Cliches for days! Oh, the romance, the intrigue! How I love me some satirical crack fic. Can't wait for Ellis to reject Albus for more pointless reasons until Albus has a grinchy tin-man moment and realizes he does in fact have a heart, and it grew three sizes that day.
Update update update! :)Author's Response: All the drama! Oh, here comes all the pointless rejections to keep the story going! Albus, of course, will have a epiphany and become a truly wonderful person, I think.
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So good! I guess I'm, like, uber into cliches or something, because you're all like, "Isn't this ridiculous?" and I'm all like, "WHY WON'T YOU LOVE HIM, ELLIS?!?!?!?!" My heart broke for him. THERE BETTER BE SOME REALLY CHEESEY LOVE EPIPHANY TO SOOTHE MY ACHING SOUL, NELL.
Anywho, loved the chapter and I can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10 :D
~Jess :)Author's Response: Hahah! OF COURSE, there is a cheesy epiphany. IT'S GOING TO BE LIKE STILTON.
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I like it! Its really awesome! It's like slam bam it's really good!Author's Response: Wow, thank you :) xx Report Review
all the cliches! it's brilliant, and Albus tells Ellis he can wait for her but she basically rejects him, how could she?!;) I mean, Albus is all brooding and stuff I don't know how she resists it... and I wonder who this mysterious letter is from? Great chapter! :)Author's Response: It's all the cliches. Ellis is too wacky to care, because that's how all the cliches go down, she drags it out for no apparent reason, because she doesn't feel like it.
You'll find out next chapter!
Nell :) xx Report Review
Oh, I love the way you say things, and to be honest, my favourite line in the whole chapter was 'They've reached their destination, but they still have miles to go.' Read that and tell me you don't see a brilliant author in the works. Oh, melodrama. As for the cliche bit - I suppose the fake-dating bit is one. While I puzzle over the cliches in this story, please update soon!Author's Response: Thank you, the writing style in this is quite experimental for me. The narrator has their own snarky personality, while they're still omniscient. Thank you for such a lovely compliment, I'm ridiculously flattered. I shall try and update soon, but school starts up again soon and I have exams, so I might drop off the face of the internet. .
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This story is sort of confusing me, though I can't exactly put my finger as to why. I really do like it, though. I'm not saying I don't, it just sort of confuses me.
Anyways, I find Albus' liking of Ellis fascinating, and how he refers to himself as either a sociopath or a psychopath. He's a very interesting person, and truthfully, I would love to meet him.
Also, I like the whole unrequited love thing with Ellis and Cillan. And how Clark and him have a thing, which basically crushed Ellis. I feel for the poor girl.
Thank you for the very lovely, confusing story, though!
JennieAuthor's Response: Oh it, is. :( It's a bit vague and ambiguos, things will hopefully become clearer in the last four chapters, as the characters finally start telling each other things.
Gosh, I would be afraid if I met Albus, he's one of those creepy people, my mom would tell me to stay away from.
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Loved it. Poor al though. Update soon 9/10 : )Author's Response: I will try! Glad you liked it! :) x Report Review
Ah I see the brooding brooder has somehow miraculously found he *gasp* /cares/ for someone, which is shocking because the brooding brooder cares for nobody. But no! The lucky chosen one does not care for the brooding brooder's feelings; she crushed them in her innocent hand. No amount of word vomit can sway this chick. And the girly, jealous, plotting plotters have become lethal - but this melodrama is just another difficult day in the life of such characters.
Hehe, all these cliches...AND I'M LOVING IT!!! ;D
Your style of writing is so different and utterly captivating, I can't get enough of it. I can't wait to read the next chapter! Wonderful chapter, once again :)
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: Hi!
I'm giggling here, your review is hilarious. You've summarised the chapter perfectly. Oh, they are plotting on a grand scale of epic proportions. I can't tell you what but it contains sparkles, glitter and heart shapes.
Thank you, this writing style for this story is new for me, but it's really fun to write! Thank you so much.
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That was really intense. But I wanted more :(
Why doesn't Ellis care about him, if they were friends once?and why can't she reciprocate his feelings? is she still in love with her brothers' boyfriend?
And I don't understand why her brother thought Albus's feelings for Ellis was creepy.
And why is Albus so messed up?
It's a pretty original story, it really gets you thinking :)Author's Response: It's a novella/short story, the chapters are supposed to be short.
These are all things I need to answer. (I will, I promise!) :)
Thank you for calling it original, I've made very little effort with this story, it's my craycray write to relax and not care about plot and things story, so it's nice to hear that it makes readers think.
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I love it!! update soon!Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is in the queue. ;)
-Nell :) x Report Review
Loved it. Please update soon 9/10 : )Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is in the queue. ;)
-Nell :) x Report Review
I really liked this chapter! The conversation between Clark and Ellis was very interesting :)
Can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10 :DAuthor's Response: Thank you. The next chapter is in the queue! :)
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This is a great chapter. Please keep updating!
