Hey, this story is AMAAZING.
Like I just wanna say, you are so creative coming up with the names for the chapter. It's brilliant.
I totally love the Scorpius, getting kicked out, brown hair thing.
ITS SO CUTE!
James could act like awkward idk bout that one.
And for the plan what about like, dating ( fake dating) Albus to gte back at James. Like announcing it at his birthday..whatever
You awesome creative writer update soon, please

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Germinates probably has the most unfortunate name to ever exist but she's awesome and she's probably my favourite character.

Author's Response: Yes yes haha. It's on the run to rank one on 'Worst Names in the Wizarding World (or maybe even the entire world)' right past Scorpius Hyperion Malfoy hahahaha. But I think Scorp is running toward rank one too so Idk about that. :)

And yess, she's awesome (and she knows it) and you're awesome too so hmm, I see a friendship coming haha. Thank you for the review! :)

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OH MY HOLY JESUS MOTHER OF GODRIC IT'S BEEN UPDATED
THIS.
IS.
EXCITING.
I can't I can't.

Ok, so it's weird because I was thinking about this story on like... Sunday and now it's been updated. Fate, methinks.

To answer your (a) question, my friend recently got cheated on... and he's always avoiding her, or if someone is talking to her and he's nearby he just stares awkwardly down at the floor... Huff. Some people just lose their dignity. (I mean this may not help you because James goes into Fortescue's on purpose, but eh... thought I'd give it a shot)

Good luck with this story aaand with college!

Author's Response: Yes haha, It's been updated and Idk when the next update would be. baha, maybe after midterms hee.

&Oh yess, it's totally fate haha. You and my fic are made for each other! (but that's not what you mean, is it?) :3

anyways, I get that. I mean, an ex is supposed to cower down and HIDEHIDEHIDE at the sight of an ex but I dunno why I even made James appear! Maybe because...haha.

Anywhos thank youuu for the help (it did help, y'know.) and for the good luck too (can I ask one for midterms too? haha)! You're such a lovely person! ^^,



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HAHAHAHAHAHAHA I OCOULDN'T STOP LAUGHING! I LOVE IT! IT'S ABSOLUTELY BRILLIANT.
My only critique is that I think you need to develop the story more. Not much happens in a chapter, it's usually just banter. I love the banter, DO NOT get me wrong, it's refreshing and it really highlights the personalities and relationships of each character but I feel like more events need to take place, aside from all the talking :)

I can't wait to meet the rest of the clan! I love your Albus! He's adorbs! I ship it!! Well, that's a bit premature since not much has been revealed about James. Don't force anything :D Keep headed in the direction you're going cz this story is AMAZING

Author's Response: Because making people laugh is my aim, generally haha. Thank you, thank you! Anyways, here I was thinking that if I stuff chapters with banter, it'll be less boring. I've never really thought adding more description...

SOLUTION AT HAND: MAKE THEM LESS CHATTY MUAHA.

Nah, kidding. The characters are born talkative but I promise I'll add more descriptions and you're such a lovely critique so thank youuu~ :3

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This is an amazing story; the way it flows and the way you've put it together... everything. But I guess I would appreciate faster updates? .-. Curiosity kills, I tell you!! :D
And, oh, about Ger's plan, and how to pull the other characters in, maybe you could pull Scorp, Rose and Albus along in the planning, and formulate a series of pranks, or sonething maybe? And since Jasmine is a neighbour of the Potters, I guess pranking James's girlfriend would be easy for her, even more so if she has his relatives on her side. Just a suggetion, if you have something else in mind I bet it will be even better! :D
Best of luck with the story, you are doing brilliantly, keep it up (for the readers' sake! ;))!

Author's Response: I can't promise anything haha but okay, yes. I will try. (Gees, I'm really really embarrassed by my procrastination skills)

Anyways, yes, yes, I've been thinking about that too. Just THROW ALL THE PRANKS TO HOLLY AND SEE HER SUFFER!!! Thing is, though, I suck at formulating pranks hahahaha and it will turn out cliche noooes. (I just told you my crisis omg)

But I'll work on it and I'll work on it so thank you thank you for the huge help! You might as well be my hero/ine! Luff, luff! :)

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Ok ok ok just gimme a second...

