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Review #1, by Billy Joe Astoria Greengrass

11th November 2016:
Can you tell me the actress in the picture you used of Astoria Greengrass.

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for reading. I unfortunately don't remember, I had searched on TDA for a suitable person.

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Review #2, by Oregonian Scorpius Malfoy

26th May 2015:
Back again for a review of Chapter Three. My favorite lines in this chapter are “…you better write to your father too. He’ll like that,” and “Ravenclaw wasn’t bad, in fact it was good.”

Another charming chapter. Scorpius at age eleven seems shyer and more hesitant than the two girls in the previous chapters. Perhaps it’s because girls mature faster than boys do.

I wondered why there was pin-drop silence after his House was announced by the Hat. Was it because no one believed that a Malfoy could be Sorted into any House except Slytherin? If so, then this present result might be an indicator of how the ancient stereotypes about the Slytherin House or the Malfoy family might be breaking down. Good. Even ideas that are seemingly set in stone need to be challenged occasionally.

I notice that in the three chapters of this story, you have your characters Sorted into three different Houses. So far, no one associated with the Malfoy family is being Sorted into Gryffindor. I suppose that things change, with time, but some things take a little longer. :)

A nice finish to your story about the Sorting of the three generations. What an original idea this little collection of short stories is. A pleasure to read it.


Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! Glad you liked Scorpius here. Yes, there was silence because they definitely had felt he'd be a Slytherin!

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Review #3, by Oregonian Astoria Greengrass

26th May 2015:
What a charming story! You have really given Astoria a unique personality, showing us many different qualities that all add up to a cohesive overall personality.

It is refreshingly original to depict a first-year who is not nervous or frightened about the Sorting process, but rather eager and excited, or, as the Hat says, enthusiastic. I loved your line about the first years who “looked ready to bolt.” A marvelous insight, that some might want to turn tail and run, although I don’t think that any ever did.

She is certainly spunky, daring to talk first to the Sorting Hat, just to test whether her father’s account had been true or only a joke. And thank you for your own spunk in daring to flout the conventional assumption and put her into Hufflepuff. That was certainly where she fit, after all that we had seen of her. The suggestion in your story was that her parents had been Slytherins; if so, it gives the lie to the notion that all Slytherins are haughty and cold-hearted. (Being a Slytherin myself, I welcome any evidence that disproves that stereotype!)

I enjoyed her observation about the Malfoy family. Another touch of irony there. She has no idea that the family she thinks of as “complete maniacs,” “strange,” “cruel,” and “intimidating” would someday become her in-laws.

Since we know next to nothing about Astoria from canon, I have really enjoyed reading your perception of her.

A very nice job.


Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! I'm pleased you liked my portrayal of Astoria!

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Review #4, by Oregonian Narcissa Black

26th May 2015:
I really like this glimpse of the child Narcissa, already steeled by her mother to project the perfectly-controlled image of a Black, but still with a child’s insecurities and capacity for surprise. Her emotions, which she so successfully hides by dint of long practice, are sprinkled throughout your little story to convinces that behind the facade, Narcissa is not much different from all of us. Squirmy guts, clammy palms, pounding heart, worry about the future, all there just under the surface.

I loved your line “The Hat prophesied as well?” Now there’s an uncommon twist to the usual Sorting Hat conversation. The Hat predicts that she will bring a change and do something big. The irony is that she doesn’t know, but we do, what that change and that big something will be. She naturally assumes that it will be something in line with her family’s values, something that will make her family very happy.

Do you suppose she remembered this prophecy as the years went by, wondering when her grand deed would be accomplished, or wondering if perhaps the Sorting Hat had been mistaken? Do you suppose, when the moment came, that she identified it as the moment that the Hat had prophesied?
Did she ever tell anyone about this prophesy?

This story is very well-written. It is to the point, with each phrase and each sentence doing its duty. There are no superfluous words, nothing awkward, nothing unclear. So it is very enjoyable to read.

I’ll bet that most of us readers have a sympathetic attitude towards Narcissa, eventually a strong woman in a horrible situation, so it is a pleasure to read about her at this critical moment in her life.

Nice job.


Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! I'm glad you liked it, and could sympathise towards Narcissa. I definitely think that she'd have reflected back on the prophecy some day after the war!

