Hello, it's MrsPotter from TDA, I think you're filling a request for me now :)
Wow, this was really amazing. It was so well written and I could really feel his pain and guilt. You wrote Draco very well, a lot better than I did on my one-shot (also called Regret, if you'd like to check it out, and don't worry i didn't copy your title,I wrote it well before i read this ) This was such an amazing one-shot, well done. 10/10 :)Author's Response: Hi!
I sorry I couldn't fill that request in the end, what I came up with didn't look good! I hope you find what you're looking for :)
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my story!
Thanks so much for your lovely comments, I'm glad you like it :)
Ah, a popular title in regards to Draco, then! :P
I will definitely read your story.
Thank you! :) Report Review
This is AditiDraco95 from the forums.
This was a good one-shot all in all. I liked reading it, though there were certain parts where some sentences sounded awkward. A few grammar mistakes were scattered about as well. I suggest you re-read the piece and make the edits, or get a Beta - then I'm sure this will be perfect. =)
I liked your plot idea and the scene setting. The thought process was well portrayed too, though in a few places, for example when Draco is thinking of Dumbledore, it was slightly OOC - though you don't have to worry 'cause it wasn't over the top or something. Just a tad bit OOC. Also, perhaps you could add in a bit more "bitterness" and "contempt"... and even "fear" in the narrative - it would be much more effective then.
Over all, this was a good read, the emotions were bubbling on the surface and the story was well-written.
ADAuthor's Response: Hi!
Thank you very much for your review, and constructive criticism, it is much appreciated. I will look to working on these things soon :)
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