This is very good i like everything about it. I thought it was funny when he pinched her butt and stared at her. Like everything about it great work :). Like how he went after her beacuse he loves her. She is forbidden to him and thats what he loves he loves the forbidden and she is forbidden for him.Author's Response: thanks for reviewing and for reviewing my other stories :D It means so much, I'll probably go back to this one shot soon because i'm not too proud of it, but thank-you anyway :D and i'm glad you like the plot Report Review
It's cool. I love how it has a moral at the end.Author's Response: wow... thanks so much, this was one of my earlier stories and i always thought it was quite rubbishly written so to hear that it means a lot... and i'm glad you liked the moral part at the end
:) again thanks
- kjp Report Review
Okay so, it's a great start and I can totally see this going places:) The only issue I have with it is capitalization. I'm just really OCD when it comes to grammar, so sorry:( It's just names and the pronoun "I" should be capitalized, but otherwise, I love your look on both Scorpius and Rose. They've always been two of my favorite characters:) Keep on writing!
-AryaAuthor's Response: oh thanks, i know i'm not the best on grammar. I started to write stories to improve it but failed quite miserably! Scorpius and rose are my fav paring, half my stories are about them! Report Review
Good. Might want to check your spelling and grammar. You spelt Slytherin and mature wrong as well as other things that now escape my mind. Grammar too. You have a lot of grammar mistakes. Other wise it's a good idea and you could develop it even more. Gosh, now I know why my friend calls me The Grammar Natzi... Oh well. Hope you found this useful and that you will continue to write ( hopefully without the mistakes next time!! [: ) thanks for reading this!!Author's Response: thanks. I don't know why i make all these mistakes when writing, because i'm usually fine when writing. But really thanks for reading i write the stories for you. btw i love your name! lol! Report Review
You spelt Slytherin wrong. ):Author's Response: ooops sorry i thought i might but i had already sent it 4 validation and i didn't want it to go to the back of the queue and wait for another 5 days. So soz :( Report Review
Wow that was very good and very funny. You should write how they got together in a different story and more detailed. Just a few spelling mistakes but that's easy to fix.
10/10 for the chapter
-dramionedrunadrinnyAuthor's Response: yes i'm going to once ive finished another story thxs though :) Report Review
Okay. This story was cute but you have a ton of typos. Also, Capitalization and Puncutation. Try going into Microsoft Office Word and using the spell checker. Anyway, It was cute.
-ILOVEASPAuthor's Response: thanks a million :) Report Review
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