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Review #1, by blackballet Chosen

23rd March 2014:
This was so beautiful! Your imagery was super on point, and I was drawn in. I was actually really surprised and upset when it ended. I guessed Draco Malfoy when I first started reading, but then changed my mind to Tom Riddle when you wrote about him controlling the fire.

I also don't think it seemed rushed at all. Each of your sentences had meaning, and it worked really well. Love this one-shot so much. You're a great writer!

Author's Response: bb,

N'aww, thank you; this review brought a smile to my face like thaaat :) It's always reassuring to hear that the imagery was able to serve its purpose by being capable of drawing the readers in with its images.

This is another proof of how upset feelings of the reader means positive feedback for the writer. It might have the feel of lack, but I guess it's short length, like the spark of a fire, is what gave the fic more power.

Despite it being super short, I'm glad you don't think it to be rushed. Thank you muchlies for taking the time to review, you flatter me too much.

You're a great person!
~ Sevvy
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Review #2, by LadyL8 Chosen

5th February 2012:
Hey there. I'm here with your requested review.

This story really fascinated me. I don't know if its because you use so much description and inner drama, or if its because I can't seem to understand who this boy is. I love how your describe so much. It gives me the opportunity to see everything you write in my head. Honestly, that did freak me out a bit, because its not a particularly happy story, and probably not the best story to see in your head.

Its not very often I come across an author that really gives me so many images in my head while reading, and always love it when I find someone that can do this. You did, and thank you for that.

I'm really curious about who this boy is, though. I was thinking that it could maybe be Tom Riddle, but I wasn't exactly sure about this. Is it possible for you to let me know who it was meant to be? I understand if you don't want to say it, though. It is a part of the story.

Thank you for this chapter, and I think you have chosen the correct era. It doesn't reveal who the boy is, and makes it a mystery for us to figure out. Great job :D

Author's Response: Hey Lady L,

I know this response is overdue and I am terribly sorry. Thank you for stopping by to read and leaving your review, I do appreciate it lots.

I'm glad to know it freaked you out, hahaha. The description and inner drama, as you put it, was what I was trying to do and judging by your reactions, it means that what I wanted to get across safely arrived and that makes me so happy. :)

I'm very pleased to know that my descriptions were clear and well-written and able to give you images and I am honestly very grateful. No, thank you.

No, I can neither confirm nor negate your assumptions, though I like to think I made it quite plain. You're most welcome, thank you dearly for your review.

Siriusly, You Honestly Made Me Happy,
~ Sevvy
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Review #3, by The Wizard of Potterland Chosen

16th November 2011:
It was really good. I felt the characterization of Tom Riddle come through quite strongly. I just wish that you had expanded on the rage a bit more. I got a sense of power, but not rage.

Author's Response: Twoppy,

N'aww, thank you for taking the time to read and leave a brief review. :D I wonder why when I never name any names or admit even in the author's response who it is but everyone seems to assume it's Tom. I'm not saying it's not him although I'm not saying it's him either. xD But yeah, you're right, that rage part seemed a bit rushed huh? Although I only have a limit of 500 words. Maybe sometime in the future I'm going to expand from that challenge to make this little piece better. xD

Thanks Again!
~ Sevvy
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Review #4, by Emerald_Eyed_Bookworm Chosen

8th November 2011:
First off, very enjoyable read. It's written well in the sense that I had some idea as to who it was in the beginning, but wasn't sure til the very end. I think you captured young Tom Riddle, he would have been a child that as soon as his magical abilities began to reveal themselves he would have been both fasciated and curious as to how he could use them militarily.

Now in regards to CC, I did spot a few technical problems. With the flower, it would be best to describe from the beginning in what form it is in Riddle's hands. In the beginning, I had the impression that it was just the flower he was holding in his hands, and was surprised when you mentioned the stem burning. Another little technicality was the burning process of the flower. I advise just quickly googling the timeline of a burn in relation to what colors correspond with what stages. I say this because I thought that the fiery colors (red, orange) came before something burned into ash (black, gray). But then again I could be wrong. : )

Anyway, it was a good story that captured the troubled and demonic personality of the child that would become Voldemort. I liked that you made him feel that he was chosen, unlike Harry who continues to believe that he is just normal boy who "things" just happen to.

Author's Response: Eebie,

Thank you for taking the time to read and review this story, I'm glad you found it enjoyable. :)

I will definitely take your CCs into consideration when I next edit my story. You have a point as to how I described him holding the flower, I was thinking he was sort of just holding it as it was attached to the ground and did not really pluck it so I may have to describe further into that.

As to the order of the colours, that's what I'm most worried about. I made a topic of that over at the forums but nobody seems to be exactly sure as to what the order is. If you can find an answer I would much appreciate it if you send me a PM over at the forums with the link to it or what the exact order is. :) You don't need to though, I understand if you're busy enough as it is.

