I think I might have just whimpered! But that was a really bittersweet piece and I quite liked it. I liked the way that you gave each of the marauders more than one side even without necessarily adding a lot of detail. Very well done. I might have liked to see you use more variety in your repetition but what you did include you used to marvellous effect. Likewise I enjoyed the way the tone of the prose seemed to spiral more and more into melancholy. That was clever of you. You obviously have a good understanding of how the story works. Ten out of ten.
Rae SimmonsAuthor's Response: Helloo,
Thanks for your review :3 This remains one of my favourite stories, in terms of ones that I've written at least. The Marauders... gah, I just love them so much!
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my eyes are absolutely stinging oh my god. this is so brilliant, honestly. i love explanations about the marauders and their personalities in school but i've never been able to find stories that explain them so well. the observations of james and sirius and peter as seen through remus just seem to ring so true (especially the bits about peter. there is so much more to peter but everyone just seems to pass him off as the tag along and i'm so glad that you haven't) and you've captured the characters so, so well. james is usually just portrayed as a major flirt at hogwarts but everyone seems to forget that he changed - the entire paragraph you wrote about him is so amazing because it shows that other side. i can't even describe it in words how much i loved that paragraph, ha. but yeah. my heart breaks for remus, but that's how i picture him at hogwarts too, just the wallflower/observationist ):
'He sees him become ever more distant as the war rages on outside the sanctuary of the Hogwarts walls, sees him feel ever more insignificant in this war against evil and he is glad that he is not the only one that feels lost.' this line. THIS LINE.
your writing has stolen my heart. but that's okay because it is amazing and wonderful and everything that writing should be. :3Author's Response: Oh wow, thanks so much! Another lovely comment and you're being incredibly kind. I really enjoyed writing this because I could feel what I said Remus felt, so I guess there's a little bit of me in this story, too.
JAMES. I FREAKING LOVE HIM. And as you said, everyone thinks of him as a major flirt who gets in the way of Snape and Lily but he's always been my favourite for so many reasons but partly because he's not like that at all.
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Loved it, loved it, loved it.
Very poignant and very simply put.
Keep up the great work(:Author's Response: Ah, thank you! This was originally meant to be a part of a novella/short story but I thought it would work better on its own.
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Oh my goodness! Another beautiful piece! You were able to summarise Remus' entire schooling in 1000 words! I loved it!Author's Response: Ahh, thank you! I've always had trouble writing Marauder-era pieces because it's so tempting just to slip into cliches and I'm so particular about how I like my characters and pairings so I thought I'd approach this from a different angle. Besides, as much as I like Teddy, I really don't like Tonks!
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