I really like your story! The plot is very interesting :) You might consider slowing it down a little and adding more about their surroundings and things like that, but other than that, it's really good!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the feedback. I really appreciate it. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. I've been working very hard on this and I can see that it is paying off. There is one more chapter left. Please let me know what you think of the entire story when you finish. I would really like that. Thanks again!

Shelby

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Amazing! Write more please :(

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you like it. The next chapter, The Accused, is waiting for validation right now. It should be up in about one day. Keep checking back for updates. I appreciate your feedback!

Shelby

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Good story so far! Cool idea! Keep it up. I'd suggest trying to lengthen your chapters-- the ideas are great but they come and go so quickly!
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Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review. I really appreciate your feedback. I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Keep checking back for updates!

Shelby

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Like it so far, keep updating!

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review! I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter. There is more to come!

Shelby

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