Again, you've written a fantastic chapter! The depth of detail that you've provided makes your story stand out from about all other stories about McGonagall I've seen. The way that you explore the intersections of the magical and Muggle worlds is amazing to read, and your portrayal of the wizards' fear of Muggle science is highly believable. I wish that more authors would do something with it rather than continue following JKR's lead in the portrayal of Muggles - the technological advances of the mid-20th century were terrifying enough for Muggles, making it almost impossible to imagine how terrifying they must have been to wizards, whose world became more threatened as science and technology made detection almost inevitable.
I am rather curious about the fact that the McGonagalls and their contemporaries seem trapped in a Victorian universe. While the magical world is "behind" the Muggle one in many ways, I imagine that the Hogwarts Express would have already been in use before the late 1930s - trains having been used by Muggles for eighty years by that point. But that's just my opinion, and I'm glad enough to see an author exploiting the odd historical disconnect between the Muggle and magical worlds.Author's Response: Thank you for the review. As for the Hogwarts Express, according to the Harry Potter wikia it was made in 1936 and was originally steam, not magical. The reason why I put McGonagall's generation in a Victorian setting is because there is this wide dichotomy between the old generation and the new. McGonagall, Dumbledore, the Malfoys, and other older purebloods still tend to dress in robes and exhibit manners typical of that time period whereas the younger pureblood generation (Ron and Sirius noteably although the latter's case the result of social rebellion) have absorbed quite a bit of Muggle culture. For example, in the fourth book Mr. Weasley doesn't know how to dress as a Muggle, but Ron apparently has a collection of denim jeans enough to where Hermione makes the mistake in grabbing an old pair in the 7th book. I imagine that McGonagall's generation was on the precipice of a cultural revolution that occurred in the mid-20th century where an influx of Muggle ideas were seeping into the Wizarding World (and thus allowing Voldemort to gain a foothold among the purebloods who recoiled from anything Muggle with a knee-jerk reaction)... Of course, I may be overthinking the entire thing. Report Review
It has been days/weeks/months since I came across such a wonderful exposition of the theoretical analysis between the muggle and magical worlds. (The last I read, "The Name of the Wind" called magic "sympathy" and all who had will power could practise it, with efficient mental force on the binding of objects to the naturally existing forces.)
Needless, I loved the part where you discuss the pros and cons of magic in the violent world of muggles! It's, frankly, insightful, and enlightening. :D
Keep it up! :D
I'd love to read more theories of yours, too; if you have them unwritten yet, I request you to key-board them up here. Please...?
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Um. .yea. You have discovered a little something called a "market inefficiency", which means you see where Rowling was weak in her books (Muggle social and tech development in light of a magical world) and you have built upon it, very shrewdly, I might add. You should have your ears boxed if you don't continue writing fantasy/sci fi. Report Review
This was fantastic - creative plot, well-crafted characters, clear writing, and just the right amount of suspense. That first scene was a perfect way to begin, drawing me in right away with its melding of magic and Muggle technology. That ray gun is excitingly unique for a Potterverse story, and I'm curious as to how you'll make use of it and its creation throughout the remainder of this story.
This portrayal of Minerva is a new one for me, and I like it very much because it showcases both her magical and intellectual abilities. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of her and this story. :) Report Review
I like this a lot. It's well written and a novel idea! Report Review
I love the way you've set everything up here; your transitions from past to present flow very nicely. I think all your indirect characterization reveals excellent writing skills, and you've got the makings of a fantastic plot to boot.
I'm not sure if you'll go into the past from here or continue on this track; and I have to say, I wouldn't mind either! I think any direction you go with this is bound to be superb, and I look forward to reading more. You can definitely draw a reader in; I'll be anxiously awaiting the next update.
Thanks for the surprising and interesting read (: Report Review
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