Aw, they got together! How sweet! I really want to know how that happened though so expect me to see me at your other story too :P
I don't know how you did it but you made a 4 chapter story seem like a novel! I really felt connected to the characters and it was cool to watch them grow up in such a short amount of time! You appropriately handled their personalities growing as they got older and I thought that was really good :) nice job!
I don't know if I said this in my other reviews or not but I really liked the way you handled Scorpius. He was totally unlike his father in so many ways and I loved that he wasn't the 'typical Slytherin' who goes around picking fights with everyone. I felt like Rose did that more than he did which is pretty ironic to me xD
Another thing I don't think I mentioned before was how well this whole story flowed together. Even though you were switching between a few years in chapters 2 and 3 it flowed so easily and didn't have any awkward traditions. The chapters all ended very nicely and I'm glad the very last one ended where Scorpius loved Rose instead of hating her like the rest of them. It was a nice change ;)
Thanks for this awesome read! I can't wait to start your other story now :D
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! I'm sorry it's taken me so long to respond to your lovely reviews, but I'm really glad you enjoyed it and I hope that if you got to CINAS, you enjoyed that, too. :)
I've always kind of seen Gryffindors as more likely to pick fights than Slytherins, honestly - it seems to me like Slytherins use their brains and common sense more, where Gryffindors are a lot more likely to be overwhelmed by their Feelings. People who are overwhelmed by their feelings tend to pick more fights, in my experience. :P
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Yay, he's finally admitting to himself that he's attracted to her! I just feel bad for him because he's soo confused and conflicted about it lol. Liking someone/being attracted to someone should be a positive thing, Scorpius!
I love how at the beginning at some of the years you start with a memory of the summer. I almost forgot that he was on the train when you started with the Fifth Year and was immersed in the memory of him being at Albus' house and drooling over Rose.
You know, you are very good at staying true to your characters. I haven't seen 1 slip up with their personalities and I really love that. sometimes you find characters changing throughout stories to please the readers but I like that you still have Rose being a complete jerk to everyone (or Scorpius, I don't really know how she interacts with other people:P)
The way you slip in random books that Noah is reading makes me laugh, too. I can tell these are some of your favorites? :)
Your writing is so flawless and I never really find any mistakes. I'm excited but a little sad to read the next/last chapter. I've grown really fond of these characters! :O
Once again, great chapter!
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Poor Scorpius - I felt bad for him, too! Liking someone should usually be a positive, but I guess we can't really blame Scorpius for feeling a little conflicted, given how Rose acts around him. (And she's definitely much worse around him - she can be pretty charming overall, though she does sometimes have the tact and social skills of an agoraphobic lobster.)
The books I have Noah read are definitely some of my favorites, haha.
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I really love how you're making all of these scenes on the train. I've never read anything like this before. It's really interesting :D (and just so you know, I for some reason cannot right a train scene to save my life so you are making me incredibly jealous right now :P)
Hahah, I love all of these interactions with Rose and Scorpius. Obviously they aren't going to be friends any time soon, but I love that they pick fights with each other over stupid things. It really brings back some childhood memories :o
I also liked how you added in subtly what house everyone was in, especially without doing it in a 'telling' way. It was just casually brought up in conversation. What house is Noah in though? It's probably going to come up in the future chapters but I'm just a very impatient person ;P
I love the way you had the Malfoys kind of wary of sending Scorpius to the Potter's house at first. Obviously Draco should feel kind awkward about it. I'm just glad Harry was mature enough to see past everything that happened and assured him it was okay. I really can't see Harry holding a grudge for too long about stuff like that & I'm just happy you stuck to his character so well :)
Really good chapter, nice job! (:
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like the train scenes! I honestly really struggled with them at first, because I was afraid that I'd write them too similar and they'd end up dragging. I'm glad that you feel like I succeeded in making them interesting and fun.
I'm also really glad that you liked the way I worked in everyone's House - I've never been a big fan of just telling readers what House characters are in instead of working it into a conversation, and I tried really hard to avoid that. Ditto Harry's grudge or lack thereof - I feel like in a lot of next-gen fics, the animosity between the trio and Draco is a little overstated. I doubt they've become best friends, but come on, they're probably not coming to blows every time they meet, you know?
