realy great I truly loved itAuthor's Response: Thanks. Much appreciated. I'm glad you enjoyed it and read it to the end. Report Review
This was brilliant .I really enjoyed it start to end. You have a real talent for writing.I would pay for your material. Please continue to write on here!
KimAuthor's Response: Thank you so much - your feedback is really encouraging. I consider that you have paid in full. :)
Another story is on its way. (and another behind that.) Report Review
well done this was a good story with action and sad bits you should think about writing your own story and making some money and fame for your selfAuthor's Response: Many thanks for your feedback and encouragement homerHarris. Glad you enjoyed the story. You may be interested to hear that I have some rough ideas for a future Dark Will Linger 2 but that may be some time in the future. I have a couple of other short stories to upload yet! :) Report Review
The story is fantastic so far, well done! however i thought i would point something out for correction if you ever do a revision. You use the name Worley in a few places when you mean Bingley. Nothing massive but something to keep in mind. Congratulations again on such a fantastic story!Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it and thanks for feedback.
I see you're up to Chapter 14. I'll search back from there for the errors. I've been over this story dozens of times pruning errors but still find one or two now and again. I do have a few more to fix but it takes time to get each chapter validated of course and new stuff takes priority. I'm currently playing with ideas for a Dark Will Linger 2. Report Review
Well I like it to a point. You seem have them going to class at night. They just got there, Had the sorting, ate and then going to class and not bed... Did I miss something???Author's Response: Don't know how I've missed that after all this time! I'll change it. Thanks for feedback. Report Review
i liked the beginning of the chapter, it was pure and sincere. but during the middle, i kinda got the vibes that harry was a tad too bossy, which was something that i had trouble imagining.
i think that you could add a bit more conversation in the story, i like your use of vivid description and detail. can't wait to read next chapterAuthor's Response: Fair comment I guess. I rewrote these first four chapters because I was told (correctly) that my earlier story was not descriptive enough. So I was still trying to find the right balance and also try to describe what they were feeling. There are lots of conversations later. Some chapters work better than others and I definitely have my favourites.
Anyway, thanks for the feedback. Glad you're enjoying it so far. Report Review
i like it! i can't belive that after 22 chapters, this is the first review, especially seeing as this is such a great story, i cant wait to read the other chaptersAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for commenting. I was begining to think everybody hated it! Hope you enjoy the rest of it. Personally I think the later chapters get better and better so if you liked the first one you should be in for some fun! :) Report Review
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