Sometimes things get a little muddled and spelling mistakes interrupt the flow of the story.Author's Response: Thank you! I've got a new writing software, that helps me edit, so hopefully that shouldn't be a problem anymore. :) Report Review
Good work! I hope you update soon!Author's Response: Thank you :) I will!
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*SHOUTS OF JOY* Yes, that's a great idea! I love BDP and if you've written out some more chapters you should defintely update. (but that's just my opinon, feel free to ignore :) Well that was an instresting revelation about Albus. He thinks Ellis completes him? awrh. That would be really cute if he didn't come across as a psycho-maniac-stalker/ spawn of the devil. Either way i still love him. Glad to see Clark and Ellie have made up but i still loathe Cillian for some reason. I just can't nudge of the feeling that he's a slimy piece of poopery. Overall brilliant chapter as always! Author's Response: It is creepy, but to be fair on Albus, Clark said it so of course he's exaggerated Albus's oddness. I feel the same way about Cillian, he's not actually evil but I feel like he should suddenly become Voldemort.
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The characters in this story are so intriguing; every single one of them seems messed up in some way and it's really interesting to watch them slowly unfold. Moody!Albus seems to think he's more complicated than he really is, but it sounds like he has some sort of obsession with poor Ellis. It's kinda weird, but ya know, I live for weird, haha :)
Wonderful chapter once again, I absolutely love your writing style! And updating only this until it's finished? Unsurprisingly, I'm cool beans about that. :)
~Maddie xAuthor's Response: They are all very messed up, think of dramatic tv shows like Skins. That's the kind of melodramatic messed up we're talking about here. Albus is quite complex, but quite simple, he's slightly obsessed, which is creepy, and is something that will be dealt with.
Thank you! I think I will spree this story until it's finished. I want to get it out of my system. :)
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yay first review! love your new banner btw... anyway love this story everyone sounds crazy which means endless plot twists ect (basically my cup of tea). What is up with Albus? he's sounding weirder by the second. love him anyway though, oh and still loving Ellis. Keep updating pretty prettty please with extra cheese (its cheddar)Author's Response: It's so beautiful. Everyone is craycray, the story is craycray. I'm having so much fun writing the endless unrealistic madness. Albus is very weird, there's more melodramatic conversations and scenes to come, which will reveal his character.
Thanks for the review.
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A fantastic plot twist, and I love the tension and everything. Albus written like never before, and I'm really liking him. I can also see him as Harry and Ginny's son, unlike a lot of other Next Gen fics, where the kids don't make sense with the parents at all. I-Have-Rich-Dad-Syndrome definitely hits the nail on the head. ^.^ I really want to see where this goes, with the detention and Hogsmeade, and I'm also curious about backstory, because Albus, Ellis, and Clark used to be friends? At least, Ellis and Albus were childhood friends, right? I'm so curious! And remember the dialogue stuff, errors like that are just distracting from such a great story. Please update soon, it's killing me!Author's Response: There's a lot to happen and a lot to be revealed, I definitely will look at the dialogue tags, when I find time to fix the errors. :) Report Review
This seems like a fun, proudly cliche story that I look forward to reading. My only problem is that you don't follow proper dialogue rules! Start a new paragraph and indent when a new character is speaking, capitalize, and use a comma/question mark/exclamation point! Please, it would make the quality ten times better!Author's Response: Thank you, I'll be sure to try and sort out the dialogue in the story. :) Report Review
Well I think I hate clark and cillian, they both sound like jerks to me. Anyways I hope Albus isn't to snobby and stuck up, like he's been acting for the past two chapters.Author's Response: Everybody is quite messed up in this story, it's a bit like Hogwarts meet Skins. It will lighten up, I hope. :) xx Report Review
Albus is manipulative, but he's got Potter and Weasley blood in him, so their is his big weakness. He's not the bad guy. At least not as much as he thinks. Poor Ellis. :) I like the rivalry, always gives a good plot line.Author's Response: Thanks for the review! :) xx Report Review
Double - no, triple - no, QUADRUPLE (sp?) wow. I loved this, though why do the chapters have to so short? :p I loved Al and his ... weirdness, and I adore Ellis, she is kinda like me in a way, you know, except without a couple of things. Seriously, please update soon, I really want to know what happens next!Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. :) I have no updating skills, so it'll appear when it will appear. :) x Report Review
Love the story, love the idea and love the ending of this chapter, what a twist. Can't wait for more. :-)Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! :) xx Report Review
Whoa, talk about intensity! I've been meaning to read this chapter for a while, sorry that I'm only getting to it now! I really enjoyed the chapter and the Ellis/Cillian/Clark triangle is very interesting. And Albus is very interesting. I can't wait to see how this all plays out!
Can't wait for the next chapter! 10/10 :D
~JessAuthor's Response: This story is unbearably intense, I can only write it when I'm moody, because I'm not that sort of person. Thanks! ♥ Report Review
Oh this was so good! I could totally feel her pain when I read it - poor Ellis! I hope she gets her retribution eventually :)Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you could feel her pain. She may or may not get her retribution, you'll just have to wait and see. :) Report Review
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