Well, I'll review, but I'm not promising any long one!
You have a really good storyline. I actually really like this story. Your characters have depth, it isn't very jumpy, I like it a lot.
I hope you update soon!Author's Response: Thank you. It's very nice of you to say that. Your reviews actually are inspiring me a lot, so I'm going to write the third chapter. Expect an update in about two weeks or less. (Sorry, I'm quite slow.) Report Review
Wow, that sorting hat song was really good.
I like your whole Sirius and Emma thing there, It was really cool!
Keep them coming!Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm glad you like it. I have a story in the queue, so check back soon if you'd like to read a story of Bill's sorting. Report Review
Hello again! Since I've already read this while I was beta'ing it, I thought I'd leave you a little review anyway. :)
I really liked how the story is progressing so far. Emma seems like an interesting OC, and I liked the moments with Sirius. I also think your characterization and portrayal of the Marauders and Lily were spot-on and very believable, but I'd like to see a bit more of Remus and Peter. Though he is a traitor later on, remember that he's still one of the Marauders. xD
Oh, and the Sorting Hat song was a nice touch.
By the way, I finished beta'ing this chapter already, so any grammar issues will be addressed on there. ^^
~KhanhAuthor's Response: Thank you! This input is invaluable to me. I wasn't really planning to do much with Peter, but maybe I will now. Your reminder of the traitor thing made me think that he could be the dark touch to the story, the sort of overall extending plot, as I don't mind making him horrible, unlike most other characters.
With regards to Remus, I sent you the second chapter, and you'll see that he is featured there. Report Review
this is really good, i quite liked the sorting hat's song/poem.
keep on writing :)Author's Response: Why thank you! And no worries, I am writing quite a lot :) I have another chapter of this and two one-shots in progress. Report Review
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