I love this omg omg O M G (and I've now said omg too many times).

The characters are so original and this is actually hilarious.

I love it.

I love it.

Great job! :) :) :)


Oo and my name is Tristan too but I'm a girl.

Author's Response: omg omg omg (see I've said it many times too haha) a girl Tristan! Thank you girl Tristan for the review! I'm glad you love it. Staaay tuned esp for your other loony hilarious namesake!

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its realy good! and really late! and im so loving it!

Author's Response: and I'm so thanking you! :))

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hellooo :)

i've just read this story now... obviously... and i just wanted to say i really like it :) i think jasmine is refreshingly angry, ger is really interesting and tristan... i adore him. he is a babe. i really love him. holly/hailey/ho is awful... obvs. and even though james has seen tolerable from what we have seen so far, he must be a bit dodge for him to cheat on her in the first place. i really, really want to know what happened there. like, really bad. why did he cheat on her? and was it with hailey holy ho? questions, questions...

anyway, i really enjoyed the story so try to update soon! ♥

ellie :) xx

Author's Response: Bah! Super late reply is super late.

Anyways, I'm glad you like the story! And I'm so sorry that I update terribly. As for your questions...I really can't answer them straightly. Just know that it wasn't Holly whom he "cheated" with. And that I might post a one-shot about James and Jasmine during the days they were still together...IF! I'm not busy (more like, lazy) or something.

Thanks for the review, Ellie! Don't be confused. All will be clear in time.

I hope. Haha! :3

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Love the story so far! Hilarious and I can't wait for Ger to commence the plan against Holly (who I hate now!).

Author's Response: Aren't we all waiting for brilliant Ger's plan? Hehe. Thank you for the review! You just made my day! :)

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*begins conga* update, update, update! Germys plan is what for I wait! Holly is a big female dog and germy and trite should go and snog!

Author's Response: So thank thank thank you! That's so awesome of you! I'll update sooner or maybe even later~

Haha, oh well. At least I tried. Haha! Thank you for the lovely conga review. I tried doing a little dance but I don't wanna embarrass myself further! You just made my dayy! :))

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I love this story!!
I really like Scorpius and I can't wait to find out more about him. I also can't wait to see if they go ahead with whatever Ger's plan is.
Please update as soon as you can :D

Author's Response: Thank you!! And yes, Scorpius. Yeah, he'll be mentioned quite a lot now. Watch out for it. ;) And Ger's plan...heh. Sooner, yeah! Thanks for the review, awesome! :))

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Scorpius being so angsty is very trendy right now, I agree. I do hope, however, that he gets happy somewhere along the line. He's cute :) Ditto with Jas and Ger. Tristan already has enough happy to supply a small country. Nice work!
-Cat

Author's Response: Yeah, I do hope that, too. Maybe Tristan would just be fed up with their bitter angsty ways of living and just drug them with happy pills! And then they'll all be happy! :D Thanks for the review! You're amazing!

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I Love this! This story is really great and very well written. I
kinda want her to end up with albus. Anyways I love this
please update soon

Author's Response: I am now pouring heaps of thanks in your cup. Heh. So yeah, thank you for the review!! And really? I was like, huwhaat?! Albus? Hmm, it's kind of possible, you know. I can work on it. Haha! But well, let's see. Albus...hmm..this certainly gave me a lot to think about...

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I want Jasmine to get tough and real hot so she can find a new guy better than that rude-o, James. Of course I'm sure James has his reasons (whatever!) but its ridiculously easy to dislike him right now.
I liked your banner before, but it was too-fast so I literally had to stare and read over it to get everything - that being said - I like this one also.

Post soon!