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Review #5, by Lostmyheart Scorpius Malfoy

20th April 2015:
I knew it! I've seen so many stories where Scorpius is sorted into Ravenclaw, so this doesn't really surprise me. I seriously like the fact that he enjoys reading books, just like his grandmother.

He truly seems like a sweet kid, not too Malfoy-ish, except with the pride that the hat detected, but it mustn't have been that big since he could be sorted into Ravenclaw.

It seemed like Draco wasn't very dad-ish when they said goodbye, and Scorpius gave him this shy hug which makes me believe they aren't as close as Scorpius is with his mother.
I almost mentioned this in the second chapter review, that Astoria seemed to be the opposite of Draco and that scenario only made me think that it was true. You'd think the Malfoys would be more protective of their child, since they always seem to get one single child and not more than that, right?
If Scorpius, (or Draco in his late teens) died, that would be the end of that bloodline. If I was proud of my bloodline, I'd ensure that it would live one by making at least two or three kids. You never know :b

Anyway, I loved this short story collection and that it was all about their sorting into houses. Each of them very different from the other and you did it brilliantly!

Lots of hugs and love,

Author's Response: Hey!

Thank you for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked the fact Scorpius was in Ravenclaw. He is definitely not too Malfoy-ish, he takes after his mom xD

Astoria is very different from Draco yes - she's the "light" to his darkness =)

I am glad you enjoyed this little collection! Thank you!

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Review #6, by Lostmyheart Astoria Greengrass

20th April 2015:
Hi again, Angie!

I'm so sorry for the delay. I've been working on my project, and trying to get my internship contract settled. But alas, here I am, happy as a clam because your story is so adorable!

Astoria is just like how I always pictured her! Sweet, kind and helpful. I've never pictured her as this uptight girl who clearly thinks she worth a thousand galleons or something, so this AStoria you've written is one hundred percent matching the girl I've had in my mind.

I love how eager she is and the fact that it isn't normal for the new kids to be sorted quickly.

I'll go on and read the next chapter, Scorpius? I can't wait to see what house you'll sort him into!

- Avi

Author's Response: Hey Avi! No worries about the delay - as it is you doing this means a lot to me and I'm so happy with all your reviews, thanks a ton =) Good luck with the internship and project!

I am pleased you found the story adorable and liked the way I portrayed Astoria. I imagine her exactly the way you imagine her I guess xD Thanks!

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Review #7, by Lostmyheart Narcissa Black

18th April 2015:
Here I am again, Angie!

What a lovely short chapter about Narcissa, I rarely read any stories about her, so it's refreshing to read this story of yours.
She's only eleven years old and I can already see that she isn't a bad person at heart. The way she constantly thinks that she isn't "allowed" to do this and that, it only shows that she doesn't completely agree with them. Otherwise she'd think "I can't do this" - if you know what I mean?
I'm probably reading too much into it, hehe.

She's adorable and I felt bad for her that her sisters think she reads too much. Already there she's a lot more different than them, and kids being kids - different means a bad thing. Hmpf.

I enjoyed reading this chapter, and I look forward to read the next one. I can't remember who it's about, so let's see if I get surprised :b

Lots of love,

Author's Response: Hey Avi! Thanks again for reading and reviewing! I am glad you liked my portrayal of Narcissa's 11 year old self. And no you are not reading too much into it - it's how I imagined it!
Thanks again for such lovely reviews!

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Review #8, by Maelody Scorpius Malfoy

5th February 2015:
Poor little Scorpius! How scary would it be to be sorted and have absolute silence in such a big hall follow after? Thank Merlin McGonagall had the sense to clap! Then everyone was so excited! D'aw! :3

I love the little chat he had with his mother before he left. Especially since he was so worried about being sorted in 'the wrong house'. Her words made me smile. I just love your Astoria! :D

I'd sort of like to see another chapter added to this little short story collection, just to see an unexpected character sorted into Gryffindor. Since, you know, the other three are all different Houses. Though I have no idea who you could write it over haha. Maybe a second generation character? That'd be cool. ;)

Alright, dear! That wraps up the Hot Seat week! :D I'm so delighted to see that you were in the hot seat because I've been meaning to stop by and read all of your Narcissa stories, and I'm so glad I got to! :D And then the rest of your stories were so pleasant and so good to read! :3 You're amazing, dear! You truly are! I'm sorry I couldn't get to The Worst, but I promise to re-read the first couple of chapters and then get into it again as soon as I can! I enjoyed spending my day off on your page and I hope you have a lovely time reading all of your lovely reviews from the week! Hope your fingers to cramp up too much from all the replying! ;)


Author's Response: Haha yes poor Scorpius - but well McGonagall saved the day!

