omg this is soo god please please please please please please post the next chapter Author's Response: You really might have to wait a while. I don't know how long, but it could be a considerable amount of time! Report Review
I really like this so far! You're writing style is great, and I love the whole Black/White thing. Going to read on!Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I hope you enjoy the rest of the story! Report Review
please please please write the next chapter Author's Response: Ugh, the next chapter will be a bit of a wait, I am afraid Report Review
Here for review tag!
Aha I am loving the way things are going. So, Millie has finally agreed to (or more like has been forced to) 'pretend' to be Sirius' girlfriend. This should be fun xD I liked the interaction between Sirius and her, the way she was caught up between Rex and Sirius. It was all portrayed in a cute way and I chuckled.
I think you're doing a great job with the story and I hope to come back for the next chapter soon to see how things go for Sirius and Millie now.
(AditiDraco95)Author's Response: Hello!
I remember being super excited writing this chapter because it meant that, finally, something was happening!
Thanks for the review! As always, it was wonderful! Report Review
Okay I'm biased. i read this before your request and nvere sat down to write a review. I Loved it though. I Love it now. Very great writing, the Oc draws me in and makes me laugh. Lily overeacts to things as usual and Siris is well Sirius. I love the characters and I love the story. But I'm too biased to suggest improvment because the story captures my attention so and draws me in. I'm not much help here, I'm sorry.Author's Response: Oh! I'm so sorry that I made you leave a review! I didn't know you'd already read this! You didn't have to review, but I'm really happy that you left one anyway!
I'm glad Millie makes you laugh - sometimes, she makes me question her thought processes. And of course Lily overreacts to everything! No one else seems to react enough in this story, so she's kind of overcompensating! Sirius seems to be really popular, and whilst I love him for all his flaws, he can be a real... well, pain, sometimes!
Thank you so much for reviewing this, though, and your love and support for this story is really appreciated! Report Review
I still read :D seriously love the story, it was the first one I read and is still my favourite Author's Response: Yay! That's so wonderful to hear that you're still reading this! I remember my first fic, but the author stopped writing it, and eventually, the site it was on shut down! And I'm so flattered! Report Review
Ee this was soo cute. Millie & Sirius. Mirius! Simillie! Sillie! Gah. I loved this chapter. I think you made a good choice in writing the entire chapter in Millie's POV, especially since the last chapter jumped quite a bit between her and Sirius. Ooh, and Rex makes a return -_- He's a real numbskull, that one. The part where he slinks off with his tail between his legs, acting all confused and disbelieving made me grin with sheer glee because face it, some blokes just can't take no for an answer. And I sense if no one stood up to Rex, he might get seriously creepy. Right. I'm rambling.
I'm loving Sirius and Millie's little arrangement a lot!
"You'll have to call me Sirius. People who like each other do not refer to them by their last names."
Ha! This made me laugh a bit because Sirius is acting completely straight, stating the obvious and knowing very well how reluctant Millie is.
And then there was the mention of James the slave driver in Quidditch!
Anyway, another great chapter :D Am enjoying all this Sillie/Simillie fluff heaps ♥
-tehAuthor's Response: Sillie! Definitely Sillie! And I thought it was about time that the POVs settled a bit - but not for long! The weird POV changes come back with a vengeance a bit later on, I fear!
Rex is a weirdo, but he's a fun weirdo. I've never written a character quite as dense as him!
Sirius is just being Sirius. He knows that Millie's not happy with the situation, but he sees no reason why he shouldn't be happy with it, so teases her mercilessly, because he knows that deep down, she'd ignore him otherwise. There's just no other way to get a reaction out of her!
And James is a total slavedriver, you know it!
And there's way more fluff to come! Report Review
I've missed my Millie and Sirius time so I was glad that I could tag you in the review tag :D I really loved this chapter as Sirius and Millie sort of get together even if they're only fake dating, it's still something :D
I really loved Millie's thoughts in this chapter they were so lively and funny, but I think the best one has to go to her description of James being like a slavedriver!
Ooh so the infamous Rex appears again, I really have a strong dislike towards that guy. First of all he's insanely creepy, and his name. It reminds me of a dinasoar, but I suppose that's what his manner is like so if you did that on purpose kudos to you!
