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Review #1, by MissMdsty One Shot.

26th March 2013:
Hello!

What a sweet and funny one-shot! I think Hogwarts during the 7th year would've been terrible (which is why I'm kind of thankful that JKR didn't take us back there in DH. It wouldn't be the Hogwarts of our childhood if we had seen how it had changed).

I can totally understand why Ginny would need a break from it all. It must've been emotionally exhausting for her, with her brother and boyfriend on the run, her family in hiding. As far as female characters go, Ginny is one of the strongest females we have in the series and your depiction of her here really brought that out! She is both strong and humorous, and seems perfectly capable of giving Smith a piece of her mind.

I liked their interactions, the way in which you described the characters in relation to each other! I also enjoyed the way in which you described the scenery and the location. The writing flows smoothly, I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes!

Good job! It was a good story!

Author's Response: Hey MissMdsty, thanks very much for stopping by to review, very much appreciated! :) Saw your thread had been hit up big time with requests, so thanks very much for taking the time to review mine :)

I'm delighted you enjoyed it and thought it was a good escape for Ginny in such a dark time. You got exactly what I was going for with the story, so really pleased it came across on the page that way, thank you. And yes, I absolutely agree, DH would've tarnished Hogwarts for all of us if she had gone too far into detail about what happened... and ultimately made it a lot harder for creative licence in fanfic to guess what would've happened in the stories that revolve around DH in Hogwarts lol, so thanks JKR!!! :D

Thank you very much for the review, much appreciated! Bobby xx


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Review #2, by ravenclaw_princess One Shot.

11th November 2011:
Poor Ginny. I could really sense her irritation in this story. She just wanted to play Quidditch and get away from it all an Zach was just getting in the way. He did have a fair point that Ginny had hardly asked him nicely for the quaffle, but it's not like he was using it. I could see her getting more and more annoyed with every passing second, especially with his smug little comments. Zach knew he had the power and milked it for all he could.

That boy's hygiene is terrible. Two years without washing a pair of socks!!! That's just gross. I'd hate to know what's growing in them.

The story was a well written and I don't notice any major grammar or spelling issues. The flow was good too. There was quite a lot of banter going on between the two and I would have given up and walked away, but Ginny is stubborn and doesn't let anyone walk over her and this really came through. Well done.

Author's Response: Hi, thanks for the review, I'm just sorry about the horribly long time it's taken me to reply to it. Sorry about that! I'm glad to hear you enjoyed this one shot, something a bit different, it was for a challenge so many years ago on another site. I really enjoyed writing it for that reason - Ginny goes off like a fire cracker. Actually, I think to date this is the first and only thing I have written from Ginny's POV that I've actually liked and think I've done her character justice. Interesting lol. Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it :) Bobby xx

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Review #3, by Aiedail One Shot.

7th September 2011:
I've never even considered this pairing before! Which is odd, maybe, because they were in Dumbledore's Army together. I like their banter as well--it's well-put, sometimes a little too drawn out for me personally, but it's fitting to their relationship and gives us a really good idea of what their characters are like.

I can get into Ginny's mind here--you feel that she is irked not only because Zach is rude to her, but because while her world is crumbling around her and she can do nothing about it, Quidditch is like her escape from reality. And then here ZS is, being a nuisance. I also like that she's dutifully enraged at the prospects of treating a Quaffle like a cushion. I know that as a writer I'd be horrified if someone was using like, expensive stationery as scratch paper or something similar!

And...oh dear, men and their hygiene! Although I've never personally met a guy who wears socks he hasn't washed in two years D:

It's a bit hard to imagine--students being allowed out and about while the Death Eaters were reigning over Hogwarts--but creative licence is a beautiful thing heh. I think it's a nice little story you have; your writing is good, although I'd always recommend a couple well-placed commas and an extra look-over to pick out unnecessary words before posting. :) Overall wonderful job, though! :D

-lily

Author's Response: Hi Lily, how're you going? You spell your name the same as my daughter, that's cool :)

Thanks for your review, much appreciated and thank you for your honesty. I'll have to get around to investigating during a re-read or something when I get the time. Thanks for the heads up. I'm glad you enjoyed this though (and clearly you've never met my brother - he inspired the sock thing, ew I know!) and thanks for taking the time to review in depth, really appreciate it :) Bobby xx


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