I am so happy you liked Astoria here too - I tried to portray her as an older version of the Astoria we saw earlier.

I am not a fan of Gryffindor - I feel it's overdone, but I guess I could do it one day, if I get the right idea!

Thank you so, so much for all your delightful reviews during the Hot Seat! You're truly amazing to have reviewed ALL of my completed stories - wow!! THANK YOU! *hugs and chocolate coming your way*

Thanks =)

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Review #9, by Maelody Astoria Greengrass

5th February 2015:
I love the identity you gave her! It just makes everything about Astoria so much more likable! Especially since everyone ships Rose and Scorpius so much! I think that if, in the times Draco and Astoria went to school, they were both Slythrins, their son would never have turned out to be like everyone else thinks of him. So this is absolutely perfect! I love it! :D

Daphne will just have to get over herself. :p

Aww! The hat was surprised by her! How cute! And I love that she so openly loves her father. Though I wonder how he will react to her letter home? Also, who was the girl she helped? I'd love to get to know that as well! I hope she's sorted into Hufflepuff, too so Astoria has a friend! :D

This was just too freakin' adorable! I love little Astoria! Now I want to know how her and Draco came to be lovers since she was so scared of his father as a little girl! xD See what you do to me, Angie? You evoke so many questions! I need answers! :p


Author's Response: This is the first time I wrote Astoria and I wasn't entirely sure how I wanted to portray her but I'm glad you liked her here.

I think her father will be happy for her - he just loves her a lot the way she loves him and he wants what's best for his daughter, so he wouldn't mind. The girl she helped is just someone who becomes a close friend of Astoria's later =) {and yes she's a Hufflepuff}.

Haha things change as people grow up, don't they? And war changes a lot. Maybe it's a one-shot of another time as to how Draco and Astoria came to be (though maybe I'm too much of a Dramione fan to actually write it).

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Review #10, by Maelody Narcissa Black

5th February 2015:
Awww! A story about a little Cissy! :3 How cute! :D

I love that the hat covered her head! xD At least she got to show emotion under that without anyone seeing!

Hmm. A Ravenclaw? That would have been interesting. Though I bet her life would have been drastically different if she went that route. Though it's nice to see that her family wouldn't have really minded much if that were the route she took. She just didn't want to be teased.

Hah! A sweet Bella. That's a change! Though I loved seeing it. ;) And I always love seeing Andromeda in anything! Seeing all three of them this young was super cool! Though, knowing their mother from your last few Cissy stories, how proper she seems to be, I wonder what she would think of Bella. She holds her names and values well, but she definitely doesn't behave like a proper lady! xD Maybe you should write about her next! :D *winkwinknudgenudge*

Great job, dear! Then again, how could I expect anything but? ;)


Author's Response: Haha it is Cissy again xP

I am pleased you found this cute and the idea of her in Ravenclaw as interesting. Her life would have been different yes, but I guess eleven year old Cissy chose her path differently.

As for Bella, she was still young here - not too sweet but just a little, especially towards her family. I am glad you liked this all - thank you!

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Review #11, by Lululuna Scorpius Malfoy

10th June 2013:
Hi! I noticed both you and the next person in review tag reviewed my stories, so thought I'd leave you a review as well! :)

Aw, this was such a sweet little conclusion to this collection! It was sweet to see how kind Astoria was to her son, and her traits from the last chapter certainly came through. I almost wish Narcissa had been there to see him off as well, just to bring the story full cycle! :)

I'm glad Scorpius ended up a Ravenclaw, it was unexpected. It was cute how he justified it with the fact he enjoyed reading, and that McGonagall led the clapping in embracing Scorp and not judging him for his father and grandfather's faults. It's a great way to think of Hogwarts continuing into the next generation.

This was a fun little collection to read and explore, and I like how you surprised me while reading it! Good job! :D

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks again for reading and reviewing =)

I am pleased you found this a sweet conclusion to the collection. I played around with the idea of Narcissa being there but then I wasn't sure. If I edit in the future, I'll surely think about it again.

