Please don't tell me that Aiden's gonna start dating Lauren! She's in second year! 5 WHOLE FRICKEN YEARS YOUNGER!!! I mean, I guess it would be alright if they were both fully-grown adults, but if they start dating now, then Aiden will take everything too damn fast and Lauren will end up without her virginity at 12. And none of us want that to happen. Report Review
Woah. UNBREAKABLE VOW? Don't you think that's a little extreme, Arianna!!! (P.S. Love this chap's quotes, also. THX!!!) Report Review
I seriously love that song. Is it lame that I sang the stanza... out loud... at midnight? oh well. You better love The Fray as much as I do... I'll look forward to more quotes in the next chapters!!! On a sadder and more depressing note, whoever this is about, she has got it REALLY bad. Report Review
I actually want to marry Hugo. He is trés l'epic. Report Review
Good news, I still liked it :) I promise my reviews will get better, I'm super tired right now (not a good excuse I know) You'll probs get inundated with better reviews tomorrow (: ~ZyiiAuthor's Response: Oh that's okay, I'm just glad you're reading! Report Review
Ooo I like it :) ~ZyiiAuthor's Response: Thanks! :) Report Review
How old is Aiden again? His relationship with Lauren is starting to sound a little perverted...Author's Response: This story is going through major updates, once I realized how many plot holes there were. This is one of them, I realized I wasn't making Lauren and Aidan's relationship sound like a sibling relationship like it was meant to be. Report Review
SEQUEL. duhh. you should make a.Author's Response: :):):):):):):):):):):):):):) Report Review
Wait, is Arianna a werewolf? I just got the feeling... I dunno. Anyway, great story, probably my favorite fan-fiction yet. And I remember in the first chapter when she said she couldn't remember a big part of her life and I could relate. I can't remember anything. It scares me. A LOT. Though, I'm not reviewing on my account, I'm using my sister's. I'm actually "Pheonix Patronus"...
Awesome story! :)Author's Response: Well Arianna is not a werewolf, although it's my fault that you think that. I'm going through updates right now, and changing the story around a bit, so the earlier chapters probably won't have continuity with the older ones. I promise to get that fixed as soon as possible, though. Thanks for the review, though. I appreciate them a lot :) Report Review
Woman, what is up with your spacing?! And your paragraph indention's?!Author's Response: Hmm haven't looked at Chapter 1 in a while... I'll check that out. Report Review
That's SOOO sad! I dOnt know what I'd do without my parents. I no this is my 2nd review in one day. But I have no life in the summer. All I do is read, right, eat, sleep, and occasionally go out when mom forces me to change out of pj's and go for runs or walks.Author's Response: Haha same with me during summer :) But I don't mind you leaving two reviews ;)
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I started getting a bit teary eyed also! Really good so far! And I LOVE your name! Mine so awkward. And it makes me stand out, I don't like standing out that much! Well, really good story so far!!! :)Author's Response: Oh, your name isn't awkward, it's cool :) No judging, we're all HP freaks here :P
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I really love your story, it's really well written. However, there are a couple of things I don't quite understand. In chapter 2 you say that Del is an amazing chaser, but in this chapter she says she doesn't play quidich and is a strategist, she also doesn't have good reflexes which a chaser would have. Also, in chapter 1 it says that Aiden is Del's cousin, so surely he would recognise her? Just a few thoughts. Otherwise I think it's really good. :)Author's Response: First off, thanks for the review. Secondly, I am in the process of completely re editing this. I'm not too concerned about things not adding up right now, because I know they won't, especially with the Quidditch, which I changed. It'll hopefully be done as soon as possible, and then I can come back and clean any mistakes I made up. But thanks for pointing that out :) Report Review
NO. What ending is that? I'm sad :( I wanted her to have a big explosion where she yells at Al and them about how they ruined her life and then I wanted to know why they treated her like that...Author's Response: Then check out the sequel! It's called Playing Hide and Seek, and I promise, there will be a big explosion. I've been planning that since the beginning... Report Review
He's like five years older than her... I don't object to age, but in a school setting I do... I hope they don't date. PS: Love the story, I hope Del doesn't die :PAuthor's Response: Oh, they're not, don't worry. I'm rethinking how I wrote that... I think I'm going to write them as a brother/sister relationship as opposed to what it is now. Report Review
Thank Morgana there's a sequel! I'm curious, what will be the title of the sequel?
Well, i just hope you start part 2 soon. You just can't leave us readers hanging like that!Author's Response: The sequel's title is Hiding, and chapter one is up right now! I'm really excited. I'll edit chapter 19 and stick the sequel's title in the AN, though :) Report Review
Oh My Merlin, you can't just leave it at that! :( i mean its a good story, but i really hope you write a sequel! :) thanks for a pretty amazing story though!Author's Response: Yes, there is a sequel :) Thanks! Report Review
You had better make a sequel!
Great job, I read the whole thing in like, two hours, it was that good. Work on the sequel NOW!Author's Response: The sequel's out now! It's called Hiding. Thanks for the review! Report Review
oh good chapter! keen to read more!Author's Response: Thanks! :) Report Review
please update soon i love this story so much and cannot wait to see what happens! 10/10Author's Response: Thank you so much! Report Review
Ahhh update update update!Author's Response: Exchange is finished but there's a sequel called Hiding that's up. Report Review
This is really good, ah hooked! But a cliffie?! I wonder what Al is gonna do now??? Oh, though I'd point that theres really weird spacing but other than that...AMAZING chapter! :)Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try to fix the spacing... thanks for pointing it out :)
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Hey there :) just a nice review to say how much I love the story so far. You have such an easy to follow writing style that makes your story so easy to get into. I must say, I wasn't expecting the chapter to end quite like that :L definitely looking forward to reading more.
Just to finish up, I would really appreciate it if you could have a quick look at my next gen story and give me some feedback on it. I'll be sure to keep reviewing :)Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the review, I appreciate it :) I hope the rest of the story stays consistant for you :S Anyway, I'd love to look at your story. I'll do that as soon as I can :)
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WHY DOES SHE ALWAYS HAVE DOUBTS! It's extremely frustrating how indecisive she is.Author's Response: Welcome to my life. Del has my incredibly inconveinient indecisive traits. Report Review
Del is kind of a bitch. I mean, I get it that she had a terrible childhood and was bullied by people she thought were her friends, but shouldn't that make her realize how horrible it makes you feel instead of wanting revenge? And she obviously knows she's horrid if she was so convinced she could heartlessly crush people she bet her life on it. Also, I don't think it's very realistic that her friends turned on her because they realized she wasn't pretty. I mean, maybe they'd of stopped being friends with her but they wouldn't have any reason to bully her.
It's exciting and well-written though, and the plot is good.Author's Response: Thank you for being entirely honest with this review! Mostly I just get, 'OMG THIS IS SO GOOD UPDATE QUICKLY', and I also just realized how incredibly arrogant that sounded. But regardless, thank you for being honest.
So, the bitch part. Keep in mind that you're only on Chapter 8. I'm probably not giving you too much of a spoiler by telling you that she realizes that revenge is bad later in the story. But you do make a good point with the horrid crushing thing. I am editing the story... I'd read back, it might make a bit more sense to you.
And again, I'm editing. I realize that the reason she was bullied, with the friend thing. But I have a plot that I need to pick up on, which is part of the reason why I'm editing.
~Delia Report Review
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