oh goodness!The cliff hanger!
wow,I wanted to die when I found out what Scorp had done with rose!D: so sad!
emotions,details,and characterization!I fell in love with Scorp unfortunately...darn you!Why is it in every fic I read of your I fall in love with some guy?! Darn it all to heck.
And the cheater of everybody.at least from what Al said!
The ending could have used a wee bit more details as to what happened,but it can wait:D favoriting! 10/10! a well deserved 10/10 too!Author's Response: It was a cliffie, huh? ;D lol
Yeah...Scorp was a naught boy ;D haha But, it was needed for the plot, so that Dom would leave! haha
I'm glad you thought the story was done so well! You have honestly got to be my best reviewer! :D Thanks! :D
haha I'm just talented like that I guess ^.^ haha but Scorp is pretty charming! He's a lot like Draco in Unforgiven! lol
Yupp.he's a cheater alright! :/
I'll work on details! :D
AWW, thanks so much! :D Report Review
Wow, this was really good =). I couldn't spot any mistakes, and your writing flowed really well. The ending to this chapter was great, I can't wait to find out what happens in the rest of the story. 10/10. =)Author's Response: I'm so very glad you enjoyed it!!:D
This is different from anything I've ever written before, so I was wary as to what the reception would be, but I'm glad it was enjoyable!:D
There will be more, I promise(:
10/10? Wow, thank you oh so very much, it means a LOT to me:D Report Review
Oh wow. That was really good. The flow of this was great, I wanted to keep reading. The cliffhanger at the end is good too, it doesn't seem to just end, but it leaves you wanting more. Your writing is good, I loved the descriptions.
There weren't many things wrong, a few grammar and spelling errors, but nothing to distracting. The dialouge between Scorpius and Albus confused me a little-it wasn't entirely clear to me what Scorp had done until Dom confronted him. But that may just be me.
This seems like a really intersting story, and I'd love to see where it goes. You're off to a great start.
~Sara (puppyluv242)Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it!!:D I plan to write more, but the next thing I'm submitting to the quere is Chapter 20 of Unforgiven because I've been keeping people waiting on it for a while! lol:D
I'm not very good at spotting those things! Things for pointing it out to me(:
I'm sorry it was confusing:/ I'll work on that:)
I'm glad it's entertaining, and I promise to do my part of the review swap as soon as I can:D
I'm glad you liked it:D Report Review
Intense. :D Really good! Nothing I would add, remove, etc! *Adding to favorites*Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it! I was nervous, because it's more intense than anything I've written before, glad it was good(:
I'm so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for adding it to your favs(: Report Review
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