I am glad you liked my choice of Scorpius' house, and found his reaction cute. Indeed, I wanted to show that McGonagall (or any of the school staff) will not judge him for his father's and grandfather's pasts so I am glad it came through to you.

I am happy to get your reviews on this collection, thanks =)

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Review #12, by Lululuna Astoria Greengrass

7th June 2013:
Tag! :)

Aw, this was so sweet, and I'm always excited to read about Astoria. I really like how you portrayed her here, and I'm surprised that I didn't catch on she'd be a Hufflepuff earlier on. It's so unexpected, especially since she ends up with Malfoy, but very fitting to shake things up that she becomes a Hufflepuff. I loved how caring she was, helping the scared little girl out of the boat and reassuring her, and sparing some compassion for Draco, which was also a great nod towards the future. What a lovely little girl she was!

I think you gave a little credit and painted Hufflepuff in a positive light. Astoria isn't a 'Puff because she's unsuitable for anywhere else, but because she possesses the wonderful attributes which make Hufflepuffs special.

Great job, again! This collection is so sweet, and I like the original spin you put on it! It's interesting comparing Astoria's sorting to Narcissa's sorting, and how different they both are! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing.

I am pleased you liked my version of Astoria, and my sorting of her. I am glad you find it fitting. Yeah I wanted to show Hufflepuff in a positive light and highlight her Puff features before sorting her =)

Thanks again for your lovely review, and I am pleased you liked the way I did things.

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Review #13, by Lululuna Narcissa Black

24th May 2013:
Hi, here for some review tag! :)

I liked this little sorting ceremony story a lot. I have a weakness for our favourite characters being turned into innocent little eleven year olds anxious for the future, and this was a really nice bit of insight into Cissy's mind. I liked the little details that hinted about her personality, like the fact that she was determined to appear a certain way though she was inwardly nervous.

I also thought it was funny how she didn't want to be in Ravenclaw because her sisters and cousins would tease her, it was very typical of a child and very sweet! I enjoyed the detail about Andromeda comforting Narcissa when Bellatrix is being a little rude, it fits so well with her character.

My favourite bit of foreshadowing here was probably the hat telling Narcissa that she was destined to do something great. She thinks that she's going to do something brave that makes her powerful, but in fact it will be her un-Slytherin traits, like her love and loyalty to her family, which will make her save Harry's life that night in the forest. So I thought that was a very nice detail. :)

I never thought much about Cissy as a child, but you really brought her to life and gave her depth here. Good job! :)

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing.

I am glad you liked this sorting ceremony story. I love turning characters into eleven year olds too, and Narcissa is one of my favourite characters, so I am glad you liked what I did, and the little details as well.

Yeah I figured that an eleven-year-old would think of such things, glad you found it funny! Though I didn't show much of Andromeda and Bellatrix, I still wanted to hint at their personalities from Narcissa's point of view, so I am pleased you like that.

Indeed, it was my favourite bit to write too. The sorting hat can be very wise at times xD You exactly voiced my thoughts while writing that scene. I am glad you found it a nice detail.

I brought her to life and gave her depth? Really? Thanks a ton!

Your words mean a lot to me, thank you!

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Review #14, by melian Scorpius Malfoy

14th March 2013:
Hogwarts: a Revised HIstory? I loved that. I wonder who revised it? I can just see Hermione doing something like that.

Back on topic, though, again you surprised me with the House you chose. Like I said in the last review, I just expected that all these people would end up in Slytherin, whereas in reality only one of them did. (In this telling, at least.) I hope Astoria was right and Draco would support his son whatever House he was in, because I can see him being very disappointed that the Malfoy tradition wasn't followed.

All in all this was a very engaging, thought-provoking set of one-shots, and I'm glad I took the time to read them. Well done!

Author's Response: Thanks for dropping by again!

Yes, I thought that so many things happened in Hogwarts after the trio's time so someone (or maybe even Hermione, as you said) could have revised it xD

I am glad I succeeded in surprising you, as that was my intention. Yes, Draco has changed and he should definitely support his son - and it is not like Scorpius ended up in Gryffindor - and Astoria is there with him too.

I am pleased you liked all the three little stories. Thanks for reading and reviewing!

