This was incredible, really! You portrayed the Order realistically - it wasn't sunshine and butterflies, it was gritty and hard work and draining.
Above all, they were soldiers. I loved how you repeated this idea, how they might have been children by age, barely out of their teens, but they were forced to deal with adult things and fight for not only their lives, but for the lives of thousands of others.
"But see, the Order symbolizes something much more than money or glory." "...moulding themselves into something greater than they are..." I just thought those two quotes worked perfectly. Actually, there were so many lines in here that I wanted to quote! :)
I liked your characterization, too. They were mature and I felt attached to them. I loved the proposal, too - it was perfect.
They never stopped being soldiers. That and that last line made me shiver.
This was truly beautiful and you managed to get so much across in so few words. Very, very well done! ♥Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it :) Thanks for the read! Report Review
This is an excellent one-shot that gives real depth in such a short amount of words (well, not that short - but it accomplishes a lot without having to be a multi-chaptered story). I have always been fascinated with the idea of the Marauders and their era of classmates being caught up in a war after barely graduating from school.
The war defined them so much because they never had the chance to experience life without it, they were defined by their actions as soldiers and they died as such, never getting to know a world where they could be more than that. I think it's tragic and you've beautifully captured that whole idea here.
The characters are all well portrayed, I love the proposal coming out of this urgency to grasp on to the good in life, and forge some sort of security for one another. It's exactly as I'd imagine it would be.
The last line is just hauntingly beautiful. Favourited and hanks for a great read!Author's Response: The Marauder era is my absolute favourite; there's so much to write about and even the war, to me, is like solving a great big mystery. I expect I'll be writing more about this same general topic in the future. Thanks for your review :) Report Review
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