Hi there :)
This was a lovely, sad, little one-shot. I love it when things like this take hold of you - its such a nice feeling - and I thought you pulled it off very sucessfully.
I liked the dynamic of the relationship you created: its nice to see couples not working functionaly and how you created the issues that were all seated in Astorias doubt about his feeling was very believable. The argument was good too - both Astoria and Draco staying pretty much in character. Anyway, I pretty much loved and I'm really glad I read it.
The only thing I would say is that it confused me slightly when you switched to second person, but that only threw me for a minute. I can see what you tried to do though that - but maybe you could make the transition a little smoother? Anyway, thats alll I have to say.
Lovely one-shot :)
-ACAuthor's Response: I switched to second person.whoops, I didn;t even realise. I do have a habit of doing it so I'll have a look through and see if I can pick it out. I really happy you liked the couple dynamic. Unfortunately not all relationships end happily so it was fun to play around with the deeper feelings of resentment and mistrust. Thanks so much for your review :) Report Review
Trust is so necessary in a relationship.
Anyway, I loved this one-shot. Their relationship is fairly unusual, yet so real. I also liked the reason behind their marriage.
But it was all so sad and heart-breaking! :'( Draco's point of view was so refreshing and just perfect. You really showed how much he loved her. At first I thought that after Draco's accident everything was going to be okay, but I got my hopes up in vain. *glares* :P
The character of Astoria as well, was well done. All that insecurity that she hid behind her anger. And to think both of their pride was their downfall. I loved that theme in the fic.
No, seriously. I love the way you right angst. It's real, believable and tugs at my heartstrings. Brilliant writing. Loved it.Author's Response: Thank you so much. I love how you have interpreted the characters; it gives me encouragement that I must be doing something right. I'm sorry I couldn't give you a happy ending. It just makes the message stronger. I wrote this at a time when I didn't know what was going to happening to me health wise, so suddenly the message became a lot more personal. Thanks so much for the reivew. Report Review
It was quite interesting, the way you described Draco and Astoria's relationship, on how they were somewhat arranged because of their stature, but did come to love each other. And that, even so, the way their marriage came together causes a lot of doubts and escalating conflicts.
I didn't expect him to be hit by a car. Draco going down by muggle means -- strange thought! It's quite tragic how he really did want to tell Astoria, but couldn't get the message to her. I thought maybe, he might have a last chance, but he didn't.
Writing's the best form of recovery, isn't it? :D Spur of the moment oneshots are the best!Author's Response: You're first paragraph sums up very nicely the whole issue between Draco and Astoria. She wanted to believe he loved her but just couldn't get rid of the nagging doubts.
Yes...muggle means brought down the great Draco Malfoy. I wanted it to be sudden, for him to be surrounded my people but yet so alone. In those final moments there was no one around that knew his name and no one to convey his last thought to Astoria.
And writing definitely is the best form of recovery. it is also the best way to pass those boring hours until you find yourself sufficiently tired to be able to fall asleep when it's hardly dark, there are people walking about and machines beeping and you can't sleep comfortably as you have an IV in your arm. Writing definitely helped :) Report Review
Aww, this was really sad :( It had a lot to say on the themes of love, guilt, and forgiveness. It's also a good example of the importance of never leaving angry. It's just not worth it.
I had never heard this song before, so I went and listened to it, and can definitely see where your inspiration came from.
I think jealousy is a very real and this is something that many couples have to deal with (especially if your husband is as hot as Draco Malfoy ;)). It was a really interesting take on their relationship. Draco seems to have grown up a lot. Yes, he does engage in a bit of a screaming match, but he is frustrated and want to make it right.
I'm glad that you were able to find inspiration, even in the hospital and that you've recovered. :)
~SingularityAuthor's Response: Sometimes I do like writing a sad story and drawing on all those raw emotions. There were some quite powerful themes so I'm glad they came across well.
I think I'd be constantly on edge to if my husband was Draco. It also shows how easy it is though to get the wrong idea. Trust can be easy to lose but so hard to get back.
Thanks for your review :) Report Review
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