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Review #15, by melian Astoria Greengrass

14th March 2013:
Hufflepuff? Well, that did surprise me, I must admit. Granted, throughout the story she didn't really show the traits of a Slytherin, but I suppose that with the three people you were profiling that they would all end up in that House. Silly of me, wasn't it? Anyway, I thought this was an interesting look at the Sorting of a character we know so little about. Nice that she was so open minded as to where she would end up, though I suspect Daphne would have been disappointed they didn't share a House. Good story! :)

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing again! I wanted to try out something new so I put her in Hufflepuff. Astoria is pretty much a blank slate when it comes to canon anyway =)

haha not silly at all. I wanted to show how 3 people of the same family could be different in their personalities =)

I am glad you found this interesting and liked Astoria's open-mindedness. Yes, Daphne would definitely be disappointed xP

Thank you!

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Review #16, by melian Narcissa Black

14th March 2013:
Very nicely done! I like the juxtaposition between the expectation that she behave like the lady she has been brought up to be, and the little girl wanting to express herself. It seems a little odd to me that Narcissa would be seen as an arbiter of change, though I suppose there iscertainly an argument for that.

One thing that did strike me is the description of her having strawberry blonde hair. Narcissa is always portrayed as having white blonde hair, not with a tinge of red as strawberry would indicate. Not necessarily an error, but something that struck me as odd.

Anyway, that nolwithstanding, I thought it was a very interesting take on her Sorting. Well done!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Sorry for the delay in responding.

I am glad you liked this, and the way I showed how Narcissa was caught up between the lady and the girl. I think she could be the arbiter of change - after all, if she had not lied to Voldemort about Harry being dead, things would have turned out very different in the end.

I thought that perhaps as a child she could have had strawberry blonde hair and it grew lighter over the years?

I am glad you like it though, thank you!

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Review #17, by CambAngst Astoria Greengrass

21st February 2013:
Tagging you again from Review Tag 2.0!

Wow! Astoria Greengrass as a Hufflepuff. For pretty obvious reasons, I'd never considered any house other that Slytherin. At the same time, I don't see anything wrong with your choice. She's a completely blank slate in terms of canon, so you can put her wherever you like and make it work.

The qualities you gave her -- an earnest sort of eagerness, kindness, a friendly and welcoming disposition -- all fit perfectly in Hufflepuff. From the very beginning of the story, I loved the idea of her as a girl who's not only excited but also very comfortable with where she's about to be. It made perfect sense: her family is magical going back for generations, her father has told her all about the sorting and her sister is already at Hogwarts. There isn't much for her to be worried about.

She was so nice to the little girl who was afraid to step out of her boat. This girl is night and day compared to the way her sister is typically characterized and definitely not a thing like her future husband. I have to imagine that Draco would have pushed the little girl's boat back out into the lake if he thought nobody was looking.

Her dialog with the Sorting Hat sounded just about right. Nothing too deep or foreboding. She seems to have been a rather easy decision in the sense that she wasn't strongly attached to any particular house going in.

I didn't see a thing wrong with your writing. Everything flowed nicely and you had a good mix of dialog, narrative and exposition. No typos that I could see.

Nicely done!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for your lovely review.

I am glad you found my characterisation of Astoria to fit into Hufflepuff. She is a blank slate indeed so I gave her my own spin. I am pleased you liked the idea of her being excited about where she'd be and feel comfortable about the sorting.

Haha indeed, Astoria is different from her sister, and her future husband.

I am glad you liked the dialogue with Sorting, as I was afraid to over-do it.

Thank you so much for all your praise, I am glad you liked it all.

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Review #18, by CloakAuror9 Scorpius Malfoy

31st January 2013:
Scorpius. ♥ This was shorter than the rest but this is definitely the cutest. I love the relationship between Scorpius and Astoria and how she mentions that she was a Hufflepuff so Scorpius shouldn't worry. In a way, he kind of reminded of Albus when he was worrying over what house he was going to be sorted in.

Anyway, it's been a fun three-chapter journey! I think what I learnt from your story is that we shouldn't judge someone just because of their past. Astoria and Scorpius's ancestors were Slytherins but that didn't mean that they were going to be Slytherins too. I loved the story and I had so much fun reading them! Amazing job, thank you for writing this! :D ♥


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Author's Response: hey! Thanks a ton for reading and reviewing this one as well.

I am glad you found this cute, I adore Scorpius too xD Its good to know that you liked my portrayal of Scorpius' relationship with Astoria.

