This was absolutely brilliant. The setting and description at the beginning of the story was just beautiful and was written excellently, making the whole story sound very ethereal which is somewhat fitting.
I also liked how you gave Cho and Cedric much more human qualities than most authors would, like the fact that she has no sense of direction and his nervousness - something we don't see in the books simply because Cedric is not the focus of the story.
The latter half of the piece really is heartbreaking to read. I really felt for Cho and what she'd been through. Her emotions really came across in this, you did this excellently.
The only thing that bothered me in the slightest was the line "A wind rustles through, ejecting small butterflies into the sky". I thought 'ejected' was a weird phrase to describe butterflies, but that's just me :P
Beautiful work!Author's Response: Hello! Thanks so much! I really adore this pairing so it means a lot that you liked it :) I'm so glad you thought the emotions came across especially as Cedric can only have a small appearance in this and as the piece itself is quite short.
The ejecting bit was meant to describe the butterflies taking off. I guess I see how it could sound a bit strange. But I'm happy you liked the piece!
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Somehow, through this story you've managed to show love and it's loss with hardly talking about it, but using imagery and memories to create a beautiful piece of writing.
You've showed how as time may pass, the hurt stays but we learn to bury it, control it. Link it to a place where we can visit and let it all rush back to us.
This sweet, sad story says about the difficulty of leaving everything things behind us, yet we do them when we are finally capable.
One of the best pieces of writing I have read on here.
Simply, well done. Report Review
Oh, goodness. This is beautiful and sort of haunting. I love it. I really like your Cho, one who's accepted that Cedric is gone while wondering (idly, it seems) what could have been.
I love this line: "In a strange way, they were never more than ordinary. " I like stories that have romances described as that; and I like that he was not her first love, or her first anything, but her first loss. That's a really beautiful idea, I think.
This was really well done. Great job. :)Author's Response: Thank you!
Eep, you put it in a very lovely way yourself. Yes, I never saw Cedric and Cho as the end all romance, more of a small thing that she would linger on later in life.
Thank you very much :) Report Review
Awesome, awesome, awesome! I liked this first chapter very much; it was melancholy and bittersweet; never too abounding with sickening overdoses of optimism or too depressing; it was just the right little touch of the middle ground and I think you've captured Cho's essence here perfectly. Very nice and please update on this and BIR soon!
-nightingale14Author's Response: Ah, thank you! I'm very happy you liked this! I try not to make it seem too mushy either way. This is a one-shot however, so there's no more chapters after this one. I am very glad you liked it though and I'll have that BIR update up soon! Report Review
This story was very poetic and quite beautiful! The description was amazing. I liked hearing something about Cho and Cedric. Going into the tournament must have been hard for Cedric, and I am glad Cho helped to reassure him. Lovely story! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! I try on the description haha. I love Cho/Cedric and I find it so sad that they're so underwritten. Yeah, I do think she'd have been there for him. :) Thanks for reading! Report Review
You're the only person in the universe who's been able to make me like Cho--you made her a person, like she obviously deserves, so it sounds a bit weird to have to say this but so often there are characters like Cho who are used as a trope, a foil, something other than a real character. It's not a surprise, of course, that your writing makes somebody real, that you can make me sympathise with someone I've never been so kindly inclined towards before--like your other Cho story, you're able to write her in a way that is what I think embodies a thoughtful person--a wondering at the world, what our place is in it, how other people fit into our plans and how we change over time.
I'm so glad you went ahed and did the impulse-writing thing, it's a wonderful feeling and from an author as seasoned as you into the realms of the heart, is always promising :)Author's Response: Lily! Well, you know how much I adore Cho simply for being human despite being a background character (a feat, I think, is sometimes hard in the Harry-and-friends-centric HP universe). I do hate how she is used a foil or a plot device to make other pairings and people look good.
Seasoned as me? Ha, that didn't make much sense to me considering you actually know stuff about me. But thank you for this review! Report Review
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