Gah! Sirius is way too cute! The way he just strode in and announced that he was dating her. I honestly can't see why Millie would complain, if Sirius said that about me I would be jumping for joy. Then again she has had this hatred towards him forever.
Then her resignation at the end of the chapter when she realises that she's going to have to date him was great, and you couldn't help but feel sorry for her.
I feel as if this review was really incoherent but either I really enjoyed this chapter, and I hope this review makes some sort of sense to you :D
-KianaAuthor's Response: Hello again!
Haha, I'm glad that you came back to review! And for me, this is where the story really starts. Because they actually have a conversation that is longer than five lines! Talk about relationship progress!
And James really is an utter slavedriver. I like to think that Oliver Wood took his inspiration from James Potter!
Rex's name is definitely on purpose. I wanted a name that sounded stupid, so I thought to name him after good ol' T. Rex, with the one from Meet the Robinsons in particular! Although, rex means king in latin!
Sirius is cute, but not cute. I'd be seriously annoyed if a guy just waltzed in and announced that they were dating me - something that I share with Millie. However, if it were Sirius Black, like you, I most definitely would not be complaining!
Haha! No, your review was perfectly coherent, although I have a feeling that my responses tend to be rather long and rambly! Report Review
Anyway, I've never read a Sirius Black/OC story before so this is new for me! Anyway, for a first-timer in the Sirius Black world I've come across a pretty good story!
I like Millie's character, she seems to be the perfect friend for Lily who, judging by what happened in this chapter, gets frazzled a lot.
I love how it never occurred to Lily that James knew her birthday when the boy has been practically in love with her for so long. I'd be surprised if he didn't know her birthday.
I was slightly confused as to where this was taking place because it sounded a lot like Hogwarts but then you mentioned Diagon Alley.
Anyway, besides that, awesome job!Author's Response: Welcome to your first Sirius/OC story! I started reading fanfic with Jily and then moved onto Sirius/OC, so welcome to the fold!
Lily is frazzled personified. That woman doesn't know the meaning of the word "relaxed".
And Lily's really weird like that. I mean, I'd be pretty disappointed in my stalker if they didn't know my birthday.
And I can't believe I didn't even mention where this took place! It was Diagon Alley!
Thanks for the review! Report Review
Review tag :)
Ooh, drama drama! Plot complications! Jealousy-inducing tactics! Revenge strategies!
Honestly, this chapter was just ridiculously fun to read. Adored the dialogue between Millie and Sirius as they gorged on ice-cream. Baha, I think their ship name would either be Mirius or Sillie (and I'm going for the latter, though I bet you've already considered this...)
I don't think I've ever seen Dumbledore so angry :P Threatening to cancel Quidditch, indeed! And he's never even done such a thing in the series! All because of a little rain :) The rain prank was hilarious, especially with all the shirts going see-through. The Marauders are chaos personified.
I would advise you to not switch POV too many times within the same chapter as it can be a bit disruptive :)
Anyway, lovely writing! My fluff quota for the day has been filled :) This was just supremely entertaining.
-tehAuthor's Response: Hello!
OMG! You're up to chapter five already! Stuff actually starts happening from now on in - sort of. And this has to be the most drama-filled chapter to date.
This chapter was a lot of fun to write. I just loved writing the Marauders being Marauders, and finally some interaction between my leads! Sillie is the best ship name in the history of ship names, simply because it kind of encompasses their entire relationship in one pithy epitaph.
Dumbledore wasn't really angry. He just knew it was the fastest way to get the culprits to own up, although he knew who they were, thus he was able to issue such a threat! With a war going and everything, the headmaster just doesn't have time for school!
The POV switches in this chapter were pretty bad, I know. In re-reading, one was probably completely unnecessary - but because it was a Sirius one, I left it in!
And I am glad to hear fluff quotas are being filled! Fluff quotas must be filled every day! Report Review
NEXT CHAPTER PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE IT IS SO GOOOFAuthor's Response: Soon... I hope... Report Review
I just read this all at once... AMAZING! Sirius Black. Uggghhh I wish I was Millie. Especially if he's as good at snogging as they say! ;)Author's Response: I am thoroughly impressed by your gargantuan effort, ThoroughlyImpressed!!!:). That is quite the achievement!
