Hi :) here to give you my review for the Pureblood challenge.

I don't read much Draco pairings but I actually really enjoyed this and found it really interesting. I thought your description of Astoria was great, you described her without it seeming forced or too descriptive which can be a bad thing if its OTT. I felt that you explored Astoria and she obviously has problems to feel the need to kill, I've never thought of her as a killer before but the way you've written it makes it somehow real and believable. You also focused to the way she was brought up and her life and role in Pureblood society, which I loved. The arranged marriages and I shouldn't lift a finger attitude of Pureblood life was very well written and it gave you an inside on the way the children are brought up. You just let Scorp walk in and walk back out like 'seen and not heard' that's how I imagine them to be. You also gave her the any Pureblood can solve a problem and eliminate it because we have a right, which I was crazy about. You also added that a Pureblood society girl hides her emotions and shows nothing, I really liked that. Very good.

The only thing I can say is I noticed one or few typos so maybe edit it? Maybe add some more thoughts and feelings about blood purity now, just little things like maybe that marrying into the Malfoys is better than marrying a mudblood. That's all I can say.

I really liked this and I'll be posting a blog soon for the winners. Thanks for entering, I enjoyed reading! :) x

Author's Response: Thank you for the great review and it's been a pleasure participating. I was told about the typos before, but I just had no time to edit. :)
Can't wait for the results. :)

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Oh that was so eerie. I've never seen Astoria has a murderer and she did it with such ease. She must not have liked anyone and I thought she was supposed to love Draco. What a terrible woman! I wouldn't want her around that's for sure.

There were a few things I noticed while reading this:

'Scorpio' should be 'Scorpius'
'about his death auntie' death should be 'dead'
"Why won't we order some more tea?" - I think it should be : Why don't we order some more tea?

I don't think there was anything else but that's all that I found. Either way I enjoyed this, it kind of creeped me out though! Hahaha!

Author's Response: Scorpio instead of Scoprpius? That must have been the evil Word! Bad Word, you're bad!
Creepy idea, but I really loved doing it. :)

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