Author's Response: I think I portray James too badly. Haha! And yes, Jasmine tough and real hot...well, I'll work on that. But haha, I find it funny cause Jazzy is more like, I dunno...She doesn't care much. But maybe she will. ;)
I'm sorry about changing the banner! I knew you liked the previous one. I just personally think the animation sucks. Hee, but thank you for liking this banner, too! You're amazing! MASSIVE thanks for reviewing! And yes, chapter 4's in the queue! :))

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Finally a girl who is not totally cliche! See she is actually weird and comes off as weird instead of creepy psycho girl like a lot of them seem to be.

That was a complement by the way

Author's Response: Thank you~ Although I have to admit, I'm not sure on who you're talking about. Heh. I assume it's about Jasmine? Oh well, thanks for the complement still! :)

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Mostly, now, I'm just wondering what exactly happened between them. And the story's so sad -you've got a great way of bringing that across. Good writing. I hope the pain starts fading soon, because even though the story's very good, it's also depressing and I'd much rather read somthing exciting or amusing or... I dunno. That's not supposed to be critisism; just ...well, I guess I'll come back in a couple more chapters, when it gets less sad.
I like Al. I like her sister and the ice cream shop's entertaining. All the kids. Hehehe.
What's James playing at, being so inconsiderate? I hope Ger's plan's good. ...Jas should just talk to him, instead of making his new girlfriend -whatever it is. But this looks like it's going to be good. I like Ger. And Scor -that's a great way to bring him into the story.
I really like it. It's a great story and you write well.

Author's Response: It'll be all explained soon~ And sad? Really? I hadn't noticed. Haha. I was actually aiming for some dramatic humor but more humorous. Hadn't realized I made it...sad. Hee. I'll work on the humor, promise.
I'm glad you like the characters! And yes, James. I really don't know if he should be bad guy or not. But I'm working on it. More on Ger's plan sooner and thank you. Thank you, thank you for the review!! :)

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I just have a question did jasmine's mother die before the james break-up or post the breakup because he's being a real idiot if it was after when he was supposed to be her best friend, so i really hope she gets revenge cause so far im not liking him at all, though i guess your not supposed to. I love jasmine though even though she is a crazy a bit sometimes but i hope something good happens to her soon and i like the budding relationships with her coworkers. Tristan is fun and i could see jasmine and gem having a strange but really great friendship. Also i liked the appearance of Al in the story and i hope to see more potter-weasleys in the future as they are supposed to be her friends too and are being almost as bad as bad i think as james by taking his side when he was the cheater in the situation and should have some other people on his side like she said even if he is family. but i cant wait for more and james's party, which sounds interesting. great work and love the story!

Author's Response: Before the break-up. (Don't worry. All of it will be explained soon. Hee.) But if her mother did die after their break-up then, you're absolutely completely right. He's being an idiot. Haha.
Yeah, Jazzy is crazy and yep, absolutely more potter-weasleys and their say on Jasmine and James sooner~
Don't hate on Jamesie-poo so much. This is only Snazzy Jazzy's side of the story so...hahaha. I think I should zip my mouth.
Thank you for the review!! And stay tuned! You're awesome! :)

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Oh my God, I hate (I'm going to use Hailey) Hailey. Just, *makes growling noise*
She is such a rhymes-with-witch!
I can't even...

>:(

That sums up my emotions about her, pretty much.

Anyway, nice introduction of Al and Scorpius, and a little more on 'Hailey' who makes me do the previously stated face.

My favourite character actually has to be Tristan, just because he always sings and is hi-larious, I am now in love with him.

Anyway, 10/10, toodle pip!

-Bunny
x x

Author's Response: Hey there. Haha. Too lazy to sign in? Haha. I do that too. Hee.
Anyways, aww, don't hate so much on Hailey. She can really be a rhymes-with-witch (haha!) but I don't know. Haha. Okay, maybe I don't like her too but...haha. I really can't explain. She just so.. Avocado Pistachio, if you know what I mean. Hee. That doesn't even makes sense.
Sorry about that.
Thank you, by the way. I personally thought those Al and Scorpius scenes are just so random, like it doesn't fit. So thank you for saying that.
And yeah, Tristan. I'm fairly sure he can be in-love with you, too. But well, Jasmine's sissy's already caught his eye. :)
Thanks so much for the review again! You people make my dayy~

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So i normally dont read stories just starting out cause i get so impatient waiting to read more but i was too intrigued by yours and read it and right away was hooked! I hope that you keep writing cause i cant wait to find out what happens next and i hope that Jasmine puts idiot potter in his place!!! but i just wanted to say that i really like this story and that i again i hope there is more to come!