Thanks again for reading, your opinion was highly appreciated and taken into consideration.

~ Sevvy
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Review #5, by Prongs05JP Chosen

4th November 2011:
OHAI SEVVY.

This was fantastic Sevvy! I thoroughly enjoyed it, the full 500 words of it! A very interesting concept, I loved the idea of the burning flames and all that stuff. Your description is lovely, I know how restricting it can be having to narrow everything down to 500 words - it can all get a little irritating, especially with having to leave out certain things and all that shizzle. All that jazz. Jazzzeeey... ahem, anyway.

Onto the topic of the mysterious boy(s), if I may! Well my first guess would obviously have been Tom Riddle, loving destruction and fire and such, but then again - he lived in an Orphanage in the middle of London, so that sort of ruled that idea out. Next I would go for Dumbledore? And perhaps Aberforth? Call that weird, but that was what popped into my mind next. ^_^ Back when Dumbley was all greedy. Although... if not, I would have to think someone evil, and nothing pops to mind right now. :') For that, I'm really quite sorry - but I think with a little more clues I probably would've been able to get it! 'Spose I don't know the books well enough. *cries*.

So this was entered for five challenges, which is pretty ambitious in it's own right, but I have to say you've done a fantastic job on each! The unamed character could perhaps be a little more specific, but considering it was 500 words that's pretty much all you can manage, right? :') But I LOOOVE it, it's so... daaark.

Geez Sevvy, stop showing us your inner psycho.
(Nowait, show us more inner psycho, the writing is amazee!)
((But people will start to realise you're crazy...))

Now, there's only one thing I'd put on my annoying grammar hat for, and that would be the sentence "why else would it have bended to his will?" I just... eurgh, call me horrible, but I would much rather put a "bent" in there. It just sounds better - in *my* mind, mind you, it's probably not as all grammar'd up as youu. xD

Really it's just.. it's so angsty and dark, and I adore the style you wrote it in - your vocabulary is impressive, I liked the use of longer words in a style where it's very easy to write simply. So bravo on that!

Erm. I love it, it's awesome, I wish I could write like you... *has run out of things to say.*

WRITE MORE! I wanna see more stuff like this! JAMESIE WANTS MORE!

In any case.

10/10 :D

Love,
the most amazing person you've ever met,
James xx

Author's Response: JAMEEES!

I'm sorry it took so long to reply to this review. T^T I'm quite at a loss of what to say... I don't know where to start. Okay, how 'bout let's start with, "YOU ARE SO ADORABLEEE, Thank you for showering me with flattery and happy, happy feelings! :3"

Heh, you know me, I'm the queen of ambitiousness and multichallenges. xD Dark was what I was going for and I'm so glad that the moods and feels I wanted to evoke have come across!

Geez Jamesies, stop making me smile so much.
(Nowait, please go on, I like to smile.)
((But then you might think I'm trying to feed my ego,))
(((Which may or may not be true xD)))

I'll take that into consideration and don't worry, I don't mind you being nitpicky and grammar nazi. I do that all the time. :P I do love to get different opinions, after all.

Thankyouthankyouthankyou. Angst is my area. And say thanks to my friend, Thesaurus for zi fab vocab. 8D Bravo to him!

Erm. ily, you're awesome, now we both ran out of things to say. Thank you again and again for reviewing, I'll see you around!

Love,
the most awesome person you've ever met,
Sevvy xx

P.S. Pfft, we haven't even met each other yet. xD


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Review #6, by Dracolovergirl5000 Chosen

31st October 2011:
I think it was very good. For my challenge and all the others as well. I didn't notice any grammatical mistakes, and I thought that the voice to the story was very good. It kept me guessing at who this could be about, is it about an original character, or a canon character? It was written very well, in a style I enjoy reading. I'm glad that I got to read it as part of my challenge, thank you for submitting it.
DRACOLOVERGIRL5000

Author's Response: Well, it's part of a challenge where I had to mention no names but should make it obvious who it is through their choice of actions and feelings, so yes, it's a canon. :) I think you could guess it. Thank you for reading, I enjoyed writing it. Your challenge was one of the others that gave me the idea that helped form this. So thank you. :)

~ Sevvy
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Review #7, by Cal585 Chosen

30th October 2011:
Heya Sevvy, great to see you writing again! Nice short piece! Your descriptions were good and the burning of the flower rather symbolic. I liked how you described the transition through the colours. Now that you're writing again, I look forward to seeing more from you soon!

Author's Response: Hey Cally,

Thanks for stopping by. :) You're the first reviewer just like I was the first at your fic. :P Which reminds me to go review yours sometime. Thanks for leaving a review, and I will definitely write some more in the near future.

Lots of hugs for Calkins,
~ Sevvy
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