I admit, I clicked onto this story because Richard Madden was on the banner. I usually try and read stories for their summaries and not banners to be fair but I mean...Um...It's Richard Madden so yeah.
I also rather liked this story. I enjoyed it and I was saddened at the end. Poor Albus, screaming that you love someone when they can't hear is rather tragic.
I likey :)
~IzzyAuthor's Response: Thanks for the review. Report Review
Alright! So I don't know if this is supposed to end here or if it is WIP as said in the story info, but either way, I loved it!
I loved the way you started with the theories and what people say and think about love.
Then, although there isn't much dialogue in here, you made Autumn seem quite realistic from the first sentence you had her say. She almost joked about her illness, which is what most people do once they start to accept their fate and cope with their problems.
My favorite line, possibly in the whole story, was the following:
"Some days, Albus thought she’d climb the highest of mountains without having a single hair moved from its right place. Somehow, even now, he still thought she would. He really thought she would get up from that bed and climb that mountain. Miracles could happen. However, not in that case."
Once again, it makes Autumn seem so real and strong, even in her weakest moment. So I loved it a lot.
After that, I have to comment on your description and comparisons because, basically, I loved how you were able to convey to me Albus's feelings in such few words. Yes, this chapter may not be long, but, in my opinion, it's put together skillfully.
So yeah, great job!Author's Response: Well, this story basically starts with the ending - end to beginning, so, yeah, it's WIP.
Many thanks for the fantastic review! Report Review
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That was incredibly sad. Though, the grammar and punctuation wasn't too good, and there were phrases I didn't really understand 'cause of their wording, but all in all, I thought the story itself was very sad and sweet. I'd been a little confused because I didn't read that the era was next gen lol I thought it was going to be about dumbledore lol :P
Anyway, very sweet idea,
(I leave Al... a timeturner so he could create a cure for whatever she had, go back, and save her)Author's Response: Pff.. If it was that simple...
Thanks for the review, Santa. :) Report Review
Hello, its me with your review!
Wow, this is amazing and a definate contender for the challenge! I love your language, word choice and the way you describe your characters, its beautiful!
My favourite part was the way you ended it, it keeps the reader longing for more.
This is so beautiful and clever, I love it!
Emma xxAuthor's Response: Thanks, Emma. Hopefully, some new chapter will soon appear. :) Report Review
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