than I did her being nice.
Secondly, Hermione and Phyllis? Love them. And Alexander's comment "What a mule! How do I get a reasonable idea inside her head?" was brilliant.
Thirdly, sweet Jesus, they know how to fight. You are going down, Tanith. I love how you've brought in the rest of the Weasleys and the Patil twins and even Seamus and Dean :D
Another fantastic chapter. You're an amazing writer :D another ten billion out of ten. CAN'T WAIT FOR THE FINAL CHAPTER! :D
(Also, have you thought about getting an account at the forums? It's great to chat through story line and find out about new stories and of course promote your own :D)Author's Response: Well, I'm honoured you would save the 100th for me. Thanks.
Tanith has always been designed as an evil character. I wanted her to hide that dark side of hers under the pretense of being nice. She's deluded, and very dangerous.
It may sound a little pretensious, but I am usually quite proud of my fighting scenes. Some of my readers on other sites always told me I managed them well, whether it would be wand duels or lightsabers battles... :)*
And to answer your question about the forums, I created an account, but I'm kinda stuck in the posting. I'm trying to solve it, right now.
Thanks for the continuing support. Hope the ending will please you and that you'll still be on board for the Sequel.
AWESOME, AWESOME, AWESOME CHAPTER! Completely amazing and out of this world! :) I loved it when Professor McGonagall was siding with Hermione, saying she should fight. And I love Tanith's reaction when they say they know that she's the Mask. Keep writing! Love the frequent updates! :) This deserves more than a 10/10!Author's Response: Well, thank you. The next chapter is pending validation, so it should be up very soon. As for keeping writing, I'm right on my keyboard, right now, working on a scene of the sequel, so... :)
Thanks for the support. Report Review
where is the next chapter. You ask for a review to go on and you do not finish the tale.Author's Response: We're close to the ending, actually. The next chapter is up and the last two are ready to be posted. But I didn't ask for a review to go on. I just like comments along the way, :).
Thanks for reading anyway. Report Review
so far this is an interesting book, but I can not write a review until I read the ending. I will so that when I am finished Report Review
I KNEW I DIDN'T LIKE TANITH!
I WAS RIGHT, I WAS BLOODY RIGHT!
I AM JUST AS FURIOUS AS ALEX! I TOLD YOU, WHY DIDN'T YOU LISTEN TO ME!?
KILL HER NOW.
Cor. What a chapter. Fight, and then another fight and Hermione hurt, and Ginny hurt, and I'm sad.
And angry. Alexander should listen to me.
PLEASE UPDATE WITH SOME MORE FIGHTING REALLY REALLY REALLY SOON. :D
Your story is amazing.
I hate Tanith. And I was right. Ten million out of ten. Report Review
Oh God no!
This chapter wasn't as good as the rest, but then it was a bit of filler. I loved Ginny. 'something to ask you..' immediately jumped to marriage. So typical :D
One other thing; you've written 'syllabus' and I think you mean 'syllable'.
Great story, I don't want it to end :(Author's Response: Sadly, "filler" is the right word for this chapter. It only stands as a transition until we get to the next step of the story. Report Review
So much love for Snape.
(I've realised my reviews are just me enthusing about how much I love certain characters)
The twin thing was mind-boggling: who was dating who? What? Wh-?
The line about the Weasley's not being powerful but very mad was comedy gold, and this chapter was full of them. 'The twins have found something' and then topping all of that off with a win against Flint is just the best. :)
How much longer is this fic going to be, by the way? (don't want it to end!) :D 10/10Author's Response: Well, Snape isn't a character as complex as JK finally revealed him to be, in this story.
But he is on this edge of being an odious jerk haunted by school grudges, with a deep sense of honour, though. I have plans to develop Snape a little more, in the stories to come.
Hope that bit about the twins wasn't too confusing, ;). To sum it up, George is dating Padma, and... the rest is pure teasing!
About the length... let's see, this was chapter 21, so it means we're five chapters away from the end. But don't worry, I've got four sequels that I'm working on rewriting, at the moment. Plus a parallel story of three issues, so far. So, Alexander and Co aren't going anywhere, for the moment. :) Report Review
I LOVE HERMIONE!
