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Review #1, by kenpo Dragons In Bolton

28th May 2014:
This seems like a really cool story! Why doesn't it have more reviews? :(

I really loved the opening paragraph, and the last line: "Trust was still a closely guarded commodity these days."

You write very well!! You use interrupted dialogue correctly and well. You obviously take time to edit; I don't think saw any typos.

You've really piqued my interest. I want to know more about these characters... like their identities!

I also really love the title.

I don't want to be rude, but I think that you should have many more reviews than you do, so I'm going to give a little bit on unsolicited advice:
I'd consider adding another genre. Most stories are more than one, and so when people search for stories, they'll be more likely to find yours.

Another thing that you could do is to get a banner. You can either make one yourself, or request one on The Dark Arts (there's a link on the front page of the archives).

I'm sorry if I'm being rude... I just think that this seems like a really cool story, and you write very very well, and I want you to get more reviews!! (I obviously don't know what your read-counts look like, but it's also always nice to get higher read-counts)

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, thank you! *Blush!* I am so glad that you've enjoyed it so far. And you're not being rude at all; I appreciate any and all critique. I really like the idea of another genre. I have no idea what should be, I'll have to think about how I would describe it!

Thank you again so much for your lovely message. It's so nice to hear from the readers. I am finishing the story - hoping it won't take too long - so I hope you continue reading!

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Review #2, by AlexFan The Hint of A Curse

2nd November 2013:
I don't think I've ever heard Snape speak good of someone before in my life. You can imagine how shocked I was to hear that he was actually complimenting Elsie on her experience. I would've expected him to say that she was unfit in some way because he was bitter that he didn't get the job.

I loved this as a proper beginning though, it was light and a little bit funny and made the reader smile as they read. I know I definitely cracked up at the very end when Snape choked on his drink.

It took me a good few minutes to calm down and write this review. The picture that it conjured up in my head was just really humorous. Brilliant job on the chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you! I've never thought of Snape as an inherently bad person. He appreciates talent and he definitely has a dark sense of humor, he's just very blunt and acerbic and uses that as a defense mechanism. Often, authors paint him as very mean and vindictive, which is fine, but I wanted to give an alternative to that and try to look at WHY he is that way.
Thank you for your comment! I hope you enjoy the rest!

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Review #3, by AlexFan Dragons In Bolton

2nd November 2013:
Okay, I'll admit, I was a bit weary coming into this, I usually am when I have to read a story that I usually wouldn't read out of pleasure. I can safely say though that I had nothing to worry about.

It's only the beginning but you've already gotten my attention and sucked me into the story. I felt like I was reading something written by J. K. Rowling herself, which is a great compliment in my opinion.

I loved the description that you had in this, usually, I'm aware of description when I usually read fanfiction. This was one of those very few fanfiction where I didn't even notice that it was actually description, it just felt like it was part of the setting, I felt like I was in the story myself.

But anyway, this definitely deserves more reviews and I hope I can leave one on all of the chapters.

Author's Response: Thank you very much! A great compliment indeed! I'm so glad you like it so far and I appreciate your comments. I hope you continue to enjoy the story!

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Review #4, by Haronione Chalk Dust On the Hourglass

22nd October 2013:
Ah, so this is set the year before Harry starts Hogwarts? I have to say I have not read any stories set during this time (or any time between Harry going to the Dursley's and him starting Hogwarts) so I am very interested to see where you are taking this plot :)

So, considering Elsie says (or thinks) that this is only the second time she has seen Snape I'm guessing they definitely don't have a history as I was wondering in the last chapter! But now I wonder whether some kind of relationship will be forged between them (romantic or not). It appears Elsie is a bit older than I presumed since she knows Molly and Arthur - I was imagining her to have been at school around the same time the Marauders and Snape were.

Ooh, is the note from Severus? Or Sybil? They are the only two I can think if right now. I'm going to have to read on now to find out who it is and why they want to meet her!!

Haronione ♥

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I'm so glad that you are enjoying it. There is definitely more of Elsie's backstory to come so I hope you keep reading!

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Review #5, by rozen_maiden The Hint of A Curse

22nd October 2013:
I'm so surprised this doesn't have more reviews! Your writing is truly amazing, full of description that has just drawn me in and kept me enthralled these two chapters. Elsie is a real strong character, and you've kept a certain mystery about her - in a way that makes me feel like I have met her. Piece by piece she is unraveling, and I'm interested to see where you are going to take her story. Once I have the time to, I will definitely keep reading on. In the meantime, awesome job :) Your plot has a real potential.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying it, thank you!

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Review #6, by Haronione The Hint of A Curse

22nd October 2013:
I really liked the opening paragraph. After finding out virtually nothing about Elsie in the first chapter (which wasn't a bad thing - it added to the mystery and intrigue) it was great to find out a bit more about her while still leaving some mystery around her. I am now even more eager to read on to find out why she has been living as little more than a vagrant and why Dumbledore thinks she will be able to teach the students more than any of the others teachers could - she must have been through quite a few ordeals for Dumbledore to think that!

I think you got the attitudes of the teachers spot on here; all of them disputing Dumbledore's thoughts about needing to prepare the students for what's out there; Trelawny worrying about the curse but everyone else laughing it off etc I enjoyed this little glimpse at how staff meetings may have been like at Hogwarts :)

Ha, I loved Dumbledore's vague advice about teaching, very Dumbledore like. I could really see him being like that. But it didn't really help poor Elsie though!! No wonder Elsie felt unprepared! I look forward to seeing how she gets on with her classes :)

I'm wondering whether Elsie and Severus knew each other before she got the teaching position and whether there is any history between them - I guess I will find out as I read on ;)

This was another great chapter and I shall definitely be reading on!

Haronione ♥

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Review #7, by Haronione Dragons In Bolton

22nd October 2013:
This was a strong first chapter and I really enjoyed reading it :)

The descriptions in this were great and you really set the scene well. I am intrigued by this first chapter and I'm left wanting to read on to find out who the two hooded characters are - I'm guessing Dumbledore is the man who entered unnoticed. As for the woman - I'm interested to find out who she is, where she has been and why she has come back!

Great first chapter, I look forward to reading more :)

Haronione ♥

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