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This is a fantastic character study of Neville. You portray his emotional and psychological state vividly, along with his vulnerability and the general oppressive atmosphere of the school under the Carrows' control. The psychological buildup to Neville's epiphany is completely believable and realistic. Wonderful ending.
I would pay close attention to some of the generalised statements included in your writing. For example:
The growth of character had gone completely unnoticed by the rest of the class
This line is quite unnecessary, as the reader is already aware of this (you've spent the entire paragraph before the sentence writing Neville's thoughts and internal discussions). Also, it's a little clunky and I think your story would be much better without it.
But all in all, this is a great piece of writing. I really enjoyed it :) Good work!Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! I will definitely have a look through the piece for these sorts of things. Thanks for pointing it out :D Report Review
This was a lovely read!
I don't think I've seen many fic's about Neville at Hogwarts for his 7th year and it was a nice change, interesting.
It coudn't have been easy and for him and it was nice to see him turning from the shaky boy in first year to the person who kills Voldermorts snake, a really nice read.
I think you got the characterisation spot on, the Carrows teaching about how purebloods are better and Neville shrinking back at first but then coming back fighting.
I didn't spot any grammer or spelling mistakes so good job there! :DAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your review! I'm glad you enjoyed the story!! Report Review
N'aww this was so lovely and brave and just asdfghjkl NEVILLE!! I have always wondered how he made the transition to Hogwarts Rebel Leader and you laid it out so nicely :D
Your storytelling of how he thought out the change was simple and effective; there were no over-complications, bringing OCs into it, just brilliant strong words which felt so true and noble when you put them together in such a clever way.
Neville's characterisation was fantastic, I really thought you had his rebellious thoughts and concealed pain written subtly at times and cleverly too. His transition from underdog to Leader was made so much better by his constant comparisons to Harry; it constantly reminded us of how Harry and Neville were both boys in the prophecy, and how he was almost Harry too, although Neville doesn't know it.
It was just really great, and I wish there was more, to show how Neville started the rebellion fully! :)
~TGKAuthor's Response: Thank you!! I definitely felt like Neville's transition was missing something. I really just wanted to capture the moment he decided to stand up for himself. Im glad you enjoyed it. I dont think I will ever write more. I think extending this piece would lose some of its impact. Thank you for reviewing :) Report Review
I was searching for a Neville story and found yours; what an amazing discovery it was!
I really loved it. I think you captured Neville's growing confidence really well, as well as his insecurities. You also did a wonderful job creating the atmosphere of the scene and gave just enough descriptions and detailing that made it feel very real, very tangible.
Great work, I really liked it!Author's Response: Thank you! This means a lot. I'm glad you enjoyed it :D Report Review
Emma! Yay, first review!
This was brilliant. Such a simple and powerful idea, Neville's realisation that he's just as much a hero as Harry. You evoked the atmosphere of Hogwarts during Voldemort's reign extremely well - the fear, the resignation, the lack of morale - and the glimmer of hope that rebellion offered. Very nice work, well done! :)Author's Response: Thank you!! This means a lot to me :D Report Review
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