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Review #1, by adluvshp Love's Flower

7th March 2014:
Blackout Battle 14/15

This was very sweet and tugged right at my heartstrings.
I loved your depiction of James and Lily. You really showed the beauty of their relationship here.
The use of the poem was just breathtaking. It fit in very well with the theme of the story.
The descriptions were very well written and made every bit so vivid.
The only CC I'd give you is to perhaps add in some scenes with dialogue to make us connect to James and Lily more. That would have made this even better.
Otherwise, good job =)

-AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hello!
I'm glad you liked it! I wrote this rather early on, before I really got into James/Lily or the Marauder era- hopefully whenever I get back to editing my old stories, I'll be able to add a bit more to this :) Thanks for reviewing and the CC!

~Sara


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Review #2, by missclaire17 Love's Flower

16th January 2013:
I FOUND YOU SECRET SANTA!! (:
thanks for the awesome reviews, btw! and as a thanks, here's a review for you!

I LOVED that you wrote this in Lily's perspective, and I love that this is written about James and Lily in the after life. Sometimes, I feel like some Potterheads just think because Snape 'atoned' for his sins, he will go to the after life and his love life with Lily will magically become better and Snape and Lily will be together forever, but people forget that Lily still chose and loves James and that they have forever together in the afterlife.

I love that you wrote they had their issues because James and Lily died as a married couple so early in their marriage life that it is impossible for problems not to crop up. I love that you wrote that they fixed their problems and just continued loving each other.

I love everything about this, and I LOVE that this is in Lily's perspective. Sometimes, I love Jily even more when Lily's writing it because let's be real. If you're not Jily, then you're Snily. and the only thing Jily and Snily have in common is Lily.

So writing about Lily loving James, even without thinking of Snily, makes me so happy because it's like we never got as much affirmation as from James's side of Lily's love, though we definitely know she did and does and always will!

Anyways, great one-shot!

Author's Response: Hi there Santee :) I'm glad you liked your reviews, your stories were awesome!

I know what you mean with the whole Snape thing. Lily still chose James, right? Snape may have changed for the better, but he had changed for the worse first. I'm definitely a Jily fan all the way :)

I'm glad you liked it in Lily's perspective. I originally had written it in James', and I decided I wanted to do Lily's instead- so I'm glad it worked out!

Thank you so much for the review!

~Sara


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Review #3, by CloakAuror9 Love's Flower

4th February 2012:
Hello! I know! I'm so sorry if I took so long to get this review across. School has been keeping me away from the computer! But I'm here right now, aren't I?

Eeeep! James and Lily! This story is so sweet. I love it. It's the perfect story! I always imagined that somewhere in this fiction filled world of ours that someone wrote something about James/Lily afterlife. And then ta! Here you are with you're awesome story.

Mhm. I really like the way that you just went on general talking here not being too specific. It's a nice break from all the specific descriptions, no matter how good they are. It really sets the story apart from everyone else's. The story for this one is UNIQUE.

Yep, unique indeed. I don't know what to say. I'm really speechless right now. It's just so awesome. Argh. 1 million/10

I really need to go :{
Ta-ta for now,
CloakAuror9 xx

Author's Response: Thank you! I like being unique :P

~Sara


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Review #4, by Santa Love's Flower

2nd January 2012:
:couch:

*has no excuses*

:(

BUT YOUR STORY... OMG. It was STUNNING. The use of the poem was beautiful and you told the story with such grace that I felt like I had fallen into their lives and was surrounded by it. Kind of like a pensive, but more vivid because pensive scenes are bleak in the movies, but this was all consuming and bright and... oh. I cannot even describe it.

I don't read a lot of poetry, but I felt taken by this poem because it was simple and beautiful and it fit in with the story you were telling so perfectly. I really enjoyed the story. I can't think of anything else to say, so this isn't a very helpful review, but I just loved every moment of it!

OOH! AND I GET TO FAVORITE YOU! Because favoriting you before would have given me away... but now I can! :D

Keep up the amazing writing and happy holidays! I really enjoyed getting to read your work and play with GIMP productively! :P

(h) (h) (h)

SANTA

Author's Response: Oh Santa.

Eee. Thank youuu. I'm glad you liked it. ( You know.cause that's sort of what I was going for. Having people like it...xD)

Yay :)

Thanky

~Sara


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Review #5, by Secret Santa! Love's Flower

18th December 2011:
Happy holiday season!

This was such a touching one-shot. I absolutly loved it!
I remember reading this poem back in school and as much as I liked it, I found you gave it a brand new life, a much deeper connotation. You did a wonderful job using his words to shape your story and creating something else with it.

I found James and Lily's relationship was perfect. If people really do have a second life after they die, well this is exactly what I would imagine these two to have. Lily was simply perfect, a loving mother, a passionate being.

This was a great read and I feel completly overwhelmed with emotion right now; you really madaged to pass the emotions through the page, great, great job!

Your Secret Santa!

Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to get the emotions just right, I'm really glad you think I did! Yay :D
Thank you Santa!
~Sara


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Review #6, by SeverusSnape15 Love's Flower

22nd October 2011:
Well, this is a cute little fic. I want to start by saying Thank you for entering my Challenge.

So, I think you took the poem and fit it in perfectly...but I think you could have done better. It was interesting to see how you worked the poem in, but most of this stuff we already knew. It wouldn't have hurt to put in a bit of dialogue either :)

But don't get me wrong, I do like it. And it fit the poem PERFECTLY. Nice job, love.

Author's Response: Thanks!

~Sara


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Review #7, by Levana Love's Flower

19th October 2011:
I.Loved.This. This was so amazing! I have not read anything like this at all. I was really sad through most of it, then it got happy!. I love how you transitioned between it being sad and happy. It wasn't like a BAM happy. It was smooth. Nice job! :D

~Maggie

Author's Response: EEE :) Thank you :) I use smileys to much... :)
Yes, the BAM isn't always as good as the smooth. xD Thanks

~Sara *squish*


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