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Review #1, by ginerva_molly_weasley Albus

11th December 2011:
Aw little Albus is the most adorable thing ever. You've made him appear perfectly within his age range but also with him being terrified about the unknown.

I like the fact he has a really good relationship with Teddy as Albus has never seemed the type to be able to confide within his actual brother. And Lily is just adorable :D

I loved it :P

Author's Response: Thanks! :D This is a confidence boost!

Age range is... One of the hard parts of writing children for me... *Phew* That's a relief.

Glad you liked that! And that Lily was adorable!

Thanks for reviewing! :D


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Review #2, by Millarz Albus

11th November 2011:
I really like the idea and the story! I like the brotherly love Teddy and Albus share, and James's prank is really realistic. Abandon it if you REALLY don't have any inspiration for the story any more, but DO NOT DELETE IT! Other people might happen upon it and like it too! I think bringing in Teddy's POV will bring this story more to life though. Happy writing!

Author's Response: I still think this is my worst story >.>

But I won't delete it... Abandon if I can't think of ideas for it within 2 months... That's my limit.

Thanks though! :D


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Review #3, by TheHeirOfSlytherin Albus

28th October 2011:
Oh! It's interesting! It's nice that Albus has Teddy to go to if he needs to talk. I can totally see that! :)


Slytherin Review Brew.

Author's Response: *Phew* I still think this is one of my worst stories (Despite being relatively new? For me? XD), anyways, glad you can see that! :D


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Review #4, by BKL8008 Albus

21st October 2011:
I'm going to be brutally honest with you here, and please don't take this wrong! This is an intriguing plot for a short series of stories. It really is. It's a very interesting subject that I was going to cover more of in my doorstop-sized New Marauders, but ended up cutting it. I have often wondered how Magical children would feel on turning 11. Given a bit of what we see of them in DH7, and the end of the 7.2 film, we can extrapolate something about them. Lily is all fired up for it. James certainly would be, seemingly cocksure and arrogant. And Albus seems shy and timid. You don't develop that here. You have characters in the kids that I don't feel a thing for, and know nothing about, other than that Albus is depressed. Why is he depressed? You hint about it, that Lily here is excited. But then you've rushed over it and suddenly they're out the door and into the Burrow. See what I mean? With a bit more fleshing out, this could be a really fascinating read, but it cries out for more characterization.

Author's Response: Thanks for bringing that up...

I'm going to defend myself for a second, when I posted this it felt off... I'll probably go and edit it heavily later on... It felt sorta... forced and off.

I'm glad you took the time to review it and bring up the characterization problem!


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