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Review #1, by Pretense Of Perfection The Weaker Brother

9th July 2014:
Ahh, I've totally fallen in love with your writing. This is another incredibly unique story, and I was enchanted the whole way through. Your talent is so apparent, although it is a bit raw, if you don't mind my saying. I'll definitely recommend a beta again, just to help clean up with some of the continuity issues. In the beginning you said Garm was the firstborn child, but later in the story Elizabeth refers to him as the younger brother. There were a few It's nothing major, but I just wanted to point it out. I LOVED this story though. I think you did an amazing job with Garm. i like how you make his dialogue sort of uneducated sounded, I think it fits in perfectly with his upbringing and his character, This really made his character for me. I love the happy ending, because let's face it, who doesn't? I think Elizabeth was well done as well, and I loved her fearlessness and compassion. At first I kind of wanted him to end up joining Harry's side and fighting for good against his brother, but after thinking about it further, I think you made the right choice. Fenrir would've killed him for sure, and that would just make me sad. I think you did a great job showing the viciousness of the pack as well, having them send a young man, or boy really, off into the world to turn more people into wolves. I loved basically everything, in case you can't tell.

--house cup 2014 review--
pretense of perfection, gryffindor

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Review #2, by May_Diggory_Weasley The Weaker Brother

10th September 2011:
here with your review!
This is so amazing. I love how you show his emotions similar to Remus Lupins, it is so sweet to hear that he wants to read, and feels the shame of his family. I find it horrific to realise that he was bitten by his own father, forced into the clan. And the characterisation was lovely too, Garm seems a really nice person, and Elizabeth is really good in the way she treats Garm as a human, not a wolf.

Overall this is a really good story. so glad I read it!

Author's Response: Thank you for this review! I'll get to yours right away. ^^

I'm so glad you thought that the emotions and characterisation was good. Yes, getting bitten by your own father would be horrific, wouldn't it? I felt terrible for Garm as I wrote it, so I was glad he found Elizabeth and was happy in the end. I'm so glad you liked it!

Leanne :)


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Review #3, by MileyMalfoy The Weaker Brother

10th September 2011:
Wow. I love that this is almost a backstory to how Fenrir became the leader of his pack but really more about his brother. I thought that the characterization was wonderful, that Garm really was very different from his brother and different from what you would expect the stereotypical werewolf to be.

Overall I really liked it. I haven't read this Native American Myth but I did think that this story was well put together and I like that in the end Garm got to be safe and be as normal as possible. I couldn't help being slightly disgusted at his dad though and how his father bit him when he was a newborn. To me that's an absolutely horrible thing to happen but I also thought that it fit the story really well.

Great job!

MileyMalfoy ^^

Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, I thought that Garm would be able to show how Fenrir grew up, and contrast it to how he maybe could have turned out (e.g. Garm, if that makes sense ^^)

I'm really glad you liked it, because I found it a little bit tricky to translate into the wizarding world, but at the same time, I think it turned out pretty loyal to the story.

Oh yes, I felt so sorry for Garm, and I felt terrible as I wrote it- but I think the fathers idea was that if his children never experienced normality, they wouldn't resent being a werewolf, and instead would hate wizards, if you know what I mean? I mean, it worked with Fenrir.

But, yes, I'm really glad you liked it! ^^

Leanne


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