Although I do have a soft spot for Draco (thank you Tom Felton) so I didn't really like him being completely owned. However, WHAT A DUEL.
*happy dance* Alexander is effortlessly amazing, Ron is so sweet, Hermione is my role-model and Harry is fairly awesome too.
I knew that Glyph spell would come in handy, and well done Parviti. Much love for her.
Best line ever: Well, that made my day.
Keep up the fantastic work! 10/10 :)Author's Response: I know that Draco has garnered a huge sympathy through Felton's performance, which is good, because it turned out he wasn't so bad in the books, so Felton wasn't so out of place (plus he pulled off a seriously good job in Half Blood Prince and Deathly Hallows). But, when I started to write this thing, we were only up to Order of the Phoenix (as far as the book went). So I did feel that Draco would turn out to be evil but as elusive as his Dad. I know a lot of people like Draco. But he's not totally gone from this fanverse, because I used him in one of my sequels... and he's going into scary mode!
About the duel, I think that is the scene of this story I spent the most time on. Due to computer crashes, USB drive malfunction, or simply rewriting issues, I guess I had to rewrite that scene something like six or seven times in total. Which is why I'm very glad that you liked the final result. :) Report Review
Ohhh, a Replica is like a clone! Clever.
Also *claps* well done Alexander. The only person in the history of fiction who just walks into someone else's house *cough CASTLE cough* to casually tell them that they despise them. And threatens them. And then gets the rest of the family on his side.
Just great :) although I don't know whether much of it reflects on Devin as an evil prat.
Phyllis is great, although I'm still not liking Tanith, and the Glyph spell is a great idea!
And once more: GO ALEXANDER! HAHA! You show the nasty man!
Great story! 10/10
(also, have you thought of a suitably awesome name for Harry's awesome Quidditch move yet? It needs to be AMAZING.)Author's Response: Yes, I liked that part about Alexander's visit, too, which is why I kept it from the original. I kind of think this is the way Alexander rolls... not playing by the rule book.
As for the Move Harry performed at Quidditch, if you refer to the one he used with Cho, I think I may introduce it later as the "Reverse Potter", but it needs to be worked a little, so that it doesn't lead the player to the hospital each time, hehehe. Report Review
Excellent story, but can you PLEASE work on your grammar.
What the hex?- WRONG
What the heck?- RIGHT
There are some other incorrect word usages throughout, but this one is probably the most offensive/annoying.Author's Response: OKay, about the "what the hex!" thing... That's actually deliberate. See, the first site I posted that fiction on was pretty strict on language and I couldn't write "what the hell" so I invented "what the hex" as a wizard saying. Same goes for "son of a lich".
I'm ready to admit when I make mistake, but that one was intentional, hehehe. Is it really so annoying? You have to be the first to point that out to me, actually.
As for the others mistakes, well, to my defence, I'm french, so english is not my mother language.
I'm always eager to correct myself, though, so don't hesitate to point out serious mistakes you may find in there. I'll edit them out.
Glad you like the story, anyway. Report Review
Whoa, that is probably the longest introduction/prologue I've ever read! Not a bad thing though because you get well enough invested in the story to keep reading. And I really do like the little family moment at the beginning. This is a very interesting story and I wish you luck.Author's Response: Why, thank you very much. I admit the Prologue is quite long. In fact, it's far longer than the first draft was, but as I developped my story, I needed to establish a little more of my timeline and my OC for it to hold...
Thanks for the review and I hope you'll like the rest. Welcome aboard. Report Review
cant wait for more please write moreAuthor's Response: Well, more is on the way... thanks for the support. Report Review
I LOVE HERMIONE. I ALSO LOVE VANESSA- she's awesome.
You are amazing, for making Hermione so amazing. Admin pranks, for the win!
And yay for Parviti. Subtle wedding hints there. Very subtle.
E! UPDATE! PLEASE! :D
Bestest AU ever written! xxAuthor's Response: I will admit that this one was a personal favorite of mine, even in the first version. I was actually looking forward to edit this chapter.
Thanks for the praise.
The next chapter is pending validation. Should be up very soon. Report Review
I love the way your write. Your plot is very complicated, but I find it quite easy to keep up, because of your writing!
