That was sooo good!! I'm really excited for the sequel! Please Please Please write one!!!

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holy sh*t, i cant get over how good this is... i was gonna do a huge review at the end when i was done reading for tonight... but i just cant get over how good this is. your imagery is really good. don't stop writing, you have talent.

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What is going on with Draco!?! I need to know! I guess I need to keep reading.

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Awww! I love Ron so much in this story! He's so sweet. I can't wait to figure out what is going on with Draco.

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I guess this chapter answered why Draco was interested in Kayla to begin with. What a jerk...but I have a feeling that Kayla will give in to him anyways. Great chapter. I like how you write the intimate scenes. They are quite steamy and enticing!

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Lmao, that was hilarious. Poor Kayla...I'm sure it was totally worth the embarrassment though. This story is heating up faster than I expected, but I guess I can live with that. :)

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Interesting chapter. I am curious as to why Draco is even interested in her, but I guess that will be explained later. Great so far, I will continue reading. :)

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This is turning out to be a good read. The characters are written in a way that is interesting and believable. I will try to leave longer reviews as I get more into it. :)

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Hi! Morganna here!

I think that you are off to a good start here. I'm loving the ambiguity of the opening scenes as well as the descriptive area that you have about Kaya. I'm assuming that you'll elaborate more on her character as the story progresses.

As for characterization, I'm liking your original character already. She seems to have quite an edge to her. I'll have to talk more about her in the later chapter as this is just the beginning. Good job so far!

Although I did see a few grammatical errors, as well as some comma usage/ position issues. Don't worry those can easily be fixed ^_^ This chapter also felt a little to abrupt due to its length. However, you did give us (the readers) a fair warning that this was the introductory chapter, I can let this slide ;)

As I had mentioned earlier, I like how your introduction really opened up a lot of opportunities for you story! It really places your readers at a position that keeps their curiosity rolling. Good job!

I can't wait to read more!




M

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Oh at least he brought her to the hospital, hope he doesnt get in trouble.

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Oh Bellatrix, so evil... I actually feel bad. & Draco I honestly am not mad at him, & Kaya, poor thing. :l Can we please whoop their ass soon?

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What?? Nicely done Draco"??? Why does she need Kaya? oh my gosh.. but great job on the chapter & haha lucky you, got to vist london.

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Ohh Draco, such a douche. You're doing great, I wanted Kaya to be more strong and independent and she is, which is great. (:

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Aaah!!! This was so so good, honey! Frightfully suspenseful and you had me at the edge of my seat :) Great story, my friend - can't wait for the sequel :D

Love u!

*Maria

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Ah yay! The two newest chapters were great! I can't wait for more. ^^

It's wonderful to have the two of them back together again. And wh at lovely little intimate scenes. :D Please update again soon!

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Another awesome chapter!

However the grammatical errors are starting to pile up and i think that in chapters like this, it would be good to put in more description. Also, I got a bit lost as the plot jumped from her old dorm, to the Great Hall where Ron supposedly sat her down and jumped once again to Kaya running down the hall. There was a lot of jumping here. Maybe you can add in transitions for the plot and maybe a beta to watch over the plot holes, flow and grammar.

Just a few stuff that I wanted to point out. I hope i wasn't too harsh. If you'd like I'd love to offer my beta-ing service to you! I would love, love, LOVE to work on this story with you ^_^ If you do decide to accept my offer, please send a PM to emesias at the HPFF forums ^_^

Happy Writing!

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awww wow!
Another great chapter!
I hope you update soon!

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I knew it that she would give in.
I was quite surprised that she forgot about the bet thing Draco had with Zabini.

Good chapter~

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Another awesome chapter!

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Gah! I must read on!
Good chapter.
There were a few grammatical errors but its ok!

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Haha Interesting!
Reading on!!!

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Hiya!
Em here with your full-on review as promised! (FINALLY!)

Wow!!! So so good! I had a feeling that something like this was going to happen. Draco coming on to Kaya like that for no good reason would've made the story line too...plain? Anyways, moving on!

Grammar/ spelling: There were a few missing words here and there throughout the chapters. I wouldn't say that it disrupts the plot line and presentation of the story too much, but it does pop out a lot.

Characterization: I'm liking Kaya a lot as a character. So far, I'd say that she's developing alright throughout the story. I find it adorable how she continuously fights off her emotions for Draco and despite the revelation of Draco's true intentions with her, I still think that she will give in. As for the Draco character in your story, I could definitely imagine the canon pulling something off like this (haha) I'm not one to stick to canons as I love reading how different authors get creative with the original characters and I think this is one of the most creative Dracos that I've ever read ^_^

Plot/ Flow: As far as plot holes are concerned, it was just that one bit in the earlier chapters that I mentioned in the review that I left (I think it was either the 2nd or 3rd chapter). Other than that I think that you are doing really well with this story! Furthermore, it's flowing really well. It's not just jumping from one section to the next. Good Job!

Overall, this is quite a good read! I'm definitely hooked and am looking forward to seeing it through the end!

Happy Writing! 9/10

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Oh I think that she'll definitely give in ^_^

Haha I can't wait to read more!!! I'll just post the analytic review in the next chapter. hehe.

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CRAZY STUPID LOVE
CRAZY STUPID LOVE
CRAZY STUPID LOVE

Hahahaha I obviously loved that part. OMG! Just reading you story is making me fall back in love with Draco once again! (WHY?!)

I meant to give you a more analytic review than this, but I just want to keep reading on! I promise you give you a more in depth review after I read the next chapter... or the one after that... hehe

Happy Writing!

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Gah!

Must read more! LOL

Happy Writing!

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