LOVE the story!! really interesting and well written!
i love the plot and the language difficulties!
please update soon cuz i cant wait to read more! Report Review
I love this story and i love your banner!! who made it? Report Review
This is sooo cute. Perhaps you could also add another pairing in to give you more things to write about Report Review
Great chapter, I loved it. XD
I'd just read through it again as there were a few spelling mistakes like the one in the last paragraph: waste-waist, otherwise you're talking about rubbish.
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, and to how Jack is going to react to this news.
Please update as soon as you can. Report Review
That was an amazing chapter! I love how Eva is attempting English a lot, it adds a little more to her personality (: Dom is awesome as well, but my favourite has to be James. Update soon! (: Report Review
WHY CAN'T ALL GUYS BE LIKE JAMES? WAH!Author's Response: Haha, I ask myself the same question. It sucks he only exists in my imagination! Report Review
I loved the whole convo between longbottom and freddy!Author's Response: I am glad you did :) Report Review
This is really good, I like the style :) keep it up!Author's Response: Thank you, that is so lovely to hear! Report Review
awwhh so cutee :) i love James, he was soo sweet :) i really like the Fench in these storys. its like revising and reading a story at the same time:)Author's Response: Haha thank you! I do too, I read a lot of stories where he is very stuck up so I wanted to make him nicer :)
Thank you so much for the review! x Report Review
Great chapter!! XD
I can't wait to read what's going to happen next. Please update as soon as you can.Author's Response: Thank you, that is lovely to hear! I shall :) Report Review
THis was an okay chapter... not as interesting at the first, but I guess it's because of the necessary introductions. I'm looking forward to when she gets settled in and the exciting stuff actually starts. (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: That's what I was worried about, It is hard with all the detail that needs to be added in. Hopefully you enjoy the next chapter more.
Thanks for the review :) Report Review
Great chapter, very funny XD
Is she going to start learning more English soon?
I can't wait to read the next chapter, please continue as soon as you can. :)Author's Response: Thank you! I was a bit worried it wouldn't be funny so that is nice to hear! I will update as soon as I can! Report Review
Great chapter, very funny XD
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next, so please continue as soon as you can.Author's Response: It shouldn't be very far off! Thank you very much for the review :) Report Review
Great idea, I can't wait to see the story to develop further! By the way, "Beauxbatons" has an "x" in it. (:
~KhanhAuthor's Response: I actually thought I had changed it, but I lost some of my edits because my laptop died, so when I re-did them I must have missed that one. It will be fixed next chapter! Thanks for the review, I am glad you like it :) Report Review
great story so far, please update soonAuthor's Response: Thank you very much! I will update as soon as I can :) Report Review
Haha, this is very cute! I love the fact that she can't speak english that well and her brother is helping her out, but not really! Will she eventually get better at it? And will she make it into Gryfinndor with Dominique?Author's Response: I am glad you like it! The rest will have to remain a surprise! Thanks for the review :)
Hello! I wanted to review your story! Congrats on getting your first one up. It's so exciting isn't it?
You've handled such a hard storyline, I think, very well. Not a lot of people can do the foreign exchange student thing very well, but I feel like you've got a really promising start to it. Eva seems real, and so does her family. The reason she's moving makes sense, and isn't far-fetched.
I have a few suggestions to help! First, I think you spelled Beaubatons wrong. I'm pretty sure there's an "x" in there, as in "Beauxbatons." In order to avoid a more cliche path, I wouldn't have Jake be so close to James that he runs with the Marauders. Of course James would have lots of friends, if you gave a tweak to their relationship, like they were potions partners, or something, it would make it all more realistic.
I also wasn't sure why Eva wouldn't know English. If Jake was made to learn French, then why wouldn't Eva have been introduced to English, especially if both Jake and her father used English as their main language. Maybe she wouldn't be fluent, but she'd understand more than most I think.
I really enjoyed your descriptions, which were simple and lovely. I also really enjoyed your dialogue. It was natural, and flowed. There were some great one-liners there.
Anyways, I think this is a very promising start! Keep going!Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I actually thought I had fixed up the 'beauxbatons' spelling errors, as I had realised I had made them, so I will defiantly make sure that it is correct next chapter.
I am glad you liked the dialogue, the whole french idea was a bit of a spur of the moment thing, I think I just imagined that her whole family including father spoke french, and her mother did not speak english either, so she did not really have any need for it, but I guess that did not come through in my writing, I am still getting used to how to apply my thoughts to paper.
Thanks for the positive message, and your feedback is really helpful :) Report Review
I really like this as a start, really enjoyed it! :) Just a tip for future chapters, maybe put the pieces of dialogue that are said in French in italics so it's easier to know when someone's speaking in French or English, but yes, it's real good so far! Keep it up!Author's Response: That is actually a really great idea, I will do that in future chapters, as I was worried it would be confusing, especially as the french dialogue is written in english (if that makes sense). Thank you for sharing your wonderful ideas, and thank you for the review! Report Review
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