Anyway, *fangirl screaming* HOW CAN PEOPLE DO THAT TO HARRY AND HERMIONE?! HOW VERY DARE THEY?
It's making me quite mad, this injustice. They had better not start on Ron and Ginny.
AND THE MASK! AGAIN! Dear God, he's persistant. And ha! Phyllis rocks. She's so awesome.
YAY FOR MORE!Author's Response: Do you know you just put one of my fears at ease with that one?
I'm always worried that the plot that seems to clear to me in my head doesn't show that way after I put it into words. Report Review
Awww. Harry's mother's love. That is so awesomely sweet.
I also love everyone ganging up on Ron at the start, and I love LOVE LOVE Harry and Ginny together XD
Ian is a legend, I think it's fair to say, and OMG: Tanith? You're a cow. Stay out of Alexander's way or I will hex you.
And the fact that Harry can cook is cute. And Ron: "Yeah, he can cook, so what? He basically kept me alive, feeding me. But its no big deal,"
And is Hermione's problems something to do with the Ministry? I hope she's okay!Author's Response: If you think Ian is a legend... stick around for the sequel... It's starring Ian and his gang!
;) Report Review
I've been putting off reading the three chapters up so I could devote my full attention to it- and wow.
Ron, you're awesome. What a punch!
Harry, you're so cute. I love you.
Fred&George, you're hilarious.
Alexander, pure epicness.
MUST READ NEXT CHAPTER!Author's Response: I know! I didn't expect the chapters to be validated so quickly and I was so surprised that I ended with four of them online before I knew it.
Anyway, that chapter was completely made of new stuff. It was made necessary to flesh out Harry's couple with Ginny, as opposed to the original Harry/Parvati pairing. But at some point (namely the reading of Half-blood prince and the movie), I felt Harry and Ginny felt more right even in my A/U.
As for Alexander... my personal pride in this story... my OCs (okay I need to deflate my head on this one)
thanks for the support. Report Review
This story is amazing. I usually don't like A/U on the whole, but for some reason I gave this one a go. I definitely do not regret it! You're a fantastic and gifted writer,I look forward to the next chapter!Author's Response: YAY! Another A/U convert!
I'm glad you liked the story despite the huge differences with canon. I must admit I wasn't planning on doing anything related to canon when I started it, but I wasn't expecting to be SO far from Canon when book six came out. I had to take a few things from the original version and try and get it closer, such as Harry/Ginny and stuff.
I'm glad you like it and welcome aboard.
Great chapter and excellent way of describing Harry's emotions when he went to visit his parent's grave. I can't wait for the next chapter! :)Author's Response: Next chapter is up! Thanks for the support Report Review
Wow. I genuinely welled up when Harry was talking to his parents, and although it wasn't exactly canon, it was beautiful. Well done.
Slightly less serious: the 'Forget it, no way you will see classification is awesome.
Looking forward to the next update! :)Author's Response: Thanks. The pride of any author is when a reader said they welled up while reading our story.
I thought the classification of the Department of Mysteries should be one of a kind. Glad you liked it.
Next chapter is on the way... Hopefully should be updated soon. Report Review
Don't know where to begin.
Erm, n'aww! Love Harry/Ginny. Thank you. What's up with Hermione? Is she okay? :(
Harry is an idiot. To be frank. Flying upside down? Really? No wonder Mrs Weasley got so mad! (that was a really cool idea to use as a Quidditch move.. you'd better make up an awesome name for it!)
AND WHAT? JAMES? NO! OH MY GOSH! THIS NEEDS EXPLAINING MORE! PLEEEAAASE!
Update. Please! :) xx Report Review
Great story! I love the relationship between Harry and Ginny. I also loved the Quidditch game between England and China. Harry made a spectacular save there. You really are an amazing writer.Author's Response: Thank you very much. It took me some time to finally get the hang of a Quidditch scene, but I hope I finally got it right.
Ginny and Harry... Well, what can I say, JK sold it to me so well, that I just had to go there. but I needed to add my own touch.
Without any false modesty, I'm pretty proud of the scene about hippogriffs... It was a new one, but I'm glad I could make it fit so well in the older bits.
Anyway, the next chapter is pending validation and should be up soon. Thanks for the following. Report Review
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