Woah, more people seriously need to review your story! It's awesome :D I can't wait for more of Scorpius! Ooh and the plane ride! I'm being really lazy right now so this is short, sorry! I really need to kick my laziness. Anyway, I can't wait for more. And I love Molly :DAuthor's Response: That makes me feel amazing. You made my day, and I didn't have the best day. I say that in alot of reviews, but I really mean it, thank you! The plane ride is coming up, so put on your seatbelt, and don't forget to try and keep it on during all the airtime ;) Laziness works. I'm /well/ lazy, so i can't talk. Thank you again. I totally need to get on with the next chapter! Report Review
This was such a lovely little start to a story! I think that lovely might have come across a little patronising, which it wasn't supposed to but... ah, my bad. Poor Molly seems to be a bit of a walking disaster (which, actually, I can totally relate with).
The best bits of humour you had in here were definately the subtle things you through in. My favourite was the bit about the pub :D
It was a bit short (it ended so quickly! I wasn't done reading!) But I really enjoyed reading it - it was definately good fun :)
-ACAuthor's Response: Thank you! Lovely isn't patronising. I say lovely all the time...Maybe people think i'm patronising though. Molly is a bit of a walking disaster. That is a little like me, as well.
I sort of range through mad and obvious, to subtle. I find subtle a bit harder, though... I quite liked the bit about the pub, as well. Definitely one of my favourite bits.
This chapter was quite short. I always start off short, not on purpose, I just sort of do. Thank you so much again! Report Review
Poor Molly! I'm glad you wrote a story from Molly's POV though, of all the underwritten characters Molly the second is one of them. This looks like a pretty good start!.
Getting attacked by a pygmy puff, *chuckles*Author's Response: Hiya!
I'm glad you like my choice of Molly. It can be a little intimidating to write from less well known character's PoVs sometimes. Thank you, it's good to know stuff like that.
(That's totally my favourite bit. Hehe.)
Tres means 3 and mucho means very. R U from singapore? or do u live in Singapore? Update Soon because u left it at a cliffhanger.
9/10Author's Response: Hi! Yeah, tres means three in spanish, but it means very in french. Confusing, right? I live in Singapore, and i will update soon. I'm writing the next chapter RIGHT NOW. Thank you so much for the review :) Report Review
Ooh, I like this. Singapore? That was really nice ((:Author's Response: Thank you so much! It means a lot that you liked it :) Singapore is a country in Asia, but all will be revealed soon! Report Review
This seems funny :) I'd love to know which Wesley it is, I'm guessing Molly or Lucy because she's worried about her father being upset. It seems like a great start.Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you think it's funny.
You're right; it's Molly Weasley, and I'm glad it seems a good start, it's nice to know i'm off on the right foot xD Report Review
I really enjoyed this :) You give Molly a really unique voice - all her observations are really witty and funny, and she says some hilarious stuff!
"Err... I was attacked by an, err, a rogue pygmy puff!" - I laughed so hard at this, because she seems to be the sort of person who makes up a load of rubbish under pressure, and it was really funny!
You've set up a great office dynamic already, which is actually really hard to do. I hate writing office scenes because I find that they drag, but you really made it come alive. I think Molly's inner ramblings really made this amusing.
MarinaAuthor's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And i'm also glad molly's voice was unique. I was a little bit worried that it was a bit to next-gen-fic-cliche. And I am SERIOUSLY proud you think it was witty!
That was, most definitely my favourite line. And i'm super glad it wasn't only me who liked that line, because sometimes I have a weird sense of humour.
Now that is my most proud thing. Because i don't even work in an office. So setting up an office dynamic is a bit clever of me, if i do say so myself *Is super chuffed* I shall just have to hang out at my father's work, and see what i hear ;)
Thanks so much!
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Ooh, quite intriguing! You've left us with a little mystery, making me want to know so much more about her life, and more about exactly why she's in such a situation and how she got there. I also really like how it's about Molly Weasley - a character we don't often see as much. And I like Scorpius, and your different characterisation of him!
I would love some more description in following chapters, as this was packed with dialogue, but it was nicely written, and did capture my attention. Aww I liked Molly's attempt at an excuse - "attacked by a rogue pygmy puff" and "refusius maximus disorder" haha. Lovely first chapter so far :)
- charlotteAuthor's Response: Hi!
OOh, intigueing is a good word, i'm glad i'm being intrigueing :D I think i chose Molly because we don't see much of her, also because she's more plausible for my plotline, though xD
I reckon it'll be one or two chapters before the description gets down; I am trying to tell it as strongly from Molly's POV as possible, and because she knows the ministry and that, she isn't really thinking about it. However, when she get's to where she's going, she'll be thinking about it more, so there'll be more description.
Is it big headed of me to say i rather liked that excuse as well? It was my best bit, which is probably why i made the reference to it in the chappie description. xD I'm soo glad you liked it!
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A Roti what Prata? =S Is this in any way supposed to relate to the hindi words? xD
I like it so far :)Author's Response: A Roti John Prata is this sort of food you get in singapore. Imagine a prata, with ketchup and mustard :P.
I'm glad you liked it! Report Review
Haha. I like this Molly. She's... Cool. :D
I wonder why Scorpius sits alone. I shall wait and see. Looking forward to the next chapter, this story has perked my interest. :)
Sam (SamMalfoy93).Author's Response: Hi!
Good, i was pretty happy with Molly, actually (I'm not big headed, or anything). But it's nice to know i'm not the only one.
You shall see; all will be revealed. That type of thing.
The next chapter is in the queue already, i was pretty prolific (for a bit, at least.)
Thanks so much for reviewing my story! Report Review
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