Aw, this was so sweet! It had a wonderful message behind it and I really liked how well you incorporated the song into the story; Song-fics can be hard to do. I laughed several times; for some reason Fred and his "long mouth" was a bit hilarious. I also loved the fact that Poppy had a muggle rubber duck (YES!), and that Justin knew exactly what the story was about. Great job and keep writing; you're getting better as you go on.
-nightingale14Author's Response: Thank you very much, it really means a lot to me *hugs* xxx Report Review
This was a really nice little fic! :) However, being the Grammar Nazi that I am, I noticed some mistakes:
1) In the first 2 paragraphs Rose calls her hair 'busy' when I think she means 'bushy' ;)
2) You put 'Victorie' but the name is spelt 'Victoire'
3) In Rose's letter to her parents she put 'I and Scorpius broke up today' when it should be 'Scorpius and I'
4) You forgot a full stop after 'The end' when Rose is telling a story to Poppy
I think that's it. They were just minor mistakes though. :3 Overall it's well written (:Author's Response: I actually noticed them myself before, when I next edit this I will change them! I'm glad you liked it, thanks for reviewing! xxx Report Review
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