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So i normally dont read stories just starting out cause i get so impatient waiting to read more but i was too intrigued by yours and read it and right away was hooked! I hope that you keep writing cause i cant wait to find out what happens next and i hope that Jasmine puts idiot potter in his place!!! but i just wanted to say that i really like this story and that i again i hope there is more to come!

Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad I got you intrigued! Haha. Thanks soo much for the review. Lately, I was just so down and seeing your review just perked me up. :) Yeah, we'll see about idiot James. Sooner. Heh. But for now, thank youuu~

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I'm loving your story so far!

Hopefully we'll go more in-depth on Jasmine and James' relationship next chapter (maybe?... please?) or perhaps James.

I love Seed and Tristan but I want to know morrree.

Post more soon!

Author's Response: Yeah, I'm working on that--on James mostly. cause I seriously don't know how he would act around Jasmine. Aaaahhh, it's kind of frustrating! But anyways, yeah. Working on it. Thanks for the reeevvieeww~ :))

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I just started and I love it so far! The characters are very well-written so far, ANNDD I LOVE your banner.

With it - I'm off to the next chap :)

Author's Response: Awwshies, thanks! Haha, I'm happy you love it~ Oh and the banner, really? Haha! I think it rather sucked. haha! thank youuu so much for the review! You made my day! :)

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Haha! Jas is cool! :) I love that she's so bitter about everything, even though she works in Fortescue's sugary-sweet, amazing tasting ice-cream shop!

Tristan and Ger also seem cool, they're basically opposites, 'cause Tristan seems very happy-go-lucky. :)

When you called Hailey (Holly?) Ho Hastings I nearly fell off my chair laughing.

You don't usually get main characters so bitter, they're usually overly happy or absolute ho's from the beginning, so Jasmine is a nice change from that. I also like the fact that you out-right showed that Jas and James we're friends and then they got together, then James broke up with her via. cheating on her. Most people string that out till the third or fourth chapter, not actually telling you what happened to make they're character like that.

10/10
Please update soon! I can't wait to read more!
:)

Author's Response: Ohmygod seriously?! Thanks so much! I'm so happy you like Jasmine! I had a feeling I haven't portrayed her bitterness too well and it'll go wrong! And yes, Tristan and Ger= complete opposites. They'll basically help Jas around and stuffs.
And haha! yeah! I really don't know where I got that! Haha, I'm glad you found it funny!
Yes, that's the main point of my story. To know what happens next after two best friends got together. I mean, it's possible that they don't live happily ever after, right? Idk really, it just suddenly struck me.
Thank you so much! I hope you stay tuned. I'm in the process of writing it, actually. I've been busy and got writer's block but it'll be up soon! Thank you! You're awesome!

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Baahhahaa! This story is awesome! I love that she's jealous and bitter because you don't normally see characters like that! Please update soon I love this story so much! I thought that it was a great setting and plot because you don't normally see ice-cream stores as the beginning setting! And when you called her Ho Hastings, i think i almost died from laughing! This story is actually one of the most hilarious things I've read, PLEASE update soon! Youre a great author!
-RavenclawWayToBe

Author's Response: And you're such a great person!! Seriously! Massive thanks to you!! I'm glad I made you laugh!! Well, yeah...my chapter two's on process. I'm just stuck cause I'm not really a bitter person so Jazzy's pretty hard to write. Heh. But wait for it, will you? It'll come around soon! Promise! Oh thanks so much!! :))

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really good! funny story, very interesting as well. Please update soon! 10/10

Author's Response: Aww, thank you so much! My chapter two's on process so yeah, I'll update soon!

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