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This seems like it'll make a very interesting story :) I like the way you characterized everyone in here and stuck to their personalities so well. The fact that you were able to write first years so flawlessly makes me jealous... I find that age so hard to write! :P
I really like how you were able to keep me guessing but gave me enough information in this chapter to keep me satisfied. I'm really curious as to what house Rose and Al (along with Scorpius and Noah) will be sorted into and whether Scorpius and Rose will ever be friends.
I thought it was so cute when Albus said that he wanted to get to know new people and stay with Scorpius and Noah. Usually kids that age want to stick with familiarity and would've gone with their family but it shows that he's different and more independent.
I'm also really glad that you made Scorpius and Noah characters who really don't care where they're sorted or care about pure-blood nonsense. I really hate seeing Scorpius as a blood status freak and I hope he's able to be friends with Al and not let that stuff get in the way!
great first chapter! I'm excited to read about the other years :)
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this opening chapter, especially Albus's streak of independence - for me, it's a very important part of his character, so I'm happy that it came through so strongly.
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I am really enjoying this Scorpius/Rose relationship...I can't wait for more updates to the sequal!! And I literally laughed out loud at the car being Astoria's fault...great note...Keep up the good writing!Author's Response: Aw, thank you! I should be updating the sequel more regularly by June - life has been super stressful lately, and it's sucked away my energy from writing. I haven't forgotten about the story, though, don't worry. :) Report Review
This has been such a fun little jaunt back through Rose and Scorpius world. It reminded me how much I really love Cinas.
I like how well you've aged everyone. They aren't the scared little first years, or the awkward third years. They still have the same amount of trials between them, different kinds now that Rose and Scorpius are building a relationship as opposed to hating each other, but those challenges have changed really nicely with their age.
I got really curious about the Malfoys through this. Whether or not they ever did have dinner with the Potters or Weasleys.. Although I do think they play a more prominent park in Wrinkles, right? I need to catch up with that now that you've gotten me all next gen feelsy.
His nervousness reminded me a lot of the way he was feeling before meeting the whole group at Hogsmeade during Cinas. I can't imagine a more intimidating family to have to try and get along with than the Weasley Potter family. I'm sure once they decide to like you, it would be awesome to be apart of their family, but up until that point.. it just seems down right frightening!
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I really liked getting a glimpse of Scorpius's thoughts pertaining to that summer when he really started 'seeing' Rose.
I have to say that James/Roxanne/Rose group really do feel like bullies sometimes, but I suppose I'll just have to trust that she was telling the truth about that person deserving getting jinxed. Or at least deserving it a little bit.
Scorpius seems so torn, it's absolutely adorable. It's like Rose is the cut you just keep picking at even though you know it hurts, you can't stop. Maybe because there was so much focus on the previous summer in the second section, but this chapter didn't feel nearly as repetitive as the last. And even the repetitive feeling wasn't bad at all, because I do find myself getting really excited to see the development for the next train ride. But yeah, this one was much easier to keep the two sections straight in my mind.
And the little remark to the dream! Hahaha poor guy. He really has it bad.
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Your Lily is seems so sweet/adorable! And I love the strained attitude between the Potters and Malfoys. I think it fits well that they'd be nothing but polite, but still not over friendly. I'd love to see that dinner actually happen :P
I think your doing such an awesome job with the boys' friendship. They all seem to compliment one another very well, and it seems very natural.
I think you could have lengthened the second section and made this two separate chapters, because both sections are kind of blurring in my head and I think they'd seem more clear if they continued the pattern of their own chapters.
Maybe adding more at the beginning of the third year train ride, like before they are on the train talking with some of the other students that aren't one of the three boys about what they did over the summer.. it would make it feel more new maybe if we learned about what they did through a conversation. Or maybe I'm just greedy and want more chapters :P
I still really love Rose, but considering I've read your other next gen's I new I would. I like how Scorpius can't quite explain why Rose bothers him *so* much.. it's really fits for a young teenage boy who has a crush but doesn't know it.
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As someone who has read Cinas, it was SO fun to read this first prequel installment!
