I'm so sorry it took me so long to get to this ):
Another lovely chapter! I love how you're developing their relationship, so slowly and gently, exactly how I'd imagine Percy to work. (Also I laughed at the they meet on a weekly-basis. How Percy-like to have his meeting intervals worked out) I also love how they talk about things like how authoritative he is and all instead of regular teenage things, because he's far from. Ahh, wonderful job, dear, cannot wait for more!Author's Response: Hello! No, don't worry! I don't mind at all :)
I have enjoyed writing a lot of Summer Skin, though I must admit that I have hit a bit of a rut with this one. I miss filling in the blanks with, like you say, Percy-type things, and hopefully my muse for this one will return :) I have to coax it out of hiding! Authoritative really is how I picture Percy, but still a bit too geeky - so much so that you can't really take him seriously, haha!
I'm really glad you liked this; thank you for the fab review! xxx Report Review
Hi there! It's me with your horribly belated review :)
So far, I really love this first chapter. It sets the scene perfectly for the timescale, and also for Percy and Penelope's relationship. I love how you've set it during Herbology too, and your little details, like Sprout getting dung all over Percy's books and his blushing and watching his brothers, really make this chapter special.
I think you've characterised Percy really well so far too. He is pompous and knows it, but also worries about how people percieve him; I think this is exactly how he'd be, trying to be the 'sensible brother'! He takes pride in his work and knowledge to the point of annoyance, and i think you created that well too - trying to impress and expecting to succeed.
I love all the little details and descriptions you put in, like the description of how Percy was trying to get to the greenhouse, and ultimately displaying his character rather well, as well as why he liked Herbology. It was really sweet and made us feel a lot closer to him! I also like how he noticed Penelope - with this shy interest, and how he described her, and tried to talk to her. Poor Percy, getting laughed at! But already I like Penny, because she was being nice to him when everyone was giggling.
Overall, I really love this! 10/10, definitely want to read more :)
~TGKAuthor's Response: Helloo! Thank you so much! I tried to make sure the first chapter at least was bright and very Percy-like. I wanted to show the transition into him turning into a lovesick puppy haha, so set up something to compare it to straight away! Ahh, the little things are the bits I always feel I don't pay enough attention to. It's fantastic to know you felt I did here :)
I completely agree - I was a bit worried about including the part where he gets the question wrong, but then I figured that of course he wouldn't be utterly perfect. It's obvious he's not, especially from later books where he's anti-Harry. But yet, yeah, there is that pompous side to him, and people know it, so in a way he's the brunt of their jokes.
I'm really glad you liked this chapter, and it means loads to get such a thoughtful response from you! Thank you! Laura x Report Review
WHATS HAPPENING TO ME I AM FINDING PERCY LIKABLE!!! Wow. if you can do THAT... well thats just a rare gem of a talent right there.
Apart from that, its very refreshing to see a percy/penelope story. usually its the same couples over and over again (i admit that im guilty of it as the author of a rose/scorpius story).
so keep writing! good job, best of luck to you and congratulations on achieving the impossible!Author's Response: Hahah, thank you so much! Were you not a Percy fan beforehand?! He is so cutesy/geeky! :P & I'm really glad you liked this!
Thank you so much, though, for the fabulous review! It's so kind of you and I really appreciate it. There will most definitely be more to come! L xxx Report Review
Laura dear, this story is so adorable! Not in a omg I'm so happy they're all cutesey together way, but because this Percy is so believable! I can imagine this happening and him slowly learning how to interact with a girl like this. I love your interpretation of Percy and I'm so excited to see more of Penelope! Wonderful job so far!Author's Response: Hello!
OH, YOU! Thank you so so much! I'm so glad you liked it, and that you thought Percy was believable, and I don't know what else to say! Thank you!
I tried tons to make it realistic, because Percy isn't romantic at all - he's nerdy, pompous and yet a little self conscious, so for him to start reciting poetry to her or having elaborate thoughts about how beautiful she was, it just would be completely... ick! :P
Thank you so much! You're the best! L xxx Report Review
I remember reading this in Summary Help and making a mental note to check this out, because it sounded so lovely! And I was so pleased to find out that I was correct. :)
Poor Percy is such an underloved character, so I'm looking forward to him being in this story! He's so loveably awkward in this - when he talk a bit too loud, or gets the question wrong. You really can't help but love him! He's definitely endeared himself to me.
The way you wrote this was beautiful - it flowed so nicely and the descriptions were wonderful. It felt light and breezy, if that makes sense. :P
I can't wait to read more of this. Very enjoyable! I liked everything about it. :) Good job.Author's Response: Helloo!
THANK YOU! So much! This review was lovely! You're a star, thank you.
I completely agree! I know a lot of people don't like him for betraying the Weasleys but he's always been someone I am fascinated with. I totally picture him to be uber geeky and cringy, without realising it himself.
Ohhh, thanks so, so much. I worried that there wasn't enough of the 'light and breezy' element to it, hahah! I wanted this to be my break from angst. It's so so inspiring that you thought it was good.
Thanks again, you're the best! L xxx Report Review
I think this is the first Percy/Penelope story I've ever read, and you do an amazing job bringing him to life! It's so interesting to see what goes on in that little head of his. I also love the awkwardness as he tries to make conversation with Penelope but fails miserably. Great work so far! I can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for having a read of this! It's so kind of you! I didn't want to douse the fic in romance etc right from the word go, because I figured Percy hasn't had much experience with girls really. He's a geek...a Weasley geek, and so having him uber awkward made sense! Thank you tons, again! You're brilliant! :D x Report Review
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