Another lovely one-shot! You written the characters of Snape and Voldemort so well, its incredible. Honestly, your work can pass as Rowling, which is really, REALLY impressive.
I love how you had Snape describe the Longbottoms and the Potters, especially the way you had him describe Lily. That was so cruel for Voldemort to mock, but then again, that's Voldemort.
The way you written Snape's selfishness is so wonderful and accurate, I almost pitied him. It made me feel so disgusted with him, that he'd be so foolish to ask for her to be spared and kill the rest of them, but I love it because you written it so well.
The dialogue exchange between master and servant was magnificent. I can actually feel the tension between them and the malice that Voldy was feeling.
You're such a wonderful writer! I envy your writing skills, I really do. I loved how you were able to work and handle one of the biggest, important things that happened in Harry Potter, and turn it into something amazing. 10/10!Author's Response: These stories were posted a while ago, and I stopped looking for new reviews ages ago, which is why I never noticed yours!! Thank you so much!! You are FAR too kind, for I'm only an amateur that strives for the kind of writing that Rowling does.
Thank you! I guess Voldemort might be a little OoC in this, but I always took him to be cruel and heartless, even towards his own servants.
I swear, all of your pretty words make me smile wider than I can ever remember smiling!! You really are way too kind, and you haven't got much to envy! You yourself are a fantastic writer, and when I find the time, I must review some of your latest chapters! (I've read them, just had no time to review lately!)
Anyways, thank you, thank you, thank you!!! Keep up the fantabulous work, and stay amazing!
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I am giving you your first review! I like this and you should post something immediately because its not bad at all! Though, I'm not sure if you're going to keep using Voldemort's real name or not, i'm excited to read more and you should keep up the good work. I was able to sense Snape's confusion and his loyalty wavering and I'll be excited to see where else you go with it!Author's Response: Yay!! Finally! I've got bits and pieces of upcoming chapters, just its hard to work out all the kinks, and find time to write! I have exams coming up next week :$ I'd like to have one come out very soon though, and a review is my inspiration!
I kind of used the first name because it's on more of a personal level with Voldemort.. From this view, the view of his most trusted death eater, he isn't simply a man to be feared, who's name is Voldemort... he was a person with a name :P But I probably will start switching back again when the plot gets going :P I also have Voldemort pictured as he would have been before his return in GoF, because that was before he had been transformed.. I pictured him as still somewhat human, however human Lord V can be... :P just a fun fact!
I find Severus a hard character to write sometimes (which is why its always good to have someone assist you with your writing) so I'm really glad you could feel Severus' emotion!!
Thanks a lot for a review! As another author once said, a review is like air for an author- necissary to continue with the tasks ahead of you.
So, thanks again, and Happy Writing,
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