My first thoughts as I started reading this were 'There was another Black brother?' because I had never thought of Regulus and Sirius being friends like that, nor for Sirius to seem like he was following the pureblood ways. I guess, in a way, I had always imagined him as a pureblood-ways hater for as long as he was able to make his own decisions. But then again, he could have just been pretending.. *reads on*
To think that it was Sirius' impression on Regulus' life that gave him the bravery and strength to defy Voldemort is something I would never have thought about. Regulus being the one to hide all this away makes me want to hug him. I really never did imagine him as someone who would want to be like Sirius, but lacking the courage to do so. But it all makes so much sense! It's like you're piecing together the missing parts of his story, and you have done it perfectly! *reads on* Now...to think that it was Sirius walking out that caused Regulus to join the death eaters..wow..I just..never thought of that before. I can see how it would, even if it wasn't the whole reason. The one person he relied on and was in awe of leaving will have made him upset, and you do stupid things when you're upset..even though it took him another year, he would have still been bitter. *reads* And now I want to hug him again! Thinking again that the only person who really cared for him was Sirius, and now he didn't have him, so he craved the attention of another. But his only choice was the wrong one, but he took it anyway. That really does show his Slytherin side; thinking of his own wants and needs rather than the right thing to do.
I had never managed to work out why Regulus had a change of heart, but the way you wrote it, with him overhearing things makes sense, especially with his previous want to not be a part of this! Having Kreacher actually seem to care for Regulus is a side we have been told about, but I never really thought it true until I saw it written down!
The last two paragraphs..they...they really made me see why he did it. His hero, Sirius, he had told him that he could do something great, though I doubt Regulus believed him, but he was ready to die because of the care Sirius gave him and that alone makes me think that maybe he wasn't all Slytherin.
I LOVED this so so so so much! It was amazingly written and I have a totally different perspective on the whole situation; something I thought would never happen!
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Hi, here your BvB review battle review! I really like the depth of the emotion in this story, the way we can connect with Regulus and his reflection. Here are a few things I wanted to point out.
'Itís sort of poetic that as I row towards my fate, my death, that I would reflect on my life, my experiences and all the moments I wish I could have changed.' This is such a great opening line, but there is a tense change half way through, which sort of spoiled the impact. There are a few grammar issues and typos so maybe a beta would be good idea? It just keeps the readers focus on the story rather than the grammar.
Otherwise though, I was really impressed, this style reall suits you well, the emotions are very realistic and there are some very intense, beautiful moments in there that really help you to understand Regulus. I think you get Kreacher really well too so well done! Report Review
This story is far more polished than your other one. There are still a few grammar errors, but not nearly as many. Also, I think the more solemn writing style suits you. This story flows much better and doesn't feel so hectic and confusing. Maybe that's also because it's a one-shot, so there aren't hidden details to be revealed in later chapters. This story seemed more well-rounded overall and like you put more effort/thought into it.
I enjoyed the progression from speaking of Regulus's childhood and remembering Sirius going off to Hogwarts all the way to Regulus's death. It was like having a few snapshots in time of him at various stages of development.
There were two scenes/situations I found moving or at least striking. First off, Regulus's interactions with his brother: Sirius's face falling when Regulus is sorted to Slytherin, Regulus brining him food, Sirius promising to always be there for him but really leaving for good, Regulus coming full circle wanting to live up to his brother. Then, of course, comes Regulus and Kreacher. Every time I read a version of that scene, I have to stop and think about it for a moment, because it's rather tragic when it comes down to it. Report Review
I loved this! You've really gone pretty in-depth with Regulus' character and the idea of Sirius being his idol as a young child is exactly how I always thought of them, so well done! It was beautifully written, flowed excellently, and although I would have liked to hear a little more about him at school - exactly who he was talking to, names and things - there was enough information. I really sympathise with Regulus now, poor baby. I really enjoyed it.
Aph xxAuthor's Response: I am so glad you liked it!
I have been wanting to write this one-shot for ages and finally got the time :) He is such an under appreciated character, I thought he deserved his time, especially with what he did at the lake. I also always thought that Sirius would be his Idol, I always imagined them secretly meeting up in the corridors to talk and Regulus would listen to what Sirius would say.
I didn't put that much into the school life cause the one-shot is based on his reflection of the past and I always thought that his school life wasn't something he really wanted to remember.
Thank you so much for the review :)
- Steph - Report Review
WOOO! FIRST REVIEW!
*this is what happens when you link me to things Steph*
This is so amazing Steph, I'm so proud of you *huggles* YOU'RE AMAZING! I love how you've written Regulus (favourite character ever Author's Response: And the cut off review... Now I can't remember the rest and I don't know where I put it. :S
Anyway I will work on what I have (which isn't much but meh).
Ok... I am so so so so so glad you liked it! I loved writing it and I am glad others really enjoy reading it. It just makes me so happy that the things I write are making others happy too :)
And yes Ely I do know Regulus is your favourite character, you can thank Lizzie for the inspiration :)
Anyway, thank you so much for the review! I am so glad again that you liked it! (would never have guessed I was happy :P)
- Steph -
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