And he isn't as good at snogging as they say - he's far better ;) Report Review
Lily can get me batman if she wants...Author's Response: Dude, ANYONE can get me Batman if they like! Report Review
I'm still reading!
Gah, I really have nothing else to say except please believe Sirius, Millie!
So thankful you updated again :) This fic is probably one of my favorites!Author's Response: :D Yay!
I love how everyone thinks that Sirius is so genuine! Don't get me wrong - I think he's genuine, too, but seriously - cut Millie some slack, here!
And super flattered to hear that this is one of your faves! Report Review
uhghghghg!. if you do not get millie and sirious back together, within one chapter, i will probably die of misery, and you will be charged with 2nd degree murder. And be sent to jail for life.Author's Response: I think I'm willing to take that risk... Report Review
meanie. (I'm writing this sentence so that i can get over the twenty letter minimum)Author's Response: Yes, I know ;) Report Review
Why in the world would you think we weren't reading something as awesome as this? I'm really glad you are going to keep updating. Can't wait for the next chapter!Author's Response: It happens. People stop reading stuff all the time. But I'm super flattered to hear that you think this fic is still worth it, even after all this time! Report Review
I love this fic. Hate that as all fics the posts leave you hanging! hahaAuthor's Response: I try not to leave you hanging on each chapter! This wasn't really a cliffhanger. I could have cut it much earlier. Then imagine how mad you might have been? ;) Report Review
I really liked this chapter, and how much Sirius is trying to talk to her, because that is what I see him doing..
..and I'm glad your writing again! :)Author's Response: Yes, I am glad I am writing again, too! It made me very happy to get this chapter posted! And it's nice to hear that you enjoyed the chapter, and where Sirius is going, as a character! Report Review
You have NO idea how much joy it gave me when I checked to see if this had been posted yet and it said 'Chapters:33'!!
So yeah, this chapter kinda surprised me. I was expecting a big confrontation-y thing, but instead it's been a long silence. Which, now I think about it, kind of suits Millie.
I guess it was a bit of a filler chapter, but it told us some important things and it built up tension.
I liked how Millie was mainly focusing on other people- James and Lily's wedding, etc- rather than just sitting sobbing about herself, which tends to happen a lot. I thought that really showed us something about her.
I'M A FANGIRL TOO! WE CAN FANGIRL TOGETHER!
OhmyGodric that sounds so wrong. Sorry. I'm just kinda hyper because you updated!!! :-) I should NOT be getting this excited over a fanfic.
Overall I enjoyed the chapter and can't wait for the next one. Hopefully I didn't take hours over this and am the first reviewer! :-)
Miss Moneypenny :-)Author's Response: Hello!
You are indeed the first reviewer! Yay you!
And I know right? I finally got some inspiration for the next chapter. And the words came spewing out in only a couple of days, too! So proud of myself!
Millie really isn't a confrontation kind of person, really. She tried it once and ended up kissing Sirius. Whilst it seemed to have worked out for her in the long run, recent events seem to indicate otherwise.
I tried so hard not to make it filler-y! I wanted to show the effects of what had happened on both of them, and how they were coping, because character development rules. There'll be some action in the next chapter, hopefully!
And that's another thing about Millie - she didn't want to wallow in self-pity, which I thought was great of her.
WE SHOULD FANGIRL OVER SIRIUS LIKE, ALL THE TIME!!! HE'S WORTH THE KILOJOULES! Report Review
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Ooh I enjoyed this chapter! The Marauders made it rain? haha that was awesome. I enjoyed the interactions between Millie & Sirius, both in the Potions class and in the kitchen. I am so excited to see what happens further. I am pretty sure Millie is going to agree to pretend to be Sirius' girlfriend and "things" will ensure ;)
The plot is unfolding in a very interesting manner so please keep writing. This was a great chapter and I think the story is going great so far.
(AditiDraco95)Author's Response: Hello!
Yes, the Marauders made it rain, coz they're cool like that! And be excited - because stuff happens! Finally! Yay!
