OMG I am in LOVE with this story! It's 'totally awesome' ;D
I typically don't review stories that arent completed, but I had to for your story! Mostly cuz I am a HUGE Oliver/OC supporter! I write all me stories about him, check them out!


10/10 and please update soon!

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Your story is very entertaining! I like your version of Oliver, most people tend to write him as an arrogant sometimes womanizing character but I always got the impression from the books that even though he was quidditch mad, he was humble and cared about the people in his life. Geri is great and I can't wait to see more of what being a female in the league is like. I was cringing through the Yew Wand shoot, very awkward.

Can't wait to read more!

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Hi! This is Chocolate_Frog from the forums with your requested review! :)

I think you started this story off at an interesting angle. I've read a few Oliver/OCs, and having both out of Hogwarts and having Oliver three years younger definitely breaks the mold. I think we're in for an interesting story!

You listed your OC as your main concern... I don't think she came off as that harsh at all. (Maybe because I have to deal with the type on a daily basis. xD) Sure, she has a, quote unquote 'potty mouth', but that's understandable because of the stress of the profession. Maybe she just needs someone to, you know, mellow it out? Hint, hint. xD

Speaking of, I think you did a great job with Oliver. A softie, worried, fanboy-type Oliver isn't something that has been done a lot (or ever, really), and my interest has really been piqued on where this is headed.

Something I would have to say that made this story a chore to read was the formatting. At times, the paragraphs would indent, and at times, they won't, which made it difficult to read, since the reader might wonder if you meant for the passage to stand out. (Which I don't think is the case here.) Remember, consistency is key! :)

That's all for now, but feel free to re-request for the next chapter! Happy holidays! ^^

~Chocolate_Frog

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Good to know that Geri isn't too extreme. I find it kind of interesting that people are so curious about my portrayal of Oliver, since I never saw him as the cocky jock type. He just really loved his sport. I always thought it made him slightly nerdy really. It's nice to know it's a little unique though!

And the indents... yes. I had obviously given up on fixing the formatting, but it will need to be fixed eventually. I apologize for putting you through that. :)

Thanks again! Best wishes for 2012!

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First one to review! YAY... I liked the first chapter of yours. Hope you update soon enough!

Wood's had a crush on a 7th year while being just in 4 year. Interesting seeing Wood being the underdog once...

Author's Response: YAY! Thanks for the review!
Since Geri has such a strong personality and is more or less one of the guys, I felt that she wouldn't go for the typical macho jock Quidditch-type. She's around them all day and has no desire to come home to that. Since Oliver being a pro athlete can't impress her on it's own, he has to approach things from a different angle. Enter the underdog! Hope you keep reading xoxox

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