You've done something that I feel so many writers struggle with - made James both arrogant, annoying, but appealing. I'm a big fan of the idea that he was quite a bit like the man he was named after. Not an exact copy, but similar. It feels really realistic to me that he'd want to know where his name came from, then of course hear stories about this grandfather, then want to be like him. Anyway,
I have a big pet peeve when people make James Potter I just seem like this absolutely unlikable jerk (it's mainly those Snape Lily shippers...hahaha) because someone really can be both arrogant and appealing at the same time. They don't have to be a total jerk or a total nice guy, but somewhere in between. You've fit that perfectly into this, and him and Roxanne's friendship is just something that I love about your next gen writings.
Scorpius is really... infectious.. I suppose. Just one of those people you feel like you want to be around because he seems like he's honest but not boring. I like that he wasn't aware of who Rose was or why he'd been pointed out, it shows that maybe Draco grew up enough to not talk too much about the Weasley's and how much he may detest them.
Then the line, 'are you really?' it just... it was SO Hermione and I find it rare for people to be able to *subtly* get traits of both Ron and Hermione in Rose... and you did that so well. That was just such a Hermione voice, but it was done in a realistic way. One of those, 'oh boy, you remind me of your mother' instances as opposed to feeling like I was just hit over the head with you reincarnating a Ron Hermione concoction. Am I making sense? Hmm.
This was an amazingly written and incredibly fun first installment! I have a big soft spot for the 'on the Hogwarts Express' chapters. Report Review
I love this!!
Is there gonna be a seventh year train ride though?Author's Response: Probably not, to be honest. I started to write one, but I think I've already covered all the bases, you know? I feel like writing about their seventh year would just be rehashing the same stuff.
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Loved the Narnia reference! And I like the story! I I'm reading your fanfic Curiosity Is Not a Sin and I couldn't stop myself from reading this one first : )Author's Response: Oh, thank you so much! :) I'm glad you like it, and I hope you like Curiosity just as much! Report Review
Okay- just had to do a shout out for Sabriel! :)
Love this so far!Author's Response: Oh, I'm glad you like it, too! I'm actually considering a Sabriel crossover at some point - I love those books so much. Report Review
Hihi! I read CINAS before I read this..You're really really good! Please write more!! I like Sorpious and Rose love story ones! Please focus on that! Yeah you!Author's Response: Aw, thanks! :) I just published the sequel to CINAS - it's called 'The Wrinkles in the Road.' It's another Scorpius/Rose, set several years after CINAS, and if you check it out, I hope you enjoy it.
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I've been hoping that this story would be update sometime soon! How exciting to get to see Rose and Scorpius nearly a year into their relationship! I really, really enjoy seeing these events from Scorpius's perspective. We know from the other story how Rose feels about everything, and this story really fills in the gaps that arise from my curiosity. I just love knowing as much about characters as I can. I appreciate that about your writing, that you have such well developed characters and plots.
I was interesting and fun to see Scorpius (and Noah) interacting with Rose's family without her there. It seems like they've come quite a long ways from "Curiosity."
Ha ha, the inclusion of the "things I want to do before I die" lists made me laugh. That seems just like the sort of thing James and Rose would do!
Wonderful chapter! Will the seventh year chapter be posted sometime around when the sequel is posted?Author's Response: Hey! I'm glad you liked this chapter - it was a lot of fun to write. Poor Noah, haha.
I'm actually not totally sure I'm going to post the chapter about their seventh year - I have it partially written, but I've had a hard time moving more than a few hundred words into it because I feel like the changes in their dynamic have already been covered. Yeah, it changes some in between 6th and 7th year, but not all that much in comparison. It kind of just feels like I'm rehashing the same thing again. I've marked it as completed for the moment, but maybe inspiration will hit me again. :)
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I've loved this story so far! Is there going to be one for seventh year too? Either way, this was awesome, one of my favorite Rose/Scorpius short stories.Author's Response: I'm not sure if there's going to be one for seventh year - I've marked it completed for now, but I may add in their seventh year as well. I've got some of it written, but I've never really been able to make it all work together in the way I want.