Aw I am so pleased to know that you liked all the three chapters, and that you managed to learn something from this little short story collection. I always believe that people shouldn't be judged on the basis of their pasts either!

Thanks again for all your awesome reviews, and congrats on reaching 100 reviews!

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Review #19, by CloakAuror9 Astoria Greengrass

31st January 2013:
Ooh! That was a definitely nice surprise! Astoria Greengrass as a Hufflepuff is something that I've never read before, though I think it would suit her since she seemed really sweet and nice. She even bothered to help the other girl get off the boat! I like your characterisation of her.

I love the fact that you're giving her your own identity. And it's not like anyone can hold you for it because the books doesn't say anything about what house she was sorted in, a lot of us just assume that she was a Slytherin.

I'll admit that this chapter didn't flow as good as the previous one for me but I think that's just because this was longer than the other on what with the boat scene and all. Still a great job though! :D


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Author's Response: Thank you once again for reading and reviewing this!

Astoria was always a Hufflepuff in my head canon so I wanted to write her as one in this story. I always think that Draco needed that balance in his life. I am glad to know that you liked my characterisation of her.

Yep, I was a little worried about canon-nitpickers would bash me for giving her my own identity, but I figured I was safe since the books dont exactly tell us that she was a Slytherin.

I am sorry that this didn't flow as good as the previous one for you, but yeah that'd probably be because of the boat scene. I just wanted to make it a little different than the previous one, and not focus on the sorting only.

Thanks a lot for your lovely comments!

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Review #20, by CloakAuror9 Narcissa Black

31st January 2013:
This is the second time I've read a story by you about Narcissa and you have a talent when it comes to her characterisation, even when it comes in the form of her eleven year old self. I love how she kept on going about acting prim and proper. It makes you realise just how much she was trained by her parents to act this way!

From the very start, it's obvious that she's one that likes to keep the peace in her family. She didn't want to do anything that could possibly upset her parents or her cousins during her time at Hogwarts. I think that's one of the reasons as to why she is such a great mother to Draco!

Amazing job with the writing! Everything flowed so well and I just enjoyed it! :D


98th review out of 100

Author's Response: Hey again! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing this one, its one of my personal favourites ;)

I am glad that you like my characterisation of Narcissa, be it her eleven year old self, or her motherly self xD I always believed that pureblood parents really train their children in specific ways and I tried to show that here too, so I am happy you liked it =)

You have described her very aptly, that's exactly how she is! I am glad that you could understand her character from this little story so well.

Thanks a lot for your wonderful review!

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Review #21, by Courtney Dark Astoria Greengrass

29th January 2013:

Hmm, it seems like I have read and reviewed several of your stories now and I have to say, I am really enjoying the experience! You have a very sophisticated style of writing that is easy to read and hooks me in immediately.

You're right, we don't know much about Astoria from the books, though I guess I've always just assumed she was in Slytherin, so I found this chapter very interesting. I actually like that she was sorted into Hufflepuff-it also makes it sorta sweet that Draco ended up marrying a witch from Hufflepuff! And that's probably how I'm going to imagine it from now on!

I liked your characterization of Astoria is this chapter. She seemed pretty bold and fearless, while at the same time having a definite edge of innocence and sweetness about her. Your depiction of her has actually made me want to read more about Astoria, so nice work!


Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you like reading my stories and find my writing style "sophisticated" and "hooking". I am very flattered!

I wanted to give a different spin to Astoria, and so I put her in Hufflepuff, and I am glad you could accept it.

I put some thought into Astoria's characterisation so I appreciate the fact that you liked her depiction. There are some lovely stories on Astoria out there, and I hope you get a chance to read them =)


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Review #22, by patronus_charm Scorpius Malfoy

19th January 2013:
I'm glad that I decided to carry on reading, as this was a very enjoyable read! I loved how though all the characters were interlinked, they were all different and that showed in which house they were placed, and the most important thing was that they were happy with their choice!

One CC British people wouldn't really say Momma, it would probably be mummy or mum:D

Other than that I thought this story was great, as I've always loved the sorting, as it shows the characters true identity! Kiana:D

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for reading and reviewing this chapter too!!

I am glad you liked the idea of interlinking the characters but keeping them all different =)
I always think that ultimately everyone should be happy with the Hat's choice.

Oh since I am not British I didn't know, but thanks =) I'll make that change to mummy when I edit!

Thank you once more!