And thank you for your lovely review, as always! Report Review
Ya know something? Authors are cruel people ( OMG did i call myself cruel?). They leave you hanging so badly. IF U DONT POST SOON, I SWEAR I WILL BECOME A MASS MURDERER FROM THE SUSPENSE! Joking. Ps. Im giving you a one for not updating soon enoughAuthor's Response: Authors really are cruel, aren't they? Can I excuse my terrible behaviour by saying that life got in the way? Shall that suffice?
And if you wanna know... the next chapter's in the queue... Report Review
Judging by your writing ( im warning you, im not very good at judging ) you'd like Breaking Silence and A Buiding Love and Intelligent or Backstory. Like iv said before, MORE SNUFFLESAuthor's Response: I shall go check those out! And there's more Snuffles ahead! Report Review
Gush, gush , gush. WHEN MORE SNUFFLES * screams angrily at her iPod* man, is it just me or is every female reading this siriusly wishing that sirius was real and craving a snog from him right about now?Author's Response: Everyone always wants more of adorable Sirius, and I'm like, I just gave you about five chapters of nothing else! He's very popular, which is good, because I love writing him like that! I love that you want to snog him, because I want to snog him a little bit, too. Report Review
Hiya! I'm reviewing this chapter because I've already left a couple of shoddy reviews for some of the others. That was, like, waayy back when I just joined so I was a lot less experienced at that kind of thing.
But I'm back, and better than ever!
So yeah, I'm reading this and enjoying it so much it's probably illegal. You HAVE to update. NOW. I have just favourite-d your story! Siriusly! (hahahaha d'you get it? Sirius-- seriously... Whatever.)
Anyway, you've created a fabulous story here. I love Millie. She has crazily low self-esteem, but I adore her! She so realistic; she has the same issues as the rest of us.
And as for Sirius, what do I have to say about him? He's incredible.
I love James and Lily too, and all the others... Except Wormy, obvs. And Sarah, I'm not too sure about her.
But yeah, I LOVE THIS STORY. It's incredible. I really want Millie and Sirius to get together: this fake stuff is just annoying. Also, I loved all the stuff about Millie's past. That was really clever.
The one bad thing I have to say is, like, waaayy back (I think on their first date) the POV changed so many times I literally got a headache. But it didn't really detract from the story, if anything it added to its character, but I'm just a wimp.
But you have to update RIGHT NOW.
Miss Moneypenny xx
P.S Did I mention I LOVE THUS STORY? It's INCREDIBLE. YOU HAVE TO FINISH IT. LIKE, RIGHT NOW.
P.P.S I've just noticed I sound a bit aggressive in this review. I'm not actually. *hugs*Author's Response: Hello! Wow! Thanks for coming back to review! I think it's great what you're doing here, returning to some of your earlier reviewed stories and leaving some more reviews, now that you're more confident in your abilities! Kudos to you!
And guess what? I just updated. The next chapter is in the queue as we speak. Hope you enjoy it! And thanks for the fave!
Hmm, I wouldn't say she has low self-esteem, but you're right in that she isn't sure of herself around Sirius. But I'm glad that you think she's realistic and has normal problems! It's good to hear that you can relate to her!
And Sirius is... yeah. I'm one of his fangirls, if it isn't blindingly obvious. James and Lily are fun, and Wormtail is terrible, although he does have my favourite line in all of this story. And you don't like Sarah? Aww! I'm sad now, because I wanted people to like her - but it's like, totally okay if you don't. I'm not dying because of it. Probably means I should spend more time on her, actually!
I WANT MILLIE AND SIRIUS TO GET TOGETHER, TOO! And yeah, Millie's past. I wanted trauma, but not typical pureblood trauma for her.
And I know about the POVs. I change them erratically, especially when I'm stuck for ideas. A lot of the chapters were written one after the other after the other, so I just kept changing POVs to keep things fresh (albeit just for me, as a writer) and whenever I got stuck. But hopefully, the changes have become a bit more sedate now, and I've improved my writing skills enough to make it work with fewer changes!
And I didn't think you sounded aggressive at all! I loved hearing from you again! Report Review
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