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:D nice one! simple and didn't have all the little details of their whole year...it was different! (:
-RelicAuthor's Response: Oh, thank you! I'm glad you like it! :) Report Review
THG! & HP? Oh you are a genius :P Author's Response: Haha, thanks! Gotta love THG! Report Review
Aww - Draco, Harry, & Ginny are adorable, being all grown-up :PAuthor's Response: I'm glad you like the way I've characterised them as adults! :) Thank you for the review! Report Review
Thumbs up to the Narnia books - I read ALL of them because they're awesome! Really great start, I love how you've introduced everyone, well done,
HiddenFace xAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! I love them, too - I totally looked in closets and wardrobes for Narnia as a kid. :P Report Review
I love the book Sabriel! :-) and I like the story so far.
-AlexAuthor's Response: Aw, thank you! I do, too. :) Report Review
Poor Scorpius! While I find his growing attraction to Rose funny and ironic it is clear that it is also highly uncomfortable for him. Fortunately for both he and Rose he doesn't do a good job of denying his attraction to her. Great glimpse into what Scorpius' and Rose's interactions were like before "Curiousity". It also makes it easier to understand Rose's discomfort with her previous knowledge of Scorpius in the most recent chapter of "Curiousity". Thank you for adding in the details.Author's Response: I'm glad that you feel like this really supplements 'Curiosity' in terms of understanding their relationship prior to it, as well as his feelings for her - that's exactly what I wanted. :) I really did feel like emphasising just how much he did really like her was important - while her feelings may have started at the beginning of their fifth year, he's really been grappling with them for much longer. (Luckily for her... and luckily for him, she finds that she actually IS attracted to him, not just a little curious.)
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Rose just gets worse and worse.Scorpius would be better off ignoring her like Noah suggested but it doesn't seem possible. The friendship between the boys is really admirable. Good chapter!Author's Response: I'm glad you like the friendship! I love Al, Scorpius, and Noah's friendship - it's a lot of fun to write. I also have to admit that I get a kick out of making two of Al's closest friends Slytherins, but unlike most people who do that, he wasn't Sorted into Slytherin himself and in fact has no Slytherin bone in his entire body. :P
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Rose, James and Roxanne aren't very nice here, are they? They are young, thoughtless and immature. Al is great but I didn't expect anything else from Albus Severus. Great first chapter!Author's Response: Thank you! :) And yeah, James and Roxanne... well, I think Al says in best early on in CINAS: they're fundamentally good people, but. :P Report Review
He had no idea why he found Rose Weasley attractive.
^ Hormones. Hormones. Hormones.
Really disliked young Rose but adored Scorpius and Noah. I think I asked you this before but I don't remember the answer so I'm going to bug you with the question again. When Curiosity ends will you write a sequel focusing on the two (since in your 'world' they're still together even when Lily is almost done with Hogwarts -- because they're still only dating in Albatross, right?) or would you write some one-shots focusing on special/interesting moments in their relationship like you do with Teddy/Vic? (= Just wondering!Author's Response: They are indeed together when Lily is almost done with Hogwarts... right now I'm thinking that when I finish up Cinas I might write a short story about them in the seventh year grappling with some of the issues they face as a couple, because Scorpius does become a Healer and understandably isn't wild about the idea of having to see his girlfriend wheeled in injured or worse. I'm not going to tell you what they decide there, though clearly whatever their decision they're dating again at this point.
In fact, by the end of The Albatross they might be more than just going out... if you know what I mean. ;)
So the short answer is yes, I'll likely write a short story sequel, and then probably some one- or two- shots when the inspiration hits me. :) They're really so much fun to write. Report Review
His father made to pick up the other end of his trunk, but Lily got there first. "I've got it," she said cheerfully.
^ Aw. Lily. How cute.
I like the story, seeing the interaction between the two of them is great to contrast with how they act now because this is a companion piece. I think the only thing I would say is I found it a bit boring, a bit repetitive. I know that's what you're going for (not the boring part, the repetitive thing) because it's supposed to focus solely on the train ride but then again I like that nothing really happened and it was realistic compared to what many others do for the train rides. I guess I'm half and half with this chapter.
I think my favorite character is Noah though. I have a new appreciation for him!Author's Response: I love Lily. She's so much fun to write. I also really like the relationship (my) Lily has with (my) Scorpius - they have a nice little friendship, I think. :P
I definitely know what you mean about it being repetitive - I struggled with that a bit, and I'm still not quite sure what to do about it. :( Hmm.
I'm glad you like Noah! I love Noah. He's one of my favourite OCs, along with Van.
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