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Review #23, by patronus_charm Narcissa Black

19th January 2013:
Hello, it's patronus_charm from the review tag!

I liked how Narcissa Black's true emotions were hidden, as that's an important part of being Black, never reveal your true emotions! You say she had strawberry blonde hair, I thought it was platinum, I guess it could go lighter as she gets older though:)

The way you described her upbringing is exactly how I imagined it to be, and it made me feel rather sorry for Narcissa, as it doesn't sound very pleasant having to remain 'proper' all of the time. I thought it was a good idea to include where her infamous nose wrinkling comes from!

It's interesting to ponder how much would have changed if Narcissa would have been sorted into Ravenclaw, as it could have resulted in no Draco possibly.

It was nice to how caring Andromeda was, as I'm always interested to see how people make all three sisters interact with one another, and I think you did a really believable job!

Overall I thought it was a great chapter, and a really interesting perspective to explore! I loved the last line about Narcissa only being free in dreams, I thought it was great! I'm off to read the next chapters now, Kiana :D

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked my characterisation of Narcissa, her emotions, and her upbringing.

Oh I always thought she had strawberry blonde hair, but yeah it could get lighter as she grows up.

I wanted to invent something of my own regarding the nose wrinkling to amuse my readers, and at the same time show her innocence, so I am glad you found it a good idea.

Hmm that's very true. I always think the houses people get sorted into define a lot of their future courses in life.

I am glad you liked Andromeda's portrayal too, and found the interaction between the three sisters believable.

Thanks again for reading!

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Review #24, by 800 words of heaven Narcissa Black

18th January 2013:

Well, the thing that stood out the most for me in this chapter, was Narcissa and her characterisation. I thought it was really well done!

In the first few lines, you managed to describe the quintessential pre-Sorting experience, with the sweaty palms and fast heartbeat, and all that, but what I really liked was that in those first lines, you also gave us an insight into the mind of eleven-year-old Narcissa in such a way that you could see her becoming the Narcissa we first meet in the books.

As the piece went on, I think you revealed different aspects of Narcissa's character as an adult through the mind of an eleven-year-old girl very skillfully. The line, “…she closed her eyes for a fleeting moment, wrinkled her nose like Bella had taught her,” really showed (to me, at least) that part of Narcissa that was nervous and afraid, and also that part of Narcissa that looked up to Bella. I think, these two parts of Narcissa war within her for a while during the series, and suggesting those aspects were already warring within her at such a young age, is quite insightful - it kind of makes you think that perhaps young Sirius might have felt the same way, at some point.

I also really enjoyed the ironic foreshadowing by the Hat at the end of this chapter - very clever, indeed!

A unique take on quite an intriguing character!

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

I am glad that you liked my characterisation of Narcissa!

Its good to know that you think I made the eleven-year-old Narcissa align with the one we see in the books.

Thank you for your thoughtful comments. I tried to reveal as much as I could about Narcissa, trying to foreshadow her future actions which we see in the books, so I am glad it worked!

The Hat's dialogues were a struggle to write so its great to know that you enjoyed it!

Thank you!

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Review #25, by Calypso  Narcissa Black

14th January 2013:
Hello! I'm here from Review Tag!

I've always found Narcissa a fascinating character and this was a great little look into her mind! It really fitted with the Narcissa we know in canon, but gave an insight into her mind which you don't really get in the books.

I really admire how you brought across her nervousness with her desire to hide it: her childishness is definitely there, but you can also see how she will evolve into the inscrutable Black lady one day. Her nagging worries about the reactions of her family are subtle but pervasive. I thought that she seemed extremely realistic.

Before reading this, I'd never considered that Narcissa has Ravenclaw qualities, but I can really see it now... I liked the Hat's parting words to her about being a Slytherin. It's often a house represented as very two-dimensional so it's good to see it being given more depth!

I also liked the way you characterised Bellatrix and Andromeda, even though they were only directly mentioned at the end. Their reactions to Narcissa's Sorting seemed very telling...

All in all, a really great study of a character and of the Sorting process itself! I really enjoyed reading this!


Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reading and reviewing!

I am glad you liked this, and found my Narcissa in tie with canon, and found her eleven-year-old self realistic.

I always thought of Narcissa having some Ravenclaw qualities (look at her cleverness and pride) so I wanted the Hat to take that into consideration.

